Whoa. I have to say that this is GOOD. I loved the reference to how the story could make some woman rich (lol), and all sorts of other things. The amount of thought put into this story is nothing short of amazing. Seriously, you'd give JKR a run for her money. I can't wait for the next chapter (and the ending of this story) to see why Dumbledore did all this. Way to turn JKR's story on its head, btw, by completely changing what we thought about Dumbledore... Amazing stuff. I really hope you update soon. Great, great job. Fantastic. Marvelous. Insert your desired platitude. This story is just that good. Also, loved the Dan and Emma reference. Just saw it and it made me lol.

Well worth the wait. Interesting to see how this gets a darker tone. Dumbledore's role is getting more and more dubious indeed. Great how you shift the blame from Molly via Arthur to the headmaster.
And the humour adds just the comic relief that is needed. "Scary mother and brilliant father" - a fine piece of irony, as usually it would be the other way round.
Hope you'll update soon. - Considering the title, the Malfoys should make an appearance again, don't you think?

Aw Harry! And her parent's are dentists as well, gulp. I always enjoy semi-sarcastic digs at JKR and fiction writing, nice one. I'm glad Susan and Ginny can be happy together now.. This sure was a loaded chapter, so much happening, shall be interesting to see the meeting with the goblins and everything else next time around.. oh and this chapter was lovely, I very much enjoyed it.

An outstanding story. I can\'t wait to see what comes next.

I have finally caught up with this really fun story. I was surprised that you made Aurthur a "baddie", not many do. It's an interesting twist. Now that they're married, how long will it take for all the rest of the stuff to fall into place. I can't wait to see the look on the faces of all the Malfoys when Harry finally confronts them as their lord. Make them curtsy to Hermione or something. Great job!

Wow you really hate Dumbledore. There was a lot going on in this chapter it might have been better to split it up.

Fascinating plot up to this point. With a nod to genetic sciences, a dig at JKR, discussion of same-sex marriage, all with a magical twist, how can you go wrong? (OK, so there are still many ways to go wrong, but you seem to have avoided all the ones I'm aware of)

At this point, I have to wonder if the Malfoys are going to matter anymore. With the goblins about to meet with Harry et al, their scheme has clearly failed.

Even in slash fics, I haven't seen a Ginny/Susan pairing before, but I like it, and think it works.

So...good start to your story. I'll admit, I've been scared away from starting this one by the description - Ron and Hermione naked? Not the point of Portkey? lol. But I like it, and you make a good case for a Slytherin Harry or Hermione. But, really? Those Headmaster Portraits were way out of character. Especially Dumbledore.

Anyway, please don't take offense at this; I'm not trying to degrade your story or anything. I quite like it so far, and look forward to reading the rest...which I shall do now.

It took me a while to get a chance to read this today -I was at work when I saw the alert, but my company is moving to a new, larger building and I had to move all the computers and ancillary equipment in my testing lab. My back may never forgive me... I'm getting too old for this. But most of the day I was looking forward to getting home so I could read the chapter.

I recognized Ginny's paraphrase of Ruth 1:16-17. Nice touch.

LOVED this paragraph - “You must admit, however, it does make for a fascinating adventure story - something that will make some fiction writer� - Hermione felt herself flushing as Phineas Nigeullus directed his gaze at her - “millions of galleons in spite of the obvious absurdities, inconsistencies and plot holes ...� ...

So, Gil, after reading parts of this chapter, I'm wondering how you are able to read my notes from the KAP sequel I'm working on? (5 chapters written so far, nothing posted yet...I want it to be nearly done or done before I start to post.) so I fully empathize with your comments about hoping "the next chapter doesn't take as long to work out." Too little time...too many things to do.

Until next chapter, then!

MapleMountain