When I read the part about \'they weren\'t okay\' I took it to mean \"THEY\" as in the two of them as a unit, together, them. \'Arry was ok, \'Ermione was ok, and \"THEY\" would be okay. Sorta like a bond was forming, making a \"them\" or a \"they\". This could just be more of my butchery of the language but thats how I took it.

Yer a braver soul than me, writin' a story. Course I was never great shakes at magic, but I was always better at that than I ever was at wtitin'. Only thing I can see about this chapter is yer need to tell us who is sayin' what. I keep feelin' a bit at a loss with he said she said without some reference point now an' again. Course, this could just be me, or it could be som'att that others have mentioned. Keep writin though, I'll keep readin if yer do.

Well, when I said I wanted Molly to be slightly angry, I didn't mean for her to shout at Hermione that way...it was really uncalled for. As for Hermione herself, I don't really like how she's acting. Harry's right, isn't it a double standard that when someone dies and he blames himself she tells him not to, but now she's doing the same mistake?

I like how you're really exploring how the realities of war affect a person... most of the time I read stuff that goes "she was sad. she got better. she was happy." without any explanations or details. Also, usually the stories categorized as angst mean "harry loves hermione and hermione loves harry but there's an obstacle so they can't be happy"... interesting, but most of them aren't very believable.

Your fic, on the other hand, makes sense. One's best friend dying tends to have a pretty strong effect on people, especially teenagers.

What you did with Molly also makes sense, even if it was a bit abrupt (she suddenly has a change of heart). But Ginny asking the question was pretty insensitive and rude...

Great work; I can't wait to see what unfolds

I guess the Molly thing was OK. Helped to cut down some of the angst. There is getting to be a little bit too much angst.

But, again, it is still a fresh mourning time... but if it were me, I'd have the angst turn to revenge against the one that really did cause the death of Ron and make Hermione the strong witch she is and not a person that just gives into despair. She is too much of a 'take charge' type to not want revenge to 'set things to right' and 'have justice prevail' once she gets over her guilt ridden angsty phase, which I hope is soon. Harry is angsty enough for the whole wizarding world so someone has to have a logical, rational head on their shoulders right? Unless you are going to blame hormones to reason out why she is so emotional on the border of over the edge? She is at the age for PMS... wonder if it is worse for witches? *scratching head to ponder that*

I am glad though that my idea for the title is up there 1st on the list. I am glad you like it.

I was right in thinking that this story would develop into something really good and interesting.

Keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next available update.

PJ

I would anticipate Mrs. Weasley, the passionate yet emotional woman she is, to be terribly upset at losing Ron, blindly quick to blame Hermione because she needs to blame someone. Plus, that red hair of hers aids in her quick anger but this anger subsides quickly and I would expect her to come around shortly thereafter, realizing that Hermione is not to blame and that she and Harry are a connection to her son, reminders of everything he believed in and stood for.

I hope this helps.

Hey!!
Well your fanfic is very good, I like very much, keep up the good work!!
I personally think that you should get Mrs. Weasley a little upset, but not to much, make her want a little space but then forvige them, and while they're keeping a distance between them and the Weasley family, maybe they can become closer... I don't know, it's just what I think.

I think you should have her upset, but it shouldn't last too long because if she can forgive Percy for what he did in canon, seeing how both Harry and Hermione are part of the family, she shouldn't be too angry at them, not for too long at least.

I personally don't like Molly all that much.

Given that, if you tell her to stay clear of the Weasleys, thereby ensuring Ginny stays away from Harry, I think that would be fine.

It would be a good excuse to keep the focus on Harry and Hermione working through issues together without interference from the old busy body and clingy Ginny trying to get in between them.

But that is my opinion.

So, what did you think of my idea for the title?

"Until Death Do Us Part" can be used to mean the friendships torn apart by death and that only death can separate Harry and Hermione. That seems to work well with the resentment factor if Molly tells the two of them to stay away.

PJ

She should not be totally resentful and completely shun them. She should only be slightly resentful. But don't make her be a total bitch. I mean, harry and hermione lost their best friend just as much as she lost a son. I hate it when Mrs Weasly is a bitch in people's stories.

I'm leaning pretty heavily towards accepting them back and treating them in about the same manner as she did before Ron died because the alternative doesn't make any sense. Nearly all the fics that I've read where Mrs. Weasley flips out and disowns Harry & Co. dance on the edge of disbelief. I'm looking forward to see where this story is going.

i think that mrs weasley would not blame them but more the world for talking her baby boy from her as she would say it. so i think that she should be in like some state of shock like hermione was and i think that she should still want them around to remind her of ron still but i dont think that harry and hermione will want to be there because i think that he would not want the suffication they would get which is not what they need right now all they need its eachother i know how cliche that sounds but i dont mean that they should be crying in eachothers arms for ever but like they are there for each other when they need it and give each other space when they need it too becuase i dont think that the others whould understand what they really need other than eachother.

Mollie Weasley is nothing if not fiercely protective of her family. She would tell them in no uncertain terms to sod off.

-- Bexis

I'd do both... have her welcome them with open arms, as a cover for her resentment.. they don't catch on right away, but other people are on pins and needles to see if she can maintain the charade... maybe they catch on, maybe she explodes, maybe someone else sets her straight.

this is an amazing story i love it alot.
its my favorite so far. you know you could always put your chapters and files on a jump drive.
by the was you could name it "I'll never leave". and it goes both ways for hermione and harry.but great story keep it up.