plot is good, writing is good. grammar is good.
all in all a good story  |
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Please, I am begging you: write more! This is a great story and you need to write more! |
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More!! Please?
Ugh, I have to write ten words... And it can't be emotions.... I like how Lily is coy with James. And the battle scene had just the right bits missing from it, if that makes sense.
HEY! I got more than ten words!!!  |
Author Feedback: *cheers* You did get ten! Good job. I'm glad that you liked the battle scene and I hope that you continue to read when I finally post the next chapters!
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
~Kon |
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Wow, this is a really, really good story and I can't wait for the rest of the chapters to come! James and Lily are just amazing, great chemistry and Sirius! |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'm glad that you like it and I am working on chapter 7. Sorry it's taking so long to get the chapters out and to respond. |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 6 | Date : 06/06/08
Whoa, that Death Eater attack sure spoiled the good night they were having
I still don't get why James is unwilling to get together with Lily. It's what he had wanted for years after all... |
Author Feedback: I think they are still wanting to have a bit of fun, and they know if they start a relationship now... they aren't going to want to ever see it end...
Perhaps. |
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piper_09Signed | Chapter : 5 | Date : 30/05/08
wow, that was SOOOOOOOOOOO good, i smell another hit! , it was really really really really good, it got really tense when sirius hurt himselfs, bit good all the same! Keep writing!!!!!!  |
Author Feedback: Glad you seem to be enjoying it. There is a few tense parts in this one as well... hope you enjoy chapter 6 as much as chapter 5.
As always, thanks for reading and taking the time to review! |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 5 | Date : 28/05/08
Well, I didn't like how James gave Sirius the thumbs up to go after Lily and how he couldn't admit he really likes her to Remus. I also didn't like their chat, but I guess the ending kind of makes up for it... |
Author Feedback: I fixed that little slip of James' coward-ness in this chapter. At least, I hope I did. Thanks for reading and reviewing. |
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KelseyUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 26/05/08
AWWWWW!  That's so cute!!! I love the depth you put into the characters! And the James/Lilyness....ADORABLE! |
Author Feedback: Thank you for your review! I do try to put depth, for sure, and I am glad that you appreciate my writing. The next couple of chapters should be interesting. For one, I am in the process of writing BBC and a new H/Hr story (not sure if I will post it here, it is already on Fanfiction.net). Plus course work to entertain me with. The new story is called One.
Anyways... you're the first to know about it...
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 26/05/08
well i like this. but will you ever continue your harry/hermione fics? kinda seems your just doing james/lily. how about their son's own happyness. so i hope you do update soon. |
Author Feedback: I only have the one H/Hr fiction that I did not complete (Black's Secret) and I have chapter six in my database. I just find them harder to write because no matter how well I write it, someone always takes issue with something. Short of slapping it with an automatic OOC/AU, people are all like- Well, H wouldn't have done this and Hr would never have done that. Personally, I don't like all the second guessing.
That being said, I do have a new H/Hr that I've not posted that I've been playing with a bit. It is totally AU/OOC... Lily and James are alive in it... but... we will see...
Thanks for reading and reviewing. |
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KelseyUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 18/05/08
So basically, that was incredibly cute, and I think I have a new game to play! But seriously, Lily's actions at the end were adorable!! |
Author Feedback: Ah, yes... love the game, personally... many a childhood summer evenings spent playing the game... loved so much I have taught the oldest three children the finer points of the game.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
~Kon |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 17/05/08
Nice chap, I like the new approach James is using, and it is working! |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reading and reviewing!
~Kon |
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piper_09Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 16/05/08
hi! i liked this chapter, its funny how they are playing hide and go seek like they are little kids,, and the other game i think i am gonna play that with my sisters......  . i think that you are doing a good job doing this story in James point of view. Keep writing!!!!!!! |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reading and reviewing. We used to play that game in the old neighborhood. Good times... a fresh spin to an old classic...
~Kon |
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piper_09Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 09/05/08
Hello!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sorry it took so long! You know school and stuff and AP tests and stuff  . But overall this is a very good chapter as always  !!! You really show that he has a good realtionship with his parents unlike most kids this day and age. and you also show a really good relationship between Sirius and James. Keep writing!!!!!! |
Author Feedback: Hiya!
Yeah, I'm not doing to well with the update and review replies myself (ah, school). Glad you're enjoying and hope you like the next chapter.
~Kon |
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You totally should update soon pretty please with a cherry on top! |
Author Feedback: I am glad that you liked it. I will be updating (hopefully) a little closer to my previous volume soon.
Thank you for reading!
~Kon |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 07/05/08
Nice one. Can't wait to see this developing, shall be interesting |
Author Feedback: Thank you very much, and glad to see you are still on board. |
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