Harry85Signed | Chapter : 5 | Date : 14/11/08
Mmh, ron and Ginny are really full of problems, aren't they? Also, where's Luna in all this? she could provide Ron with the stability he needs, as for Ginny...dunno about Neville, I've never liked the pair much, but he can't be worse than Draco, unless the latter makes a complete turnaround in his life... |
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NatashaUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 13/11/08
Hmm cool, this did have a lot of information in it did it not. This was good, crazy, almost insane like you said but thank you for just posting another chapter, when will the next chap posted. So where will Gin go back the crow, parents, or Neville? hmm interesting cut off thinker...but when do Harry and Hermione tell Ron about their new fond relationship.  Happy writing |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 27/10/08
Well, now I can't wait for the next chapter!  Please post one soon! |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 27/10/08
Well, at least Harry had the strenght to leave when Cho showed up... |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 27/10/08
Ron is making even more of a mess with his hiding things from his parents |
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NatashaUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 20/10/08
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NatashaUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 16/10/08
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 14/10/08
Please update as soon as possible. I can't wait for the next chapter. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 14/10/08
lose the music references, it detracts from your story; occasional reference is good to emphasis a point but constantly in not. Its time to toss some Draco fights in there too. That is just too juicy to ignore and the conflict helps the story to be more than just another angst episode. I get bored with those because the meat an potatos of a good story line is lost. Let Harry have a little to whet his appetite an then take it away again because of mishaps with Ron, Ginny, and Draco. You can work that angle for five more chapters in different ways. Do forget the rest of the Weasley's. I'd love to see them become a problem for H/HR too, especially if some of their toys backfire on H/HR. That would be just too funny. Can't get it on if you're sitting there with blisters all over you or you happen to be flaming hot, smell bad, or just look odd. Turn em into chickens for 24 hours and let ron and Ginny chase them. lmao Keep it up, I'll be watching for you. Carlos |
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80ninetySigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 08/10/08
next chapter please! and i can't believe the number of stories i've read where cho's some crazy bitch-monster. |
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Oh yeah, Coldplay is the business. +1 if you can somehow incorporate Viva La Vida  |
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Oh, wow, from the way you wrote I thought you were in your final year of _college_ and not _high school_. (Or are you British and call those different words?) A few thoughts...
1. H/Hr story + interaction = A+
2. The Weasley sideplot is a little confusing; I'm not sure what exactly caused the splits that you're talking about and why Ginny was engaged to Malfoy. Maybe a little more backstory would help here.
3. Constructive criticism... maybe you could try varying sentence lengths a little more, especially in dialogue. The tone is a little too uniform and maybe if you changed up the sentence structure it would "come alive". Dunno if that makes any sense... |
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NeonStrawUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 27/09/08
Yay I'm glad to see Ginny's back already! I hope this is the beginning of the Weasley family being put back together. And I'm excited to see what happens when Harry gets back to the hotelllll =) |
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