EarthdropSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 10/05/08
This is one of those rare occasions where I actually pity Ron after reading HHr fanfiction. O.o Very good. Sad, but good. |
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You totally cut short what could have been an awesome story  ! This story had the makings of an awesome long story, or at least ten chapters worth. I mean, the story started off so well, with Harry leaving because he couldn't take it. You didn't even explained what happened after or what happened to Ron. I implore you to continue writing this story! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/05/08
yay they got together. i kinda feel bad for ron though |
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dexter19Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/05/08
great job with this short one but it would be even better to have one more chapter to see how the others react ...sorta epilogue if u will....pretty please???  |
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sooo, you are not gonna put anything after this? This is the end then!!
but, it was a good story. |
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Yay! I love a happy ending, even though it probably won't be smooth sailing in the beginning. Btw...I didn't mention this in my first review, but I love that song from the Beatles. Loved the story! Great job!  |
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Oh my goodness she he's finally said it to Hermoine very interesting indeed can't wait to see what happens next. |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/05/08
Well, it was a good second part but I see a big problem with it. Hermione, the Hermione we know, would never hide her love just because of something Harry told her. She might have taken the decision on her own seeing him with ginny, then it would be a different thing, but she wouldn never try to get over him just because of what he said and more thna ever wouldn't let his comment about accepting a date with Ron "rule" her love life. If she wanted to go on a date with Ron, it wouldn have been on ehr own decision, not because Harry told her to give the redhead a chance.  |
Author Feedback: That's the beauty of it though. Based on what we know of the characters, we get to put them in situations that would make them act a certain way. And love usually makes us do things we wouldn't normally do.
Call it rebound if you want. You get the idea that the person you want does not want you and so you turn to the closest thing you think you'll have... in this case, it is Ron.
And , as you have read in the second part, Hermione WAS happy; she never dwelled in the "I'm with Ron but I still love Harry" subject before that night.
In any case, I appreciate the comment and I do hope you like my other stories in case you happen to stumble upon them.
Cheers!
Rosali |
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NeonStrawUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/05/08
I'm intrigued as to what happens after they go back to the party and tell everyone. This seems like it could be a much longer story, even though you intended it to be this length. |
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Estas en peru o en otra parte? Yo no se churros son de peru, pero es fresco.  Arrepentido si mi espanol es no beuno, pero soy americano. 
Yeah, hopefully I did justice to those who are in Spanish II, ha. But hey, if I were stranded in a foreign country, I'd at least know how to order food and ask for the essentials, lol. I understand more than I can write/speak. The whole double negative and rearranging of words confuses the hell out of me...  But I'm willing to learn. |
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Yeah, that was a good chapter. but, how are you gonna get them together, get Ron and Ginny out of the picture. How?? i don't understand. |
Author Feedback: The fic was noth thought to answer those questions. It was only thought until the moment they stop hiding their love away.
Glad you liked it though. Thanks for your comment!
Rosali |
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AmdornSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/05/08
But what happened with Ron? I am dying from curiosity.
I loved the play of emotions from Hermione. And it was really neat to get to see this whole conversation from Hermione's perspective, rather than Harry's.
Thanks! I always love to read what you write. |
Author Feedback: Indeed, I thought it would be much more explicit and intense to see it from Hermione's perspective. We already knew how Harry felt, so it was only fair, hehe.
The fic was not thought out to deal with the aftermath; only to the point where both Harry and Hermione stop hiding their love away.
I'm glad you like my writing! Only a bit sorry that I didn't get to "meet" you before, hehe.
Well, in case you are following What is Love? Then I am working on the next chapter
Cheers! And thanks for your review!
Rosali |
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Eh, in all honesty it ended too quickly. But it's not bad. I really liked this, very nice.
And no, I am not Hispanic, however Churros happens to be a name my friends just... love to call me, lol, it's a long story.
Even though I'm not Hispanic, I speak it pretty well. It helps that the town you grew up in has over 76% Hispanics, ha. But no, I am as white as you can come by... Polish and American, ha.
Anyway, nicely done, really. I'm glad Ron took it well, I always liked the nice Ron better than the jealous idiot. Again, nicely done. Keep up the good work, keep on writing. |
Author Feedback: Me alegra saber que tengo lectores que tambien conocen mi idioma materno. Soy peruana y los churros, si no sabias, son originarios de Peru Por eso pregunte.
Churro es un dulce peruano, frito, relleno de lo que llamamos manjerblance. Sin embargo, es también un termino que se usa para nombrar a personas guapas o guapos (handsome), jeje.
Gracias por tu review, me alegra que te haya gustado y espero que puedas leer el resto de mis fics.
If you want I can write everything in english though, hehe.
Thanks again!
Rosali |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/05/08
so thats it? what about the rest. how will they react. ron, she already agreed and what. kinda short, and well not explained good. |
Author Feedback: The fic wasn't thought to deal with the aftermath; only until the break point where they stop hiding their love away.
Glad you liked it though
Rosali |
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that was really good!keep up the work on your stories! i cant wait to read the rest of them!you are an amazing author! |
Author Feedback: Hey Kimmy! Welcome aboard! I am really very happy that you like my work and I hope to see more of you soon
Thanks for your kind words.
Rosali |
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