Hermione seems a bit too promiscuous for this story. One second she's snogging and having the time of her life with Ron, then all of a sudden, WHAM! "I'm in love with Harry."

AWWWW!!!(*squeals*) that was sooo romantic!!
that was so sweet! you're really good at this!!
GREAT JOB!!

Sorry to tell you this but not being able to eat nor sleep is infatuation not love. Love is a desire to be around them all the time. Love is when you want to be better than you are for that person. Love is when you would do anything for their happiness. Just thought you would like to know for your writing.

Wow that was really good. I was just sitting here surfing the M's and I was on the first page and I just picked it! Usually I don't pick POV fic's because I hate the way they say 'I' constantly it's so annoying but this was really good I actually forgot it was in someone's POV! Thanks,
Pheonix Girl92

Wow, I was going to ask you to think about adding more chapters to this story but I just noticed the date. Anyways, I loved it and I am going see if you have written anything else.

Ta for now,
Charlotte

awww, what a cute fic! makes you feel fuzzy all over! good job!

Liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it, liked it Wonderful writing, really cute, lovely story good job!

Awwwwwwwwwww!!!! :tumbup:
That was cute! Yay! We can use it for the site!! Woooooo!!!!!

awww...that was great!!! i love how u put the pumpkin pie in there....wonderful!

Awww...that's sooo sweet! (i look exactly like this right now)

Awww! ^_^ That was great! I'm glad they got togehter in the end! Kind of feel sorry for Ron though, but as he said...they are meant for each other!

Yay Sunshine!!!! You rule girl!!!!! I just really love the fic!!!! It's now one of my favourites, do you mind if I put it in my signature??? Let me know what you think!!!

it is a good thing. to taste so good and sweet as pumpkin pie. whip cream, ice cream, cobbler. * drools * it is a very good thing.

Too coincidental. Harry realises his feelings for Hermione just as she breaks up with Ron and she figures out his feelings, and Ron has discovered this too and isn't angry or jealous or affected at all by the fact that he just broke up with the girl he liked?

Still, it could have been worse. Much worse So I'd say it was pretty good for a first fic and hopefully next time we'll get something slightly more interesting ~_^