OMG, so sad! Story of my life. Please make it happy fluff!

This is really a sad piece. Wonderful description of how hermione might feel. I've always wondered about that moment when she 'beamed'. If only it were any other way

oh that was such a fantastic ending! Ron was just so well, smart to come up with a plan like that. It was also very noble and generous to sacrafice his own happiness for his friends. In a sense that could be called love\'s greatest sacrafice. Well done!

ok, I'll be honest. I don't really like this chapter much. There are some things that make it hard for me to like. First, it doesn't really make sense that Ron knows they love each other, and had to pull that stunt to prove it. He should have talked with Hermione before the wedding, and have her see the truth.

Second, I don't like that it's Ron to point them in the right direction.

Third, Harry's still married to Ginny. I know they can get a divorce, but seriously, it IS a bit pathetic to get a divorce mere hours after you got married, isn't it?

So basically this whole revealing of feelings should have been done before the wedding, I think. Oh, I know, it would have taken much of the drama out of the first two chapters, but it would have made more sense, in my opinion. I mean, this way it seems you just wanted to force the first two chapters to be really dramatic without having a "logical" resolution for it.

I hope you're not offended by my review, it's not my aim, I don't want to flame. I just like to be honest with my thoughts, it would be much easier to say "Hey, it's brilliant" but I'd still think what I've written, so...

Another more heartbreaking chpater! Superb writing in this chapter, I love the way harry describes "His Mione". The wedding is so depressing, oh dear it just makes me want to chuck an anvil at both of them! It might knock some sense into them lol Great chapter, onto the last one...

Oh that is so heartbreaking! Wathching the man you love getting married to another women! Poor Hermione! I thought this chapter was excellent, it conveyed just enough emotion in the amount of words it was given now onto the next heartbreaking chapter!

I was wondering how Ron and Ginny were going to take this, but you wrapped everything up very nicely in the end. I like the last little twist. Very nice work.

Oh good god.
Sounds so much like my family..

Wonderful story..
It was written alright..
Only a few tweaks here and there could have made it better..
I enjoyed it!
-Pour Toujours

Woah, I thought this story was done! A welcome new chapter, though. Everything worked out in the end, but the insanely mature Ron and Ginny kind of threw me off for a bit. I guess PK writers usually like to show them as selfish and jealous . I thought you were going to write about everyone else's reactions (parents, friends, relatives, etc) - epilogue?

awwwww Make it a love sick puppy story! fluff! This is a fantastic story and i look forward to the rest!

I don't think I have ever read a story that made me dry so much!!
Espcially the bits when it says "I'm hollow inside and if I don't get out of here soon I just may die on the spot but I still smile. She's my Mione and so I give her what she wants, even if it hurts."
Please don't let this be the last chapter!!!

it made me tear up its so cute i loved it!

this sucks. They both keep smiling to make themsleves happy. I hope that they decide that they're being stupid and tell each other how they feel. Keep writing.

this is the saddest thing ever...make it stop...one of them has to wake up! please

I wrote some lines of a song, and you said you wanted it.
The song is " Woh Chali" of the Bombay Vikings band. The album is ' Zara Nazron Se Kehdo".
You can download the song ( it's in English) from www.songs.pk . on that site, click on ' Bollywood movie songs', then search for ' Bombay Vikings' in that site. You'll find the album.
OR
go to www.cooltoad.com and search for ' Bombay Vikings-- Woh Chali ".
The song is available in both English and Hindi( a language commonly spoken in India). www.songs.pk has the english version, I don't know which bersion cooltoad has.
Any how, the song has (the English version) one line in Hindi,. " Woh Chali, Woh Chali " it means . there she goes, there she goes.
if you've got anyother problem in finding the song just send me a mail.
See ya
Bye
' Grandmaster'
P.S: You've captured the emotions really well in the story. I guess the best story I've read on Portkey.
All the Best, and keep the updates coming.