Harry85Signed | Chapter : 6 | Date : 28/12/08
So it is finished? So suddenly? No explanations of why he did what he did? Or what she went through during hose years without him? I think you could have explained muh more than simply having them live happily in another country. After all, it's you who chose to write an angsty story, but for it to have a happy ending everything should be explained, otherwise one will remain with the feeling that the angst was unnecessary, which is what I'm thinking right now.  |
Author Feedback: i know that it's not the ending that everyone wanted--you, in particular--and i can definitely see the reason in you claims, but, despite that, i never wanted this to be a long piece, it was never intended to be... personally, in my mind at least, the reason for harry killing molly and ginny--which appears to be your major problem with the piece, to me--makes sense... at least in the universe i've built up in my head... but, then again, to each their own i suppose.
nonetheless, thanks for the honest reaction... i may not entirely agree, but i do see your logic and appreciate it |
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I liked the first ending. And not because Harry is in it, but ...I guess, it tells us more about the ending, although its a little fluffy. What a story. Can I tell you, I was hoping for a tragedy? Well, not really hoping but I thought that more than likely, tragedy would have been inevitable because their situation is so dim. And so much angst and hate has stemmed out from what Harry had done. Although both endings are seemingly happy, its not really a complete happy because Harry is still suffering with Voldie inside of him. I guess I should stop analyzing the ending and just actually enjoy the fact that the ending was somewhat a happy one. Either way, I still love it. It was different and very emotional. Great job.   |
Author Feedback: i prefer it too, have to admit, lol...
and i can see why you'd hope for tragedy... which is why when i originally posted this fic it was meant to be in two versions, one with just the 1st chapter of this acting as a one-shot [Buried--which i previously posted here] and then this fic as an alternate ending to Buried, but not having them end up together, even if they still love one another and wish they could be together, is against portkey ToS...
still, though, couldnt make it too happy, which is why i kept the soul within him... personally, i prefer it that way...
thank you so much for reviewing! |
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another great fic from cosmopolitan  . you did a great job of creating a universe without explicitly stating the events that had happened. I personally liked the first ending better just because it was nice and cheery, but I think the second is more aligned with the tone of the first four chapters. |
Author Feedback: oh, dear!  thank you, i'm so glad to hear that! |
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perdita5Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 21/11/08
After reading the two chapters of ITD, I decided to check out your other stories... and I'm very glad I did! I really love this! It's so angsty and it can go in so many different directions, I'm really wondering what route you'll take! And do you know already how long this is going to be?
Anyway, I'm looking forward for more and during the next week or so I'll probably look at your other stories too |
Author Feedback: it's actually five chapters long with an alternate ending [just posted those two parts of the piece now, actually]...
anyway, I'm so ecstatic to hear that you're enjoying it and,hopefully, the ending won't disappoint
thank you for reading! |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 19/11/08
Er...I know I said it before, but I really feel the need to understand why he did what he did and how he plans to keep control over Voldie's soul from now on. He must have realized why he snapped and couldn't keep control so he now has a plan to avoid that, but if we knew too it wouldn't be bad. 
That said, forgive me the rant but I really don't understand what pleasure authors get from writing stories this angsty...it's not an attack on you, just a consideration.  |
Author Feedback: not everything has a rhyme or reason, i think. that sentiment of frustration and anger towards ginny and molly was there and the basic idea is that voldemort manipulated that, coerced him into killing with that--think gollum killing his best friend over a ring of all things in LotR, lol... save for the fact that I'm far from the caliber of genius as Tolkien
as for angst... i like a bit of both... i like that at the end of all the sadness there can be that beacon, that moment of utter piece that you can appreciate all the more because of all the troubles you've passed |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 19/11/08
So this one was from Harry's perspective, we get a bit more insight in his situation but I still don't understand how he got Voldie's soul in him, and why he killed molly and ginny. What made him snap? |
Author Feedback: see previous response  |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 19/11/08
Well, if I knew the route this was taking I could comment on it, but I'm in the dark about what you plan to do with this fic next so I can only ask you to elaborate on why Harry killed Molly and ginny and how come he has Voldie's soul in him. |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/11/08
Ah, I remember this piece, now I'm eager to see how you continued it! |
Author Feedback: ooh, hopefully i won't disappoint then! |
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bipsSigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 18/11/08
fantastic story... dark yet there is still hope ...
isn't there something absolutely delicious about evil harry ...
I loved it all till chapter 4.. flawless in execution.. angst with just enough romance to reel the reader back in... but somehow this last chapter seems a little wonky.. sorry...
it just seems too neatly tied up for such an intense story.. maybe instead of just hermione's musings, if you had included some sort of a dialogue/scene with h/hr .. the ending just feels inadequate or even impersonal |
Author Feedback: and here i thought people would think it was wonky for having had harry keep the soul and not finding a way to rid himself of it... but i can definitely see where you're coming from and i'll keep it in mind when re-writing this chapter
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 17/11/08
I'm lost at the end, I know Hermione is with harry, but where?, doses he rid voldermort in him?, does he end there lives before voldermort invaides his mind completly?. It just need's to be a finishing end?.
what you wrote was really good though. just make closure from the end. |
Author Feedback: nothing changed. when she says "I'm there to keep his monsters at bay" she's referring to the voldemort within him, he's still there... what she's saying is that despite that they compete one another, some things can't be repaired but perfection isn't always necessary anyway... they make do with what they have
so sorry for not being clear enough... i'll try to revise that with that note taken into consideration
thank you for reviewing!
cosmo
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ZeelthorSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 04/10/08
Good again, but perhaps a bit short.
It's always nice when the good stuff seemingly never ends. |
Author Feedback: yeah it is a bit short, i'll admit, but when i wrote this i made two versions this one and a longer one and i found that i just genuinely preferred this one... not sure why, really, just did, lol.
thank you so much for reviewing
cosmo
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ZeelthorSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 04/10/08
Now this is a particularly well-written piece.
While angst generally isn't a genre of my liking, I'm hooked by this story.
I really can't think of any constructive criticism at this point. |
Author Feedback: oh thank you so much |
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It's so bad! Will she forgive him? and what's important about the deaths? I'm so confused! hahaha... can't wait for the next chapter! |
Author Feedback: well given that he was the one that orchestrated the deaths i'd say that that's what's so bad about them...
so glad to see such enthusiasm,
thank you for reviewing
cosmo
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I'm guessing you've had a guy beg you for a second chance at some point in your life, the sadness and the desperation of it was so real. That was gut-wrenching to read it. Oh, I hope things get better for them soon. |
Author Feedback: but those were totally different circumstances, in my defense, and thank god for that, imagine being in Hermione's shoes... 
thank you for reviewing
cosmo
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ughhh. this just killed me a little. wonderful start. i have to continue. |
Author Feedback: aw, I'm so sorry, it was a bit hard to read for a harmony shipper, though, wasn't it? |
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