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Scars and Suffering

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Anonymous
Unsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 04/07/08
it was a bit confusing, i didn't really understand why things were happening.
 

Anonymous
Unsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 08/03/08
This was probably one of *the* best angst/drama one-shots I have ever read, no joke.

When it comes to finding Harry's character, you got it spot on. How he was unsure of helping Hermione in the beginning, the outrage he had towards Malfoy when seeing her scar, and the simple way of how horrible he is with girls. Or should I say, *women*.

And I would like to take this opportunity to change my mind, this is probably one of the best fan-fictions I've ever read *period*. It's nice to know that there are some writers like you who are brave enough to take on this genre. Fluff isn't exactly my cup of tea, if you know what I mean? This story just seemed real to me.

So, to some this all up, I do hope you submit more stories.
Author Feedback: Thank you so much for the praise. It's been a while since I posted it so I thought all interest in it was gone. But your review was the best part of a day spent working my arse off so thank you for taking the time to read it, and especially to review it.

I'm glad you think I got Harry's character right. I'm never sure when I write from his perspective. Maybe I should try it more often.

Saying this is one of the best things you've read yet is a triumph I'm going to find hard to top. I don't mind fluffl so much but I have discovered I can write the dark and nasty stuff a hell of a lot easier. So I do.

Thank you so much for reading. I will submit more stories, I just have to be given time to write them and polish up the ones I've got. Maybe another one-shot is in order.

Have a good one.
 

p_delusional
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/02/08
Your writing is quite fine and the story has so much potential. I like it

But there's something I cannot help but mention, Using too much mary-sueish words kill some of the quality in the story. By that I mean 'emerald eyes', 'cinnamon colored hair' and 'scarlet sheets' and a few over-used emo sounding words. They're a little over the top. They may seem fancy to you but most quality seeking readers would only snort and close the page. I only stayed because I think it's a good story without those and I'm only giving constructive criticism.

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
Author Feedback: Thanks for taking the time to review the story. Nothing wrong with constructive criticism at all. Everything, from small suggestions to outright telling me what you don't like highlights things I'm doing wrong. It's helpful and considerate. So I'm glad you took the time to tell me what you though seemed off or what you didn't like. Thanks for the suggestions.
 

Caroline Delacour
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 24/02/08
This was beautifully written and the plot is amazingly believable. I guess if Harry had no experience with girls, this would be his reaction, so I brought it. I kind of like Hermione in thye dominating role. Good job!
Author Feedback: Thank you so much for your review and for taking the time to respond to the story. It's the bees knees to think someone out there thinks something like that can be beautifully written. I tried really hard with that small piece because I know I was dealing with questionable content. I'm glad you appreciate that.

Yeah, I kind of have Harry reacting the way he does because his experience with girls and the human touch isn't as up to scratch as others. But then I also have Hermione as the very dominating and possessive one because of the changes she'd been through. I've always seen her as someone like that. Harry will succumb to her will eventually.

Thanks for the review, again, and I hope you have a good one.
 

ariane
Unsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
Oh, and i was wondering... how did Malfoy (Jr. or Sr., really) scar her? Are you willing to enlighten me? I'm just syphoning in all the angst
haha.
Oh, and while reading I was listening to the song "Pain" by Three Days Grace: it seemed very appropriate. If you haven't heard it, listen to it
oh, and you really need to write more. This type theme/genre, i spose - email me if you do, kay?

This really is the best oneshot i've ever read
Author Feedback: Like magicians don't reveal their secrets, I won't answer your question directly. I'll vague it up a little, though. Malfoy Jr is more the verbal type in my eyes. I have a scene written down with him and Hermione in vicious confrontation. And it was kind of like a group thing. Hermione's a strong witch in my eyes and I thought there would be a few who'd want to hurt her in anyway possible. Remember, there are more families than the Malfoy's who believe in purity of blood and there were a lot of parents as Death Eaters. Think revenge.

Three Days Grace, huh. I haven't really listened to anything of theirs before but I will take your advice and check out their stuff. If the song "Pain" made you react to the story the way you did then I'll definitely check it out.

This type of genre is pretty much all I can write. I have a lot to draw from it.

And that's saying something if this is the best one-shot you've read. How do I live up to that? Thanks you again, so much!
 

ariane
Unsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
That was fucking brilliant.

excuse the swearing, quite unlike me, but... wow.
I could really feel the emotions.
So well written... so deep... and yes, you really did capture harry's profile perfectly. I love the way he was confused in his own mind... wow. Really, this was bloody amazing.
You are wonderful.

ariane x
Author Feedback: Wow. I don't want to offend the other reviewers but your is, hands down, the one that has brought the hugest smile to my face and the greatest bolt of encouragement shooting down my spine. So, very big, big, thank you. I don't mind the swearing, BTW. That's my kind of language.
I want to thank you for the praise. So far, a lot have picked up on the emotions and I'm glad that came across. And I'm glad you thought I got Harry's character down.
Thank you for taking the time to review the story. I'm pleased as punch it got that kind of reaction out of you. Thank you so much for your awesome review. I hope you have a good one.
 

MarenKPotter
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
A little dark for my taste, and the prose got a little purple at times. I also feel the need to go read something super fluffy right now. But overall, I thought it was well written. Keep it up.
Author Feedback: Thanks so much for the encouragement. I know a lot of readers tend to veer away from the darkness and the angst but I'm glad you read it... liking it is just the bonus. Thank you for taking the time to review it too. I hope you find an appropriate ball of fluff to take the angst out of your mouth. I know the taste is a little bitter. It's something that takes time to acquire. Thanks again and have a good one.
 

Phae
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
This was very poignant. Sad, but with small touches of hope. Poor girl to have suffered through such an experience.

I'm thinking Malfoy and company better find a rock on Mars to hide under.
Author Feedback: Thanks for the reply. I'm glad you see there's a sense of hope. Sometimes when I read back over it, I see it. Other times it's not there. Hermione's a real soldier in my eyes and that's why enjoy writing about her.

And you're right about Malfoy. I'm wondering if I should post my idea about his confrontation with Hermione.

Anyway, once again, thanks for the reply. I'm pleased you took the time to read it. Have a good one.
 

Harry85
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
Nice one! I can't eblieve the cruelty of Malfoy, scarring her like that. Or maybe I can, after all...
Author Feedback: The Malfoy's are cruel. But how cruel? And which one did that do her? After book six, I don't think canon Draco has the balls to do that to her.

Thanks for taking the time to read it. I'm pleased as punch you liked it. Hope you have a good one.
 

Ravenclaw's heir
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
I really liked this story, very well written, but I wonder how Malfoy could get a hold of Hermione and do that to her... and the scar Harry had... great story, really... I enjoyed reading it a lot
Author Feedback: It's kind of impossible, at least in my eyes, for Draco to be that particular brand of cruel. He strikes me as more of the mentally manipulative, rather than the physically scarring type. Remember, there's a Malfoy generation before Draco.

I'm really glad you like the story. I was heavily into reading Ellroy when I wrote it and I thought it might be a little hard to read. But obviously, it's not and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you also for taking the time to review. You've made my Saturday a little bit greater. Have a good one.
 

Anonymous
Unsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
I really enjoyed it. It was a nice piece of writing. I hope you do expand it.
Author Feedback: Thanks for the reply. I'm really thinking about it. Have a good one.
 

Cas121689
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
boo her scar, boo his scar
boo scarsandsuffering! malfoy
BUT
yay they love each other.

how's THAT for a lame-o comment?
[I loved it]
Author Feedback: Not lame-o at all. Any reply is encouragement for me. I'm glad their scars got boos cause it kind of sickened me to write about them. Especially Hermione's considering I know how she got hers. Anyway, thanks for your comment. Have a good one.
 

tiger111991
Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/02/08
wow. This is one of the best works I have ever read. It's emotional and real. And that's very heard to find, and when it it found the question is, is it good. This is great. Well done. I hope you expand on this.

---Tiger111991
Author Feedback: You're review has me smiling so wide I feel like I'm the Joker from Batman. Thanks so much for the review, tiger111991. That's high praise if you think it's one of the best. And I'm glad you think it's real and emotional; I was really going for trying to be as heartbreaking as I could possibly stand it. So thanks for the response. I have to carve the smile off my face.
 

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