i liked how you wrote this, and i hope that the ending means they're more than just sex now j/k i know that they are, it came across very well...thanks for writing this, it's good

i enjoyed this story. am feeling rather sick and i needed some h/hr. this surely help. thanks!

I first read this a few days ago but upon the urge to read something, clicked it again because I remembered I had enjoyed it (always a good sign to an author if a fic has a lot of re-readability .

You said this was supposed to be an exercise in prose over merely dialogue-driven. I think you did well with both, but each time I read this, I didn't realize where they were at during the current conversation. I keep thinking at the first that Hermione had left Harry's place and was sleeping in her own bed, with her home office/desk in her bedroom, then suddenly it jumps - Hermione's in the desk chair and they're at work. That always throws me. Perhaps just a single sentence added near the beginning might better clear that up for the reader? I think even if you just simply amended the first sentence to "heard the sound of HER OFFICE door slamming" would be sufficient.

Fantastic job, though! I love the small subtleties

H&H4EVA
Hermione Rae

I believe it was a perfect combination of both dialogue-driven and detail oriented prose.

And kuddos for trying different things and improving your skills as a writer, even if it's "just fanfiction".

I, personally, find very tiresome the stories that tend to the use of only one style of prose.
I hardly read an entire chapter, and that's coming from a VERY curious person.

Love it! Keep on writing, cause I do love your stuff. Have a great day!

That was certainly interesting and well-written, but there are two things I would like to point out:

1. I found the language to be a little bit rough for the situation. Now, don't get me wrong, I'm not the sort of person who covers their ears and screams whenever they hear someone swear, nor am I completely innocent of the act, but I just found that Harry's choice of words was a little bit too strong for the situation at hand. I know he was upset by the note, but it just doesn't seem natural for him to get so worked up right away, especially with a woman who he loves.

2. It's written that Harry and Hermione were having an 'affair', but you said that they were both single. By 'affair', did you just mean a relationship, or was it an actual affair-with-a-capital-'A'?

Other than that, I really liked this piece! The 'misplaced kiss on New Year's' idea was a wonderful source of cute mental images, and I also liked Hermione's admission of the fact that she can't be 'that girl', even for Harry. It was wonderfully in-character for her.

Excellent; keep it up!

You know, Cosmo, if you really suck at writing smut (and I seriously doubt you do, btw), then the only way to get any better at it is to practice, practice, practice.

Cute....the language was fine....good grief!! Good to see Harry not being shy about his feelings for Hermione....FINALLY!!

I believe with your frequent use of the F word you should change the rating to R. Sooooo unnecessary.

Job well done by Hermione to get a commitment out of Harry!!

That was really sweet, thanks for writing it. I would like to see it become more than just a one-shot, I think you could quite easily continue where you left off here. Sort of have them officially become a couple and letting everyone know.

I love it when people write 'possessive Harry' style stories and whilst this one-shot is lovely and could stand alone I think lots of people would be happy to see it turn into something bigger.

Thanks for putting it on here for us!

Jacquianne.

i honestly liked it a lot, maybe you can go and write a little prequel to this give us the night it all started in more vivid detail. my only complaint was the legnth ending it right when you did is a good spot to end but did it neccesserily have to?

Love it! I like the shortness of it, the brevity yet lightness of the plot. I like the flirtatious interchange between the leads, and....I LOVE IT!!! Maybe, ..maybe...you could expand it and write another chapter? into it??...flighty wishes springing forth......

I loved this story.

Once again you have managed to capture the uniqueness of Harry and Hermione's characters and portray them beautifully.

I enjoyed it. I like my Harry just a little possessive. Not insane-hello-shades-of-Weasley-possessive, but just enough that he's not afraid to take what's his. Great job.