I like how you brought the Weasley temper into all of this. I was really hopping they'd get together.

that was so cute!!! it's short but it's really nice...don't delete this story and never get discourage....keep it up..i believe in your works!!

Wow! For once in my life, I really don't know what to say. Saying it was perfect wouldn't be the truth. But it was good, really good. This is one of those stories I'll come back to read again and again. I really wish I could say more, but... thanks.

an interesting introduction. so much pain and frustration laid out as dispassionately as only Hermione can. It will be interesting to see if you do continue. Especially when you show the other side of the coin.

As this story is posted on Portkey, I expected something like this to follow the first chapter, and honestly I think you did a good job. Harry and Hermione pining for each other without realizing the other feels the same has become somewhat of a fanfiction cliche (and how could it not with how DH turned out?), but you've done a decent job showing something other than just wretched emotional angst. They are both adults about this whole thing, no matter how much they think it has screwed up their life, and realize that they both are to blame for choosing the wrong path. I liked, "She's been the logic, the loyalty, the trust, and the hope," because it highlights the ongoing nature of that relationship, even though Harry doesn't recognize its reciprocity at the moment.

Just a note about the last part of the chapter: you have an issue with your tense. Many times you write "would be" when simple the past tense would suffice. For instance, you write, "It would be a marriage and three children later before it would actually hit me. The sacrifices that she would have to make. It would no longer be her job to comfort me, to hug me, to solve problems with me." More acceptable and better to read is, "It was a marriage and three children later before it actually hit me. The sacrifices that she had to make. It was no longer her job to comfort me, to hug me, to solve problems with me." But that's just a nitpick.

Thanks again!

Matt

You covered a significant amount of ground in this compelling chapter. First, Hermione details what she 'had' to be in the face of the Second War, and to tell you the truth I was a little put off by that. It was almost as if she blamed the circumstances surrounding their last two years at Hogwarts for not being with Harry today...but then you write, "Sometimes my own selfishness severely disappoints me. I should know better." I loved this line, because in the context of this story she really has only herself to blame for her unhappiness. Hermione could have stood up for herself at the end of the war and declared her true feelings. It would not have been the easy choice, but it would have been the right one (echoing Dumbledore...)

Anyway, I liked the bit about Ron finding love with Luna, because even though I love the H/Hr relationship, Ron and Luna makes just as much sense. I honestly thought at the end of the fifth book that JK might have been setting them up to end together, even though there were already "anvil-sized hints" about Ron and Hermione.

And finally, I want to shake Hermione at the end of this chapter! Come on, Granger - keeping your emotions bottled up inside, instead of acting on them, is exactly what Harry did throughout his adolescence and look how many problems it caused?

This was thoughtful and engaging. Thanks!

Matt

This is BEAUTIFUL!!!!!! It made me cry it was so good!!!! Keep it up!!!!!

This is much better, altho it appears that Harry knows that Hermione loves/loved him now, but she is not aware that he feels the same way, so to me there is some inequality there. I guess I'm sensitive to that, because Hermione to me, seemed to get the short shrift in most of the books, esp HBP, and for her now to know that her love is reciprocated is sad.

Oh, now that's better. We at least know they love each other even if they are with someone else. I guess now no one could complain that it is not following the rules.

That said, if you managed to write a way for them to be together, I'm sure no one here would be offended, you know

Anyway, good job. you wrote both chapters very well.

wow!to the second half. He does love her, but like he said a marraige and 3 children later. How does one live with knowing you love you best friend, and can't have them, How are they going to live like this.so. so. heart breaking. How are they going to live like this!

I like the fact that Harry recognizes albeit a bit belatedly that he was Hermione's Harry and the significance of the lost of that relationship. I also like the fact that they still think alike, using the same words and phrases in their memories. It was a very good follow up chapter with just the right balance of sadness and hopefulness. Sadness over their obvious loss of each other but hopeful in that with them both feeling said loss so acutely maybe they'll find their way back to each other.

This was extremely poignant, but I'm afraid it may not comply with the PK rules because H/Hr are never together and do not "end up" together (just like in canon).

Maybe you need to write a sequel, or at the minimum Harry's POV, showing us that, while Hermione may not know this, Harry does have feelings for her, but never acted on them for whatever reason?

Well, it's not bad. Sad, but not bad. However, since we don't know what Harry feels for her, this isn't really HHr complying, so someone might say it doesn't respect the rules here on the site. you may want to add a chapter to rectify that.

That was nice... and heartbreakingly depressing.

It makes me SO mad. Harry being blind, Hermione being scared. They both desrve to be a little selfish.

Anyways, I liked it, it was very well written.

~GM~

Wow! very well writen. Loving someone you know you can never have, but still hope that maybe someday...