smhalcyonSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 25/08/08
Some additional thoughts.
Are Nanaka (sp?) or Red XII and Cait Sith around, you have not had them in the story so far? What reasons are they not around if not?
I don't know if i mentioned it before but if Materia/items work fine for Cloud's group, would they work for HP's group? If so, what will they be aloud to acess? If materia/magic work Cloud to HP, will HP magic work for Clouds group? Will it require the attachment of MP using materia to have a 'magic core' to use a wand? |
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enjoyed the chapter... even though it was a bit short.. in answer to your request on suggestions, i feel you should include both or atleast one of the weapons.. either emerald or ruby.. i feel ruby wud b a better choice since according to me ruby is tougher to beat than emerald.. also.. for a twist in the tale... you cud throw in sephiroth... that wud be fun.. hahah... anyways.. hope for an earlier update on the next chapter.. take care.. |
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smhalcyonSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 22/08/08
Nice chapter, though I wish it was longer.
Plot direction/questions that need answers before moving forward:
1) does materia/items work perfectly in HP's world as in Midgard et al? If so, then can Harry and company utilize them. If it does not work perfectly, then what problems exist (limited use even with enough MP, items not as effective, etc.)
2) based on the above answer, would the use of Life, Life2, Full-Life, Phoenix down to restore fallen heroes an option (in video game no time limit from when used to work properly. Though been two weeks from Lupin and company's death).
3) generic plot events: after a potential faceoff, groups getting to know one another, help restoring the highwind, i see a Voldemort and sephiroth hybrid and a ritual to give them two bodies. I like the concept of two epic duels at the end (Cloud and Sephiroth like in 'Advent childern' and Harry and Voldemort). I see the two groups discovering the two are back and going after them. Maybe Cloud and Harry will have to do something to the others nemesis in order to permenantly defeat them.
4) for hooking up Harry w/ Hermione (this is a H/Hr site afterall). I can see Ron bailing on them again b/c a) he does not fit in with new group and bored with them wandering aimlessly, b) realizes he is not cut out for another adventure, c) depending on point 2 is grieving and wants to be with family or relieved they are alive again and wants to spend time with them and not die himself.
5) highwind if repaired or not should not be used if V and seph stay in britain. Giant airship will attract attention if flying over London.
6) is HP magic going to effect highwind's systems like HP magic effects earth electricity?
will drop other thoughts with another review if i can think of them, these are just off the top of my head. |
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I've never had anything to do with the Final Fantasy series (uh, I'm not mistaking "FF" for something else, am I?) but this seems like a pretty interesting crossover and I hope you keep writing it. IMO the best way to get reviews these days is to (a) have an engaging summary so people actually read your story (b) update regularly so you don't lose readership (this doesn't mean you have to update too frequently -- it just means that when an author says "I'll update on the first of every month" and stick to that, eventually a bunch of people will start reading the story and will love it).
Until next time! |
Author Feedback: I am a very disorganized writer, I will not deny this. It is impeccably hard for me to sit down every night to write on my own original stuff, let alone to set a deadline for myself to update a peice of fanfiction. Reviews are helpful, I love them, but if someone doesn't want to leave a review because I have a crappy update method then they are loosing out. Occasionally, I go MONTHS without writing.
I also have several things that would also impede my update rate. The first... my boyfriend was in a head-on collision last week. He is a driver for Domino's. No car, frazzeled mind, not good for writing. Secondly, I do not have interent at home. Thirdly, I am getting a gateway pretty soon so I'm going to have to transfer a lot of shit from my compaq to the new computer. I hope that you can understand why I don't want to set a deadline for when I am going to post a chapter. I've been writing for many years, and have been involved in the fanfic world before, so I know how to to work the system
I'm also starting a new semester. I'm a senior now in college so the work load is going to be immensely annoying. I hope you, as a reader, will be patient with me.
...though I suppose I can work on a chapter tonight. We'll see how that goes. I have several writing projects going on. Bah, LOL.
Anyway yes, you are right. The specific game that FF comes from is Final Fantasy VII. You can find info on the characters sporadically online.  |
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Interesting story. Looks to be entertaining (although I have no clue what FFVII is about). Glad to see you back. |
Author Feedback: Do a little google search before you read anymore... the story is HEAVILY influenced by Cloud and everyone. I'd maybe flip through a few fanfics too on ff.net--but be very very wary, most of them suck. There was one REALLY good one that I read a few years ago, I'll post a few links up for the people who know nothing about the game. I can't do that right now though, as I'm at a library and need to wait until we get our internet at home turned back on. |
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i've logged onto portkey after a long long time... n the 1st story i read was this... i thought that the name of the author was familiar n when u mentioned moonlit nights it hit jackpot... i used to love that story.. im sorry that ur not gonna continue it... though i sure wish that u continue with this one cuz the theme seems to be very interesting... i would love to see how the 2 worlds interact.. FFVII has been one of my fav games... and needless to say that harry potter one of my fav books... hope to read the next chapter soon... |
Author Feedback: I'll try to get it up as soon as possible. I'm went ahead of myself and posted before I had the plot really worked out, but the next chapter might be up in a week or two. I'm getting a new computer too, so I'm not doing much writing at all so that all of the data on my computer now is easy to transfer. |
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DorianUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 23/07/08
Well, as I do love both Harry Potter and the final fantasy universe, ff7 in particular, I think this story may be very interesting.
You seem to have gotten the characters correctly, although Hermione's slightly annoying usage of the name Ronald is more in style with the movies.
And please, for the love of god, make Tifa's boobs more like in Adevent children than in the game cause.. it's just wrong. xD
Christ, she could kill people with those.
Alright, enough of my rambling, good story, update.
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Author Feedback: Hahaha, funny, your name is the same as my boyfriend's son.
I kind of picture her boobs at a good, round D.
Anyway I guess I'll have to read more thoroughly later when I post the next chapter. When I write, I tend to think of Ron's name that way for some insane reason. LOL |
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That was great can not wait to see what happens next.Thank you for this story and the time
and effort that you have put in to it.
Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy
your self when you write and have fun
in your life when you can. |
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smhalcyonSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 23/07/08
Nice cliffhanger. Nice chapter and looking forward to an another. You have done a nice job capturing the personalities of the FF characters. Keep up the good work. |
Author Feedback: I did? YAY! Lol, its been a long time since I wrote a HP fic, but wayyyyyyyy longer since I decided to tackle the FF chars. |
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smhalcyonSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/07/08
An interesting beginning. Huge fan of the game and look forward to see where the story goes. What independent materia was that thrown into the potion? |
Author Feedback: I haven't thought about that yet, but that is something to take into consideration over the importance and over-all development of the plot. You made me go look up the materia! LOL.
Anyway I'm glad that you liked the beginning.  Stick around, I'm TRYING to get the next chapter up...hopefully...which is hard since I don't have the net right now at home. (Living away from a college campus with a wireless network totally rocks, LOL!) |
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EulaliaSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 21/07/08
Its a nice beginning. Keep on writing, I want to know, what happen in the present^^ By the way, what is he talking and what language is it? |
Author Feedback: I translated what I wanted Voldemort to say into Latin, and then I stuck it into a Al Bhed translator. Al Bhed was a language used in FFX.  |
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are you saying this took place two years before or after the battle. because if it's after then a lot of these characters are technically dead aren't they?
its interesting keep writing. there isn't much to say at this moment. |
Author Feedback: Sorry. Dammit, I meant to get all of those confusing things out of the story before I posted it. I meant that it is two years BEFORE Voldemort's death. If it had been two years after, he couldn't have done that. I guess I have to go and edit that before I post the next chapter. |
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good prologue, look forward to seeing more on this fic.
just one question, where else is 'Moonlit Nights' posted? i would like to know.
i am adding you and this fic to my favourites lists
both author and stories |
Author Feedback: I'm sorry! It's not posted anywhere and I never plan on finishing it. |
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Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can. |
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