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I loved this little story from the moment I found it. I've always loved the Dickinson poem (and I did catch that the title was from another poem of hers), and I thought it was worked in perfectly. I also loved that you give Hermione a moment to be a "nobody" - she's always so focused, so driven, so determined to plan everything - and it makes sense that she would need a moment to feel, to forget. Lovely - please keep writing. |
Author Feedback: Thank you very much, HarmonyLover! And yes, you are the first to catch that the title was from another Dickinson piece. Though most would immediately apply it to Harry's life, I really think Hermione needs some anonymity as well. Thank you for letting me know what you thought of this! |
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Fantastic fic! Short, sweet and simply lovely. The poem at the end provided an excellent framework for Hermione's mind during the fic and encourages the reader to think again about the way the story unfolded. I absolutely adored the sentiment behind the line "His mind reminded him that it was Hermione; his heart promptly replied that of course it was. " I feel it perfectly encapsulates the confusion and emotion and the absolute rightness of of them pair of them. |
Author Feedback: Thank you so much! The poem struck me at the most random moment while I re-read it. And as for the line, "His mind reminded him that it was Hermione; his heart replied promptly that of course it was," I'm glad you thought it made sense. I wasn't sure it did, at first. Your review was thoughtful and thorough, and thank you for taking the time to review! |
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Wow, this is such a great fic. I love the narrative of it and of course the way you matched emily's poem with the story, that was wonderful. I didn't know this poet before but now thanks to this fic i have started to read a couple of other poems from her, they're really nice, ty for that  |
Author Feedback: Emily Dickinson is absolutely amazing. End of story.  Glad I helped you meet her!
Anyway, thank you so much for reviewing this fic-- it was so strange that I wasn't sure what kind of reception it was going to get. But I'm glad you liked it! |
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Excellent! You have such a way of creating a believable scene; it felt like I was actually there on the doorstep with the pair, watching them. You have found a great sweet-and-sour balance here, which I admire. You don't heap on the fluff, but I don't feel like my soul is getting sucked out by angst either.
I especially liked the note on which you ended this story. You wrapped up the fluffy moment nicely and dropped all of your readers back to reality, but you managed to avoid abruptly tearing the pink, fluffy cloud out from under us. An excellent ending to a lovely bit of work. Keep it up and ignore any flames! |
Author Feedback: Thank you so much, cuteybearkel! As I said, this was a strange little piece, but I liked it so much I felt like I had to post it.  I'm very attached to what I write.
Since this piece takes place during the war, I really had to bring the two back down to earth. It's part of what makes Harry/Hermione what it is, if that makes sense. With Ginny, Harry separates from who he is completely, whereas with Hermione, he is able to escape without ignoring his life and who he is. I hope that atrociously structured sentence makes sense...? |
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HcintaHrUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 30/06/09
As always, your stories are a pleasure to read!Innocent and sweet, the tone almost similar to canon. Pls keep writing. |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you enjoyed this! It's nice to know that my stories are a pleasure for you! |
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MikeSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 25/06/09
Wow! I really liked this. It packed a very subtle wallop. You painted a very tender portrait. Great job! |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you liked this one! It's a bit strange, but I'm rather fond of it now. And now the one shot plot bunnies are attacking (thank you, Miss Dickinson), which can't be good for 'Rhythms' or 'That Old House'. |
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Wow, your other reviewers went way deeper then I'm gonna go. Basically...I enjoyed your story, plain and simple. I'm not suprised because I like your stuff, you write well. What I got from this was that two kids were basically just taking five minutes to be kids, to stand in the rain with their mouths open, enjoying the moment and sharing it with each other.  |
Author Feedback: It's all right! Your interpretation was just as good as any other. I'm glad you enjoyed this enough to review! |
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LockeSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 25/06/09
Welcome back. You were quiet for so long i thought you died. Anywho, strange is a pretty accurate word here. The Emily Dickinson poem fits, and the summary makes a sort of sense. Honestly, the only thing I dont get is why is Hermione at Grimmauld Place and what are they talking about with the i wish you didn't have to be here conversation. Is there a backstory i'm not getting here? Other than that, i rather enjoyed it. It was fun to read. |
Author Feedback: Glad it gave you some enjoyment, Locke! (And no, I haven't died. Just suffering from some good, old-fashioned writer's block.)
Now, the reason Hermione's at Grimmauld... not entirely certain myself. But, my mind places this somewhere during DH, during their time there. In which case they would be pretty upset that they had to be there. But, as I said, it's kind of a vague placement on the time line. Ridiculous, I know...
Thanks for reviewing! |
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SearcySigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 24/06/09
I think the connection between the title, the summary and the story itself revolves around the who we are that people see and the who we are that only we see. This story brings the latter to the forefront in Harry and Hermione finding that there is much more to them and their relationship. That is probably quie wide of the mark but it is what I took from the piece, which is wonderfully written. I wish you and your muse the best of luck in overcoming your writer's block and thank you for sharing this jewel with us. |
Author Feedback: Thank you for the thoughtful review, Searcy! There are so many connections, some vague and some clear, that I'm not sure that I can articulate them all. But you did what I couldn't, and you did so excellently! I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece, and I'll do my best to chip away at that writer's block... |
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Tank03Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 24/06/09
That was a charming little story that really lifted my mood on a dreary day. I'll admit that the title baffles me but I'm sure you have your reasons.
Overall this was just perfectly sweet. I did find the mention of Cho a bit awkward; what girl wants to hear the boy she just kissed immediately mention his ex? But overall this was great. Maybe it was because I was in a bit of a bad mood before I read this but I can't escape the feeling that this was...comfortable??...(if that makes any sense).
Keep up the great work (hope you pass your writers block on Rhthyms and That Old House soon)and thanks so much for sharing this; it really picked up my day! |
Author Feedback: Thank you for letting me know you liked it! This was, perhaps, one of the strangest things I've ever written, so I'm not even sure the title completely makes sense to me. It's from another Emily Dickinson poem, so that might explain things a bit.
As for the mention of Cho: it is awkward, and I'm sure Hermione recognizes it, but she knows Harry well enough to not take it too personally. (Of course, it could be the weird mood I was in when I wrote this... )
Harry and Hermione have such a comfortable relationship, I have trouble writing it any other way.
I'm so glad this helped to lift your spirits! That's why I write-- for the most part. I enjoy it as well.
Thank you again for the lovely review! |
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