Moulin Rouge is one of my favorite storys/movies ever. i cry every time i like how you make harry a storyteller. unfortaunatly i have a problem writting stories, but when i write my thoughts or my feelings it comes out like a poetry
i like to write without thinking...beacuase when i think while i write it comes out like a cliche
but when i write with my heart i can go on forever..but then i relize that i'm holding my breath

p.s-yea i know..that was random but i had to that get out i love you're story

The writing is great! I absolutely love this story. You have a natural talent for writing, and I hope to eventually read your own stories with your own characters. They will definitely be an interesting read.

Beth Brown keep on writing. The first half of this story had me howling. Ron was hilarious and I loved his not so subtle "what are you really saying here?" insinuations.

Later I was a little on the angry side... It must be frustrating to be a writer, especially when those around you can't just let you do your thing.

I was sucked right in once Harry really started explaining his characters to Hermione and things started to make a romantic and desperate sort of sense.

That last line was the killer diller. An eye opening wow of a line then it all stops.

What can I say? Your short story played me like a jukebox and I bow before you.

Great work.

I liked this, I really did. I just wish that I completely got it. Maybe I need to read it again...but that last line threw me, and I\'m not really sure what it applied to.

Other than that, I loved the dialogue. I\'m a sucker for good conversation between characters. I seriously don\'t need descriptions of any form. Just talking.

I liked it very much. I also loved \"The girl in the cafe\" and \"Affection\". Two of my favorites. Your writing is very eloquent, I must say.

Happy writing!

much love, jae

the story is great, love ron. and harry the writer is an excellent idea, hope you up date soon, or make a sequel since it says it is complete...keep it up please.

Cute start to another story! Nice idea using Harry's writing to parallel the H/Hr story. Ron's funny so I hope he stays in the story quite a bit.

how poetic.
I really quite enjoyed this. I loved the way H/Hr was so subtle.

i didnt understand the plot but it was an okay story but i didnt get it.

Very nice, and not very typical. I love the vagueness in the story!
Harry as a writer too, how original. How'd you manage to come up with this idea? It's brilliant!

This story was rather interesting. I thought it was good...but I think you might wanna continue it. This would make a good beginning but I feel that we need more details. Is the man supposed to be Harry and hes in love with Hermione or what? But for a short story I thought it was very enjoyable.

i enjoyed this, it was definitely something new and refreshing. Metawriting ftw!

ah! really nice. i like the fact that everyone is bothering Harry. XD. pretty awesome ending.

I really liked this. It's unique, and I love the way the trio interacts, especially Harry and Ron-that made me laugh. I love how Hermione critiques it, and Harry's really cute defending his story. Hope to see more writing from you! I it!

Oh...

This.is.so.good. Thats all I can say. Just too good.

There is no out-there Harry/Hermione, just an undertone. I'm not sure if that was what you were striving for but heck the actual story line was written very very very well.

And you should feel quite proud that I used very, not once, not twice, but trice.

'Would the dark eyes happen to resemble an evanescent shade of- how do you writers describe it-Chocolate brown?' lol, I loved this line. Well, I loved the entire thing too much, I think. It was very funny reading their everyday conversation, and to see Harry as a poor misunderstoon writer! Aww, poor boy. Happy to see something new from you, dear