Tina109Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 22/11/08
Well the story is good without this chapter and I enjoy it very much |
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tickySigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 13/11/08
I enjoye this chap along the rest of thi fic. I just wish you would have taken the idea to defeat voldie and developed it into a longer HHr fic. I aslso wish you would have fleshed out the last chapter to make it a fitting end to this fabulous story. |
Author Feedback: Don't worry about "The Final Battle" being just a footnote, it isn't relevant in this story. However, in Torchwood, the entire fic will be leading up to it and the after math, and it'll be a nice long one, something like 60 chapters probably, if not more.
Yeah, I'm not too happy with the 4th chapter, it wasn't long enough or detailed enough for my taste. But my plot bunny was killed by my muse, so I ran out of creative juices for this particular fic.
Glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing. |
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That was great!
I'm a fan of fics where Harry and Hermione get together after Hogwarts, and this was a fantastic example as to why I like them. I really liked it  Harry's tattoo sounds cool, also, and I reall ylike how you wrote him  Have a good day! |
Author Feedback: Thanks, and I'm particularly proud of the tattoo, expect it to make a comeback in Torchwood, but with a neat twist!
Thanks for the review! |
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I LOVE this story! I keep coming back and reading it just for a "pick-me-up"! Any idea of when Torchwood might start to appear (days? weeks? months? seasons? years (please not years though!)? GREAT JOB!!! Can't wait to read more of your wonderful work! |
Author Feedback: I'm very glad you like it, and I love the fact that you keep coming back to read it.
Torchwood...is a very hard question to answer. I have so many ideas, plots, plans and scenes rattling around in the old grey matter. The problem is that my muse has apparently abandoned me for parts unknown. I can't even write short stories at the present time. This is the specific reason why I haven't posted any of my chapters of Torchwood so far. Because I hate it when I would get involved in a story, get cut off in the middle and find out the author hasn't updated for months.
I figured something like this would happen, which is why I haven't posted anything. So, I don't have an ETA on Torchwood, unfortunately. And I really hate it, because I want so badly to write it.
I promise, as soon as my muse comes back to me, I'll be writing up a storm. Thank you and thanks to everyone else for their continued patience. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 03/10/08
Haven't read the story yet (I fully intend to), but before I get to that I wanted to say that your summary was perfectly fine up until the part where you say "(Sorry, I'm shite at summaries)"
Take that part out and you're good to go. |
Author Feedback: Consider it done! I hope you like the story. |
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hphgloverSigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 26/09/08
I really, really loved this. Just found it today and I am so glad I did. It rocked! |
Author Feedback: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! |
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Wow
I can see im going to get hooked!! Very captivating chapter. Looking forward to the next ones.
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Author Feedback: I'm glad, hope you like the rest of the story. |
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the last chapter wasn't that bad, maybe a little longer in parts, but all in all- good story
i really enjoyed it, keep it up
p.s. i like how you color coded their thougts |
Author Feedback: Yeah, I wished I could have made it longer, but my bunny just died and I couldn't get it any longer.
I wish I could take credit for the "thoughts in different colors", But I shamelessly borrowed that from madscientist. I just added Harry's thoughts in Emerald Green, his color. I agree that it makes thoughts much easier to read and understand.
I'm very glad you liked the story, thanks for the review. |
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I can respect your views on our favorite (or not so favorite) wizards and witches.
And THANK YOU for respecting mine. It's always great when a writer can take the criticism like a champ.
Good luck with your future stories. |
Author Feedback: I thank you for respecting my views. I can actually take constructive criticism very well, it's the whole "OMG U SUXORZ!! STORY HORRBILENESS!!" Bollocks that I can't stand.
Thank you for the reviews and criticism. |
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I was only halfway through Chapter One when I thought that this story was going to be special. But it totally blew away my expectations. WOW!!! I don't think that there's any way to describe it other than that.
About Hermione, I felt that you stayed true to her innate character, the insecurity that she feels and yet, her great capacity to hope and to try to act on that hope.
I only wish that Harry had been this kick-ass in the series. Then maybe there might have been some kind of satisfaction with the outcome. And let's face it, there is nothing sweeter than kick-ass!Harry and vulnerable!Harry all rolled into one, because that's exactly who Harry could have been with better writing and a modicum of thought. Cheers to you for that!
Thank for a phenomenal story! Please keep on writing! |
Author Feedback: Thank you very much, I'm very glad you enjoyed the story and the way I wrote our favorite couple.
I tried to stay as true to Hermione as possible, though a few people have mentioned that I might have gone a little over board and portrayed her as weak, which was so not my intention.
I really wish that Kickass!Harry was the one we got. That was the lousiest final battle I've ever read. Some epic fight between good and evil. Torchwood won't be like that, I can promise you that.
Thanks for reading and for the great review! |
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wizzardUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 18/09/08
this was a very good story. i hope you write more like it
thank you |
Author Feedback: Thank you, I really hope I can concentrate on my main Torchwood fic, but I have no doubts that another plot bunny will hop in my head and distract me again. |
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hermioneUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 16/09/08
 awesome fic and it ends with a wedding just my favourite!  write more pls u have good plots and stuff!the black pencil dress-did it have anything to do with emma's b'day chanel silk black dress?? |
Author Feedback: Maybe...Actually I didn't think of it consciously. I just wanted Hermione in a little black dress, one that hugged her figure and would make interesting during the dance. Though now that I think about it, I might have been subconsciously influenced.
Thanks for the review, glad you liked it! |
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This was brilliant! Very well written and I love your character portrayals. Your dealing with my least favorite Weasley's (Ron, Ginny and the Mrs) was fantastic. I especially love what they ended up doing to Ron...I orginally thought that a nice, bloody duel would be fun, but your way was more diabolical and therefore much better. I especially liked Hermione's contribution. You also wrote the NC-17 bits extremely well. Very hot! Can't wait to read more of your work.
Colleen |
Author Feedback: I originally was gonna have Ron and Harry go at it tooth and nail, then I realized with all of Harry's power, he'd obliterate Ron with a wave of his hand. Then I thought, lets have Hermione duel Ron, and while Hermione could also kick Ron's ass with little effort, I figured that if he manged to hurt Hermione, Harry would blow up whatever room or place they were at.
So, some revenge that would stretch out, and teach the wanker a lesson. Yeah, I love Hermione's bit, I figured, that while a good old fashioned ball stomp would be in order, that she wouldn't want to touch him at all, so this was better.
Thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed! |
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Sorry I didn't mention how much I liked the love scene in 'reconcile'. That part was pretty much excellent! the very powerful 'almighty' harry potter being oh so gentle and sensual with Hermione. Really quite good. |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you liked that part, I wanted it to be special, gentle and sensual. To help heal Hermione and show her what someone who cares about her can do for her. |
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WOW...you really did quite a number on Ron. I don't know what to think about this story. I do like the 'bad-ass' harry but Ron and Hermione are just so weak! AND Hermione is NOT WEAK!
Also, I really don't like how you bashed Dumbledor! |
Author Feedback: No, Hermione is not weak. I'm really sorry that I gave that impression. She isn't the brow beaten girl that seemed to have come across. She's just stuck in a rut, and that night was one that everything came to a head. So, I'm really sorry that I made her seem weak. She isn't. I don't think of her that way and I really wish I had written that first bit differently.
I think I gave the wrong impression of the timeline here. Harry is 20 years old, because he used the Time Turner for a 3 year jump. The others are still only 17 and 18. It's only a few months after their 7th year has ended. They got into the Muggle club using glamours. Since they are old enough to drink in the Magical world, they wouldn't have let that stop them in the Muggle one.
Since Harry is so experienced, along with Hermione, they got great jobs and careers without having to go through superfluous training. Especially Harry, he could have demolished anything the Auror Academy threw at him and not batted an eye. Plus, the whole Boy Who Conquered fame thing.
So, in actuality, Hermione and Ron have only been dating for about a year. And it took a while for their relationship to get to that level. I'm sorry if I gave the impression of years of abuse. That isn't what I meant to say. They eventually got together in about the middle of Seventh year, and this is about a year or so later.
Well, I'd say I'm sorry about Dumbledore, but since book 5, he's not been a good character. At least in my view. He had no business hiding all that information from Harry. All his, for the Greater Good crap got Harry's entire Ministry Team injured, Hermione very badly, and it got Sirius killed. Then, Book 6, his so called "training" was something that Harry could have learned in one night, maybe two. Not an entire year of that. Plus, I don't like how Harry was being trained to die instead of live.
So, I don't like Dumbledore as a character. I've read a few fics, like Witowsmp's where he stops being a manipulator and he turns out great. And I'm all for that, but until Dumbledore gets a kick in the ass and stops being that way, I really don't like him. And anyone who abandons a child to the abuse of those monsters doesn't deserve anything but a severe beating.
Sorry, but that's my opinion on it. I respect yours, and I hope you respect mine.
Anyway, I hope you enjoyed the story.
P.S. Just a quick heads up, if you don't like Dumbledore bashing, I'd stay away from my Torchwood fic. Just a warning. |
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