AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 29/06/08
If they speak to each other... But then there would be any story. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/06/08
I feel so sorry for Hermione! I hope that Harry will find out that Ginny isnt the one for him, but Hermione is. |
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awww... poor Ginny and Ron  But this is a great fic! i really like it  |
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14 lines. That is how short Hermione and Harry's confession is. I'm sorry, but that was a shitty ending. Do you know how many exclamation points you used when Harry was confessing his love to her? Excited bloke, isn't he?
I felt like you were trying to make this story heartwrenching and expressive, yet it didn't stir any emotion from me whatsoever.
And Ron and Ginny, not mature, just plain unrealistic. Here's Ginny, how just go married to Harry. And oh look, my husband snogging the daylights out of Hermione! How cute.
You really have to work on characterization and reality. Then, perhaps, you will improve as a writer. |
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usha88Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 10/06/08
Hm...that's interesting. I thought it was different. Not the best way for Harry and Hermione to get together. Well, yea...at least they didn't get completely married. Great job anyways. |
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usha88Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 10/06/08
I think that this chapter is interesting. So Harry likes her, but why doesn't he talk to her? Hm...a lot of assumptions!!! Harry Harry Harry... |
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usha88Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 10/06/08
This is interesting. I am going to read more. Hm...they're getting married..hm...don't want Ginny/Harry to get married. |
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wow. I think i was confused for a little bit. But i like the ending to the story. i think it was weird that Ginny would support this and would let it happen. Keep Writing. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 10/06/08
Well that was a pathetic list of excuses for ignoring the site rules.
Second thing is that no woman in the world would sit back at her wedding reception and behave the way you say. It's not being grown up to say Ok the guy I just said I do to can now happily walk away with another woman, it's just palin simply stupid. I would not bother with an epilogue I mean the parts you already wrote are rubbish. and yes this may well be considered a flame because I simply hate H/G R/Hr and that is why I read the stories on this site knowing I should not have to suffer them. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 09/06/08
This just has to one of the worst endings in the history of endings, Harry has just married Ginny and Ginny just got the man of her dreams and you have the new bride smiling about it, where the heck is your brain. Oh and the constant misuse of the word THEN in places where you should write THan is highly annoying, it makes even the best writers look stupid to get that simple thing wrong. |
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publisherUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 09/06/08
And yet another chapter breaks the site rules, you really should pull this off before my report gets you booted because you can not reverse the fact that chapter one ended in H/G and chapther two ended with H/G and Hr?R. |
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publisherUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 09/06/08
Hi I'm sorry to tell you this, but however you decide to take this forward it has broken the site rules and I will be forwarding a report on it. The rules clearly state that H/G, R/Hr weddings are not allowed, the breaking of the H/Hr ship is not allowed in any form and you broke that in the very first chapter. |
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FlameButtSigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 09/06/08
I enjoyed the tension that you infused in the story with them both thinking they knew what the other wanted them to do and kept us believing that we might end up with a tragic finale (both married to the wrong people) but you 'pulled it out the fire' with aplomb. The only thing I would ask is NO EPILOGUE - what is it with these people  Just because JKR did one in book 7 doesn't mean everyone other author has to do the same. |
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Harry85Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 09/06/08
Just so you know, I have no problem with mature Ginny and Ron, I use them often in my fics (although, equally often they are royal prats  ). It's just the timing of Ron telling her what he knows that I find really difficult to believe. He might have asked her for a confrontation about her true feelings, hoping to be mistaken, just like he did, only NOT when he did it.
As for the marriage thing, that's what bothers me the most. I could have handled Ron's plan to make her see the truth about her and Harry proposing to he rin front of Harry, if they were at some party, or something like that, but not when Harry's already married to Ginny. I mean, honeslty, they might not have consummated the marriage yet like you said, but they ARE married. This will make both Harry and Ginny look like fools, especially Harry. I know drama adds to a story, but when it has a logical solution. I'm sorry to say this, but the way you pulled the happy ending doesn't make sense (no offense meant, only the way I see it)
I'm not sure even an epilogue can fix that, because what's done is done, but I'm willing to read if you do write it. |
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