hey, nice to see/talk to you again LOL
anwyay,
so i think that as far as this fic goes, for a first try at writing a one-shot it's amazing (i think thos eare harder to write then fics really because you ahve to include a story in such a limited amount of space, but you alwso want to give a full, well-rounded fic) anwyay, beck to the point b/c i kind of went off on a tangent there. i thought it was really good, but as for the lyrics even tho they went with it they over powered the fic (esp. b/c they were bolded, so that drew ur attention to them more than to the fic itself) and i kind of didnt like u for saying that her riend was almost killed but not delving deeper into it, because that really got ur attention but then you just left ti at that.
i'm sorry if i came off as really critical,it wasnt so much my attention as it was to just give soem pointers (i think that those thigns are actually stuff that every1 encounters at some point or another-- i know i've been there on numerous occasions on both counts)
i thought that this was a good fic, ending a bit abrupt (just b/c of the way he said it) but thuroughly enjoyable none the less!
good luck and i hope to see more one-shots from you, because i honestly think that you coudl be really great at them!
