Very nicely done. I love time travel and AU stories, and there were definitely enough ideas here to make for a bigger story. But it works quite well as a short piece, too.

The nice bit of Ron/Luna at the end makes for a nice bonus. I can just picture the chaos of a Weasley family dinner with all those grandkids!

Hm. I liked this story, especially as a change of pace from a lot of Portkey stories. One thing I've never liked, is that a person that goes back in times know what did happen, but no one else does. I've always disliked them knowing things that the other people never will know. However, I won't let that hamper my seeing as not only a good chance of pace, but well written. Good job!

I liked this a lot. Hope to read more from you soon.

I liked this story a lot. I liked how you created Harry to be almost "mad" with need to change the past and how Ron was put in a position to try and stop him but eventually allowed his friendship to overrule his responsibilities. I like that we see the outcome of Harry's actions through Ron. I really liked that. This story was short but complex in its emotions. This will be one of those stories that lingers in my mind. Great job!

i liked how harry acted at the begining and i loved the outcome of harry's travel back, are you going to show what happpend to alter the time line or is this a one shot? either way it's a fantastic story, well done

Another winner. Started out rather glum, but I'm glad to see things worked out in the end. Thanks for sharing.

I loved the beginning of this story .... it had so much potential. But, I hate to say that the ending of the story left me somewhat confused and scratching my head wondering if I missed a large chunk of the story. I would have loved to have read what Harry encountered when he went back in time to find Hermione and keep her safe. It would be interesting to see how much of the story would change. Would Ron still be an Unspeakable? Would you reconsider re-writing this story and adding more to it??

It´s very weird this story. You post the first and second paragraph, indicated the story plot and jumped for the final? what? where´s the harry adventure in the past to save Hermione, the implications about that? When they come back, and how? It´s a shame. You had a great plot in your hands and you missed. I hope you reconsider this one, and change or better shows us the MIDDLE of this story.

Changing the past is a very difficult area of literature and can cause the authors a great deal of perturbation. I always have reservations about these fics; however, I think you managed to get the idea across without dwelling too much on the how and where. Consequently I think that you have succeeded in writing a very thought provoking little story, which I for one have thoroughly enjoyed.

Well done! FS

Hmmm... way too anticlimactic at the end. And Ron didn't get physically bashed. Darn!