My ability to enjoy this story was limited by the original premise...there's simply too many questions raised for me to maintain a willing suspension of disbelief.
A door that doesn't open to magic, but has a large muggle-style cat-flap? The cat flap is large enough for her to crawl through (based on the distance between the floor and my knee), but rather that crawl she shrinks herself just to walk through it? A house-elf that can't tell the difference between a witch and a house-elf? Hermione doesn't simply Finite the shrinking spell? And she doesn't think to apparate (guess there are wards...but what happens when she can't pop like a real house-elf?) There's simply too many contrivances necessary to set the stage.
The challenge is improved from the original version posted on DLP, but still (IMO) too flawed to successfully complete. I could see a irony-rich story that has the founder of S.P.E.W. finding a spell that would temporarily turn her into a house-elf just so that she could "feel their pain." Or, a story in which Hermione forces wizard masters and house-elves to switch places for a day. Or, a story in which Hermione learns that bound house elves lend some of their magical power to their master, and decides to undertake a similar binding to Harry just to give him a chance against Voldemort (it'd be a harem story where other witches do the same).
But, you've made a well written attempt with the challenge as presented  , and if you're having fun trying, then don't let my comments get in your way. Good Luck.
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Author Feedback: I know exactly what you mean, and that was one of the qualms I had in taking up the challenge. I thought the idea was good though, and had a lot of potential, though I perhaps would have set it out a different way if it was my own idea. However, I think I can work with this, and am trying to make it seem as believable as the idea will allow me to.
The catflap thing was something I just had to let fly by. Only those really perceptive and thoughtful (like you) will notice that the idea is quite flawed in the sense that a house elf is not small enough for the catflap to be a size where she couldn't just crawl through. As for why she didn't just resize herself, she had fallen over and did not have her wand in hand, and though she did stand up, I think even Hermione can sometimes be shocked enough into forgetting things, (such as the devil snare with her saying there was no wood). The house elf I just explained is very doddery and shortsighted, and so doesn't see that she is an elf. Maybe a stretch, but it works for me, lol.
That being said, the real difficult part for me is trying to explain why Hermione would not just ask Harry to change her back, but I think my idea will 'almost' be believable. I guess people will just have to take this not too seriously and see it as some light-hearted fun.
I'm still going to try this at least anyway, and if it doesn't turn out so believable, well I'm sure it will at least be fun. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/04/08
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Author Feedback: Yeah, it was a unique idea I wanted to take up, as I could see it having a lot of potential. The hard part is having it all make sense.
I'm going to try and update as soon as I can, and thanks for revieiwng!
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FemteddUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/04/08
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I double posted...
I HATE when I do that. Makes me feel stupid. |
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FemteddUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/04/08
Moogle you cad! You're making me blush.
Honestly, I had no idea that my idea would be so popular.
Great work BTW. |
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FemteddUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/04/08
Moogle you cad! You\'re making me blush.
Honestly, I had no idea that my idea would be so popular.
Great work BTW. |
Author Feedback: It was a unique idea, and I don't do challenges unless I like something about them, or can see them being something fresh.
I just hope I do it justice, and that you enjoy it.
Don't worry about the double posting. It happens. |
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Okay, that was way too funny! OMG - i can only imagine the possibilities of where all of this will go...especially when Harry has to pay Hermione back for the trouble he has unintentionally caused her.  Anyway, a break from all of my fave fics of yours is good, so long as the new stories you are giving us are as well-written and funny as this one was! Keep up the good work (on this and the other fics as well!) |
Author Feedback: Hehe, it was the possibilities that made me take it up. I wasn't going to, but then I just couldn't resist. Hopefully I do it justice.
I'll still be trying to work on my other ones, but this one will probably take the dominant spot. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/04/08
ha ha ha ha. i'm loving it already.i'm wondering if ron will come with harry. he would have a good laugh. anyways.....write fast please. |
Author Feedback: Nah, Ron won't be there, but I hope it will be funny at least. I have a few good ideas for it, but the main problem is making it realistic. It's really hard for Hermione (who is so intelligent) to not figure out how to switch herself straight away.
Anyway, I'll try update asap, and thanks for reviewing! |
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I like the start. I'm not sure why Hermione didn't just resize herself as soon as she got done or just interrupted the elf with resizing or why the elf didn't notice she didn't look like an elf. But I am curious as to how Hermione will handle the other elves with her S.P.E.W. thoughts or how Harry will react. |
Author Feedback: Well, Hermione didn't resize herself because then there would be no story 
As for the elf, it's senile and a bit blind, and so can't tell the difference.
I'm still working things out myself, but I am thinking this story is going to be a lot of fun to write.
Thanks for reviewing, and I'll try update as soon as I can  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 28/04/08
Nice First chapter.
poor Hermione I feel sorry for her.
I hope Harry will come home soon and Help her.
I am enjoying it.
i am looking forword to the next chapter.
But till then so long.
Tha tha tha tha tha tha tha tha that's all folks!  Think Wisely  Good night and good luck. |
Author Feedback: Poor Hermione indeed, but I'm afraid Harry coming won't help her in the slightest.
I'll try update soon as I can, and thanks for reviewing! |
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