wll idk how much i can say to this other than it's perfectly brilliant. as it is my thoughts are all jumbled as (as you've may have noticed or realized) i'm a very opinionated person and a linear thinker, too, so my thoughts tend t jump from one thing to another with the slightest bit of correlation, so i'll try to keep this organized with the aid of numbers lol.
1. i love that t starts out as a monologue, i think that that makes it all the more raw. dialogue, s fantastic as it is reveals far less. a monologue allows the reader to be blase, to be as emotional as they want without having to control it or restrain it for the sake of propriety and society... sadly, i'm crap at monologues, but you, my dear, and bleeping brilliant at it. thank you!
2. adore one word titles, i know that's a bit random, but i just do. admittedly, i originally thought that this might be a plethora of moments displaying how ti all came to be, this was also a very intriguing approach to tackling that title, fit it wonderfully.
3. wish it wasnt a kiss on the forehead. 
thank you for mentioning this i hadnt realized i'd missed out on so much while on hiatus, thank god i had you to inform me... off to read more now, adio! |
Author Feedback: Yes I do know that you are very opinionated and I love your linear thinking non-correlated mind so I am as pleased as punch that you like this one. I went with the monologue idea as I thought it was the best way to bring out the essence of Hermione and her dilemma and as you so aptly pointed out, I wanted the reader to feel the moment without having to intrepret it through the words of others. Lol... I'll have to remember next time no forehead kiss.
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HazelmistSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 04/06/09
I liked the quote by Susan B. Anthony and how the theme of moments is seen throughout. It's nice again that you end with that cute family moment. I find it very hard to believe that Hermione would leave Ron like that in front of everyone, but I guess everyone reaches their breaking point and I love that moment in DH outside the tent!! |
Author Feedback: Whenever Hermione is overtly emotional she tends to explode so to speak... i.e. her slapping Malfoy in book 3, and her hitting Ron with the birds in book 6. It was that Hermione mindset I had in mind when I wrote this piece. I am greatful for your taking the time to read and review. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 02/06/09
Beautiful words, I for one do not understand, and may never understand WHY? J.K. Rowling didn't seem to think that Harry & Hermione are the perfecrt fit.... Nothing against RON OR GINNY because I do happen to like their characters, Its just that they do not make sense Harry & Ginny / Ron & Hermione 
This was a great one shot. |
Author Feedback: I don't think any of us will ever understand her thought process on that score. |
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I loved it! I always love your stories, but it was nice to read such a short bit of fluff. They don't seem to be posted as often now. Thank you! |
Author Feedback: Glad I could provide you with some fluff. Thanks for reading. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 02/06/09
I liked it but I wish you spent time to say how Harry and her finally got together. |
Author Feedback: You have gotten your wish, check out "Choices" for his POV. |
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gingercatSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 02/06/09
The way it should have been all along. What was JKR thinking?
Glad to see you back....it has been awhile. Looking forward to more stories from you.  |
Author Feedback: Lol... what was she thinking indeed.
It has been awhile hasn't it. I seem to be getting back into the flow of writing. I'm finally finishing up always wanted and have just posted Harry's POV of this under the title "Choices".
Thanks for reading. |
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Awe this was a cute story. I can't wait to see what you come up with next. Great job! |
Author Feedback: Thank you for reading and reviewing. Harry's view is now posted under the title "Choices", I'd love to know what you think. |
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Loved this. Am sick of fics that involve Harry and Hermione going behind their spouses' backs before divorcing them and marrying each other. I love imagining the Weasleys' reaction to Harry and Hermione after she breaks things off with Ron. |
Author Feedback: You may be getting your wish as to seeing the Weasley's reactions thanks to apaidan having given me an idea for another one-shot.
Oh for Harry's POV, check out my new piece "Choices". |
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I love short story.
It's makes me happy to know that Harry and Hermione are together.
Just like that song called ( For the moment like this) beautiful song But I for gotten who sing it?
wonderful,excellent story.
real top stuff.
I hope that you will continue and make a new story.
For me to read soon, but till then have real jolly good week and weekend.
pleases continue it.
 Looney Warner Mouse " Good Morning and good after noon and good night and good luck!"
fade out to black. |
Author Feedback: I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I have added Harry's perspective to the story, its called "Choices" I would love to know what you think. |
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I actually like this version better. It seems more complete. The other one was lacking of some character development, especially Harry, and you have corrected that.
Congrats!
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Author Feedback: This version was indeed more complete. Here I was able to tell the whole story not just the bit I had told before and I think that made a world of difference. |
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It was really reallyshort, but I liked it. Congrats for this shot!
sakura_txell |
Author Feedback: I'm presently revising it so hopefully it'll be a bit longer. I may make it a two shot just to give you Harry's side.
I've posted the revised edition...would love to know wha you think.
Searcy |
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LockeSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 01/06/09
you are right about the ending, it is pretty bad. other tha that, loved it. The background into how Hermione came to love Harry while camping was pretty great. The quote in the beginning made it for me, i love quotes and are drawn in by them. |
Author Feedback: I am a quote devotee as well so when the idea came to me I went looking for something to sum up the moment and ran across that one I knew it would be perfect. I've been fiddling around with it and I think I've worked out what was missing as well as what made the endiing so horrible. Looking forward to your opinion about the rewite. Thanks for reading!
I've posted the revised edition...would love to know wha you think.
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apaidanSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 01/06/09
Very good. It distills down the moment, brings the important things into focus, and gives the readers a very clear glimpse behind the scenes of Hermione with regards to Harry.
As always, very well done. Looking forward to your next offering.
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Author Feedback: I definetely wanted to bring that type of focus. I'm glad you saw that there. Now that I've got some feedback I'm going to play with it a bit more and will repost it.
I've posted the revised edition...would love to know wha you think.
Searcy |
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very brief but it's pretty sweet if you ask me. it's good to have a glimpse inside hermione's mind when she sorta zones out like that. and i kinda like the fact that we are spared from the drama that is a failed engagement and from a git fit from ron. |
Author Feedback: I am always intrigued by what Hermione is thinking when she zones out like tha so I suppose it was natural for me to want to explore that process. I've got a few ideas so I'm going to revise it and repost. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Git fit...new phrase 
I've posted the revised edition...would love to know wha you think.
Searcy |
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I think it flows quite nicely, and am very interested in what other pieces you have written. Thought it was quite delightful, upfront, and honest. |
Author Feedback: Delightful...no one has ever called my writing delightful before, thanks that made my day! Please feel free to review any of my other rambles I'd love to hear what you think.
I've posted the revised edition...would love to know wha you think.
Searcy |
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