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I personally really liked the story. I don't know what others are saying but I thought it was a cute idea!
If there was more I would really like to know it, it's a cute story.
Keep up the good work! |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reviewing!
Your comments are appreciated  I thought it was cute too. Sadly, there was no more, but hopefully I'll have something out soon!
Thanks again! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/11/07
I thought the story was cute. I have a sugestion though...If you are intrested make a quick rewrite somewhere and make insomething funny that luna says about being thanksgiving. "Me and Dad celebrate thanksgiving!" Just because she's Luna.  |
Author Feedback: Lol
Thanks for the suggestion! I'll keep it in mind in the future!! Thanks for reviewing!
Cheers!  |
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i loveeeeeeeeeeeeed the story!!!!!! about the helping thing, well... am not very good but i am sure someone else will have the intellegance to help you!  good luck in your writing!
P.S:i am still reading ya stroies you update. dont worry! lol! |
Author Feedback: Hey there!
I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing also! Don't worry, I'm sure I'll find help eventually! Thanks for your comments. Hopefully I'll have something new in the near future!
Cheers. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 23/11/07
I love short story.
this one of the best ones.
Plases keep up the wonderful and excellent work.
I hope to read your Chrismax story.
Right now it's off to bed for me and back to work in the after noon ( Retail!) I am so tired  so good night and good luck.  |
Author Feedback: Hey, thanks for your kind and encouraging words!
I really appreciate your review. I'll definitely start putting thoughts together on a Christmas ditty!
Thanks again! |
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Ok it's not that serious so many are like oh thanksgiving is an american holiday who cares it's a fanfiction, and ur an american and it's thanksgiving so I say good work but I might be baised b/c today's my bithday too |
Author Feedback: Hey! Thanks for the comments!
And a very HAPPY BIRTHDAY to you! Of course, I like to write accurate and believable stories. However, it's great to hear that even my less than perfect pieces are still alright!
Thanks again for reviewing!
Happy Birthday! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/11/07
Sorry, I gave up. While I quite like the idea of the American thanksgiving holiday the English equivalent is the Harvest festival which is 'just' a special church service. Halloween instead of Guy Fawkes I can cope with in the Wizarding genre. |
Author Feedback: My apologies for my naivety. I honestly did not set out to offend anyone when I went and wrote this! Thanks for at least giving me a chance! |
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SkyraiderSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/11/07
Hello! I hope that you have time to expand the story, because I think it is nice and I would like to find out on what you plan for H/Hr at the Granger's. As you wish us "Happy Holidays" (thanks!), I assume you are American. Just a short note: although we have loads of trains running around in Europe, none have a "bathroom" anymore (like in the Orient Express...). Some people even rest (with a paper) on a toilet, but anyway we over here refer to these rooms as bloody plain "toilets". But fitting in two people in a toilet on the Hogwarts Express might make some magic necessary...! Only on a modern train you have big toilets for handicapped (ouch, sorry "physically challenged") people. I often find it kind of funny when Americans write, because in Europe (and the UK) things are often quite different) even the use of words). For example the term "to date somebody" does not exist. This has absolutely nothing to do with your story, which I like. There is a nice site on wikipedia showing the differences between American and British English. I found it very helpful. Cheers from across the pond! |
Author Feedback: You assume correct, I'm definitely American!
My deepest apologies if I have offended you at all with my senseless writing. I will probably write a short note of an apology and end this story here as a simple, cute, oneshot. However, I would like to go with my idea of a collection of holiday stories, that was just a general outline that appealed to me. It gives me an outlet to write simple and sweet stories.
If it is not too much trouble, could I bother you to aid me in my endeavor by corresponding with and educating me on these little things. It's quite obvious to me that I still lack a lot to write a truly engaging story. If you wouldn't mind, e-mail me and we could get to work!
As always, I appreciate the review! Thanks a lot!
Cheers,
Jo Bob |
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DanielleUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/11/07
Cute idea, but you do know that Thanksgiving is only an American holiday, right? No one else celebrates it. And I don\'t think it\'s easily explained by saying Dumbledore has a fascination with Muggles, since they celebrate Christmas at Hogwarts and don\'t act like it\'s anything unusual. Wizarding schools in America may possibly celebrate Thanksgiving, but I don\'t think European schools would.
I think a holiday to celebrate the defeat of Voldemort would be appropriate (as you mentioned in the story and another review comment). However, I don\'t think it should be called Thanksgiving (which is a horrible consumerist holiday with such a bloody history - and this is coming from an American), since I think that could potentially be confusing.
Anyway, sorry for the mini-rant up there. It\'s a cute idea for the story and I just wanted to mention the tiny detail of Thanksgiving being an American holiday. I look forward to reading more chapters. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reviewing!
Yeah, my apologies. I realized that it was only American and try to compensate for it, but I agree with you, there is a little too much of a stretch here!
I plan to end this story as it is before I start offending people without meaning to! Of course, I definitely want to run with the idea, but I would like to seek some help so that maybe my writing will make more sense in the large context. Thanks again for giving me a chance and reading!
Cheers |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/11/07
Cute,nice.
I love to wish every one a Happy Thanks Giveing.
I love this story.
I hope to read any more story's soon.
Maybe Anther Holday story?
Plases keep it up. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for the review!
The next new holiday I have planned is Christmas, but that's still coming! I will probably rewrite this chapter soon though. Thanks again for the review!
Jo Bob |
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MrsGordoUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/11/07
I love this idea but I have one critisism that slightly bugs me (a lot of authors here do this kind of thing, not just you) Harry Potter is British, we don't do Thanksgiving. Its an American Patriotic holiday that has very little to do with us so I very much doubt they'd celebrate it even at Hogwarts.
Call me a stuffy Brit if you want. Otherwise I enjoyed it, a good bit of light fluff!
Rhiannon xxx |
Author Feedback: I don't really want to call you a stuffy Brit
Thanks for the comment. It did cross my mind that Thanksgiving wasn't a British holiday, I did try to explain the problem by using Dumbledore's insane fascination with Muggles though. Perhaps I didn't explain clearly enough (which is definitely something I should work on)
My reasoning is that with the defeat of Voldemort, a holiday with an idea similar to Thanksgiving would be appropriate. It is a time to consider things that people often take for granted, and I think it's true that no matter where you live, people will always take things for granted. With a war to shake the senses into the wizarding world, a day of thanks-giving seemed appropriate.
I do appreciate the comments and I will try to do some research on British national holidays to keep things more accurate. I am definitely American though so I have little knowledge of that topic. If you could perhaps help me out in that aspect, I would greatly appreciate it--and as you can see, need it!
Thanks again for the wonderful review! Expect a clearer (and more developed) rewrite some time in the future!
Cheers! |
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I like it and your quixotic style; keep it as it is; maybe development once H&H get to Hermione's?
Cheers
FS |
Author Feedback: Hey! Thanks!
I appreciate your compliments! I'm definitely going to try to rewrite this chapter and maybe extend it out a little more until we actually get to Thanksgiving before settling things out. I agree that this lacked a lot of the development that i like! It shouldn't get too complex though since these are simple stories that are just supposed to be sweet.
Thanks again! Slainte! |
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MakkuraSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/11/07
Yeah,World War II is a cool name for a ... holiday? Oh wait, I had to read that passage twice. Yeah, I know it was supposed to be funny, but really, using it in one breath with Thanksgiving threw me off a little. Anyway, you write smoothly and it was an enjoyable read. I hope you'll update soon... Next time, I'd love to see more build-up; in your story, everybody knows already who they're in love with.
Thanks for the candy! |
Author Feedback: Thanks for your compliments and comments!
My apologies for that confusing passage, but trust me, it was even MORE complicated when I first wrote it! I'll try to keep everything a little simpler and less wordy and confusing (I have a tendency to say simple things in very many words!) I will very likely rewrite this chapter. I do agree that the development between Harry and Hermione happened a bit too quickly and without any background. I suppose I wanted to get something out for Thanksgiving though I could do a lot more with this so I will do my best to remedy the problems. Again, your review is greatly appreciated! Thanks a lot!
Cheers |
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