Well, I've been reading your other fic, In Fair Hogwarts, and read a review mentioning this fic. So I scanned the first chapter, and got totally hooked, having read 13 chapters and now I must get some sleep and continue tomorrow. This is really good! I love this version of Hermoine as assassin, and I actually like this chapter where her Death Eater training comes into play. I hadn't seen much of it in the rest of the fic and wondered. And love the UST! She and Harry are meant to be! Surprised Ron isn't hitting on her though as the single female of the Quattro.

I enjoyed the story and all, but I'm just a little curious how Hermione got out of being sentence to Azkaban for all that she had done. It would have been one thing if she had been like Draco from canon, who had never actually killed anyone, but she wasn't at all. She had tortured and murdered many people in cold blood. Regardless of how much a person can change after they realized their life was a lie, it doesn't change the fact that she was a willing participant and did things that would make most people vomit. I love H/Hr as much as the next person, but I like the stories to have realism rather than wishful thinking.

Unless they completely kept her involvement with the Death Eaters a secret, there isn't any realistic way she could have avoided a long prison term. As the Nuremberg trials proved, following orders is not a valid excuse for your actions. Ultimately she is still responsible for the torture and murder or innocents and it's for this reason that the ending of this story disturbs me.

Of course given the fact that she never actually acted like a person who had done those things, I'm not surprised. All of the murders and tortures were only ever mentioned in one-off comments that had little to do with the actual story. You seriously could have exchanged her with the Hermione from canon and the story wouldn't have changed a bit because the Hermione in this story was somehow superhumanly immune to becoming a sociopath (something that would have been unavoidable given her past). Basically what I'm saying is that a person with Hermione's background in this story is pretty much guaranteed to turn out like Bellatrix. No amount of strong will can save a person who has committed more cold-blooded murder and torture than they can even count.

Even if you wanted to end the story as you did, Hermione is still going to have massive emotional and mental problems that are going to require a huge amount of psychiatric help.

IMO, you should have gone for a much darker story. One that showed Hermione as she really would be and one that showed Harry causing her to slowly break down.

So was that shield made by Hermione given that she made the same one when she was a baby that somehow blocked Avada Kedrava curses (something that isn't possible to do)? So I gather you just ignored the prophecy that said Harry had to kill Voldemort? Guess I shouldn't be surprised, she is the main character in this story afterall while Harry really hasn't done anything worthwhile.

Please kill Draco, he's the most annoying character in the entire series. His existence in canon is solely to show what raising your kids in an environment full of bigotry and elitism does to them. Not to mention the fact that he's a coward, a below average wizard who consistently tries to proclaim his own greatness and a complete prick. He's not a bad boy at all and has no charm whatsoever. He's the type of guy who gets the living shit beat out of him all the time because he can't control the words that come out of his mouth and has no ability to back up anything he says.

I remember the guys like him from high school, they were all worthless as people.

Heh looks like I called it regarding Voldemort just using her and knowing she would likely fail to be a good spy. Though it's not surprising given his talent at manipulation.

I'm not exactly sure what all of the people who think Hermione is a whore are thinking, she was raised by Death Eaters, it's not like she's going to have any sort of grasp upon social norms regarding morality especially when she's been sheltered her entire life.

I actually have the opposite problem. The Hermione you're portraying is just a normal teenager with normal problems. There is no hint, other than a few side comments, that she's ever done anything vile or bad. The fact is, she's not believable at all as some sort of assassin in this story. She comes across as ridiculous naive towards everything and as someone who could easily be manipulated by anyone. Either Voldemort has purposely stunted her mental and emotional development or he is an idiot. Hermione had as much of a chance infiltrating Hogwarts for a mission as Houdini does for coming back from the dead (i.e. to say no chance at all). She's useless at it because she can't hide her emotions.

I'm going to take a wild guess and say that Voldemort must be trying to set her up because I can't find any other reason why he would send someone so ill-suited for infiltration.

For being a ruthless, merciless murderer, Hermione sure seems quite normal as a teenager to the point where her background seems quite meaningless. That's not to say that I'm not enjoying the story because I am, it's just that for someone who has supposedly lead raids, she doesn't seem to have been affected by it all.

Granted I understand that writing her as a complete sociopath (which is exactly what she would be in real life given the nature of her upbringing) wouldn't make for a good romance so I'll let it slide. However it's extremely difficult to even imagine her character in this story murdering anyone in cold blood because she acts completely normal.

Going further though, if she has murdered a lot of people, I'm not really sure how a relationship between her and Harry would ever work. Even if I found out my wife had been deceived throughout her entire life, if I found out she was basically a hitman, it would freak me the hell out and likely kill my relationship.

Hi I've been very busy was not able to read it until now. So great! I was hoping for a timeskip. What other projects you've got plan I humbly await your next work

I loved the story. It took a few days to read it around my schedule, but it was great. I loved it. I guess I shouldn't be surprised I've read some of your other work too. I Loved how you wrote Myrtle in the previous chapters...
It's a great story, and as i said before - love your writing
keep it up
-megz-

this is a very good fanfic. thx for writing this for us. Even though the main idea of Hermonie being a death eater is not an original idea. You made it your own. Good for you. Thanks again.

Nice ending to a very good fic, although four kids are maybe a bi too much

Well this was a good chapter. As I said in the previous one, it's hard to imagine Harry leaving Death Eaters free, but it would have been just as hard to imagine him giving up what has been his dream forever (having a family) so it was really a hard choice he had to make.

Well, Hermione's ultimatum makes sense, in a way. But we also know that Harry can't stay put while there are Death Eaters free, and that's right too. What a difficult choice to make...I wouldn't want to be in his shoes, really

Ah, the classic chield to repel the AK, always effective I liked the chapter, although I think the way they escaped was a tiny bit too easy. I mean, once Hermione moved away from Draco, surely someone would try to take her down before she could disarm Voldemort?

Mmh, not Voldemort-like at all to use such kind of spell, but I guess it works. Now let's see what happens next