AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 14 | Date : 08/05/08
really love the epilogue and that hermione and draco never happened. love that they have a big family. good that they have lots of kids.  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 14 | Date : 08/05/08
you must really like pairing hermione with draco rather than harry. why would you pair her with draco. he is a ferret. no wonder you cant finish your harry/hermione stories. you have hermione with draco in most of your stories. plz no more hermione with anyone else besides harry. and vice versa with harry. only harry and hermione.  i still like your ideas. just not your pairing. |
Author Feedback: The only story that I have ever started and not completed was Black's Secret, and interestingly enough I do have chapter six sitting here in my hard drive begging to be released.
Unfortunately for you, these are my stories there for I pair who I want with whomever I want.
I actually don't think I have paired the two, Hermione and Draco, in very many stories at all. I might be mistaken, but I believe this is the only where I strictly say Hermione and Draco were a thing. I do know of one other story that I led on that they might have been, but ultimately, it was more of a tutoring thing.
Sorry that you aren't enjoying my little stories here. You may want to try to do what I do when I read a fan-based fiction and I don't like how it went. I write it the way I would want it to happen.
Thank you for reading, besides... |
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Ah cool so they finally get to be a family Great loved it very well done indeed. Wow they have that many kids. Sound like they have their own quittich team here. Love the last paragraph makes all the anguish of the story sooo worth it. |
Author Feedback: I think, part of Hermione and Harry's number of kids is their faith in each other, so they don't really try and prevent children... Harry always took me as a man who would have lots of children, and since he and Hermione are only children, the large family just felt right... I hope they stop at eight, though... because I would be exhausted if I was them... lol...
Thanks for the review, and sticking with it!
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That Bitch Ginny always knew she was evil and not just from having part of voldieshort's soul in here either. Wow what a showdown. |
Author Feedback: I am not a Ginny fan, and if this website didn't have shipping rules things would be different. Thankfully, there are other websites that allow for a little more freedom. LOL.
Thanks for the review. |
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Whoa now there is a nasty surprise a baby with part of Voldieshort's souls shudders at the thought. Poor Hermione having to do that to a child after just having her own baby. And Harry was there interesting had they took a picture. Cool |
Author Feedback: Yeah. Came down to it, though, that Ginny just manipulated everyone into thinking it so, and tricking everyone into doing things (or thinking that they had done things). Do we even know if D'Agostino's first born son is really dead? Hermione thought she had killed him (and a load more other people), but then we learn Hermione only thought what Ginny wanted her (and the others) to believe. After all, it was Ginny who had to dispose of the boy's body...
Perhaps, he is still out there?
Thanks for the review, and I too thought that Draco holding onto the photo of Ava and Harry was pretty cool. |
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IndieSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 16/09/07
That's a really interesting start! I'm definitely intrigued. I have to admit, things are a bit confusing right now, concerning some comments Harry and Hermione make (like, why would she ask him why he's calling her Hermione? What is he supposed to call her?) and what on earth is going on with their memories. However, I'm sure I'm get it ahead of myself again and everything will be explained very soon! I'm off to read the rest. Good job so far! |
Author Feedback: I have to warn you, it does get rather confusing at times, but it helps to read a few chapters at a time (or the whole thing continuously).
I think they (Ron and Harry) are used to calling Hermione a more endearing 'Mione' than her full first name.
Thank you for your review. |
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This story definitely lived up to its initial promise. I enjoyed reading it immensily. The only comment I have is that there are parts where it is a bit difficult to follow. Mostly from one chapter to the next. This was very minor however.
Well congradulations on finishing an excellent tale. |
Author Feedback: Transitions have never been my strong point (as from one chapter to the next). Sometimes the chapter to the next would be a day later, sometimes just moments... it can be confusing, I agree. Next time, I will definitely try to make it flow more smoothly.
Thank you for your review! And thank you for reading! |
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Great Epilogue !
I guessed something like this would come up...  |
Author Feedback: Yeah?
Thanks for the review. I couldn't very well leave it 100% happily ever after... 98% would have to do.
Thank you for reading. |
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ahh, I absolutely loved the epilogue!!!!! It was so completely perfect!! So does Ava know that Harry and Hermione are her birth parents. Wow, I can't believe it is like 13 years later Anyway, great chapter. It is almost kind of sad that it is ending. The only thing I would recommend is slowing down the plot line a little. I was a bit hard to keep up with everything that is going on. Other than that, I thought the whole story was fantastic, I liked the fact the everyone defended Ginny that she had hurt, and the Molly didn't hate Harry. I also loved the constant updates, that was awesome! Hope you post some more stories! |
Author Feedback: The whole story plays out in a time frame of like three weeks (minus, of course the epilogue), so things really did have to play out pretty quickly.
I am glad that you like it, and while I am not sad that it is ending (it became stressful), I definitely will miss writing this particular story.
I believe Ava does know about Harry and Hermione being her birth parent, but to be respectful to the parents who raised her, she calls them Aunt and Uncle. It is not so uncommon, I think. |
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EldanarSigned | Chapter : 14 | Date : 15/09/07
sorry, I didn\'t like it...
I hoped they would raise ava & be a happy family...
does she even know that she\'s their daughter??
and... too many children, don\'t know, just seems unrealistic to me.... |
Author Feedback: Sorry you didn't like it, but I couldn't imagine it any other way. Too many kids? Really? The Weasley's had seven... six boys and Ginny. Seven isn't a lot, nor is eight. I am a big supporter of big families. |
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An interesting and complex plot. The homonyms presented a few problems, for example one time you used 'boarder' instead of 'border'. The dates of the obliviations in the hall of records would have been better with spelt out months as I got confused by the american dating mm/dd/yy instead of dd/mm/yy. |
Author Feedback: To be honest, the English (American and UK) language is a difficult one. And I didn't think about the UK vs US dating until after the fact, but figured I am American (and it is terribly obvious by the 'voice' I write in) and the way I would write a date is mm/dd/yy, so it was comfortable.
I hate homonyms... lol... right/write, my myspace page reflects my inability to pull them apart (user ID WriteMeRight) Cracks me up that as I continue through school, I still SUCK at the language I was born into...
Thanks for the review. |
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sertadSigned | Chapter : 14 | Date : 15/09/07
I really liked the end (I never would have figured out that it was Ginny, what a twist!). |
Author Feedback: Yeah?
I didn't even touch on half the notes I originally scripted for this story. Pages and pages of dialog and scenes that just would have made this twice as long, and I am not sure it would have added anything more.
God, there was this one scene where Ginny and Harry... anyways... not important.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!!
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Now that was an awesome epilogue that tied everything up in a neat little package! Thank you for writing an epilogue  |
Author Feedback: No problem, always happy to comply!
Thanks for reading and thanks for reviewing! |
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pstibbonsSigned | Chapter : 14 | Date : 15/09/07
The writing was good, but I thought the story petered out. But you did good though, by finishing. Keep writing, you'll get better! (And of course, I have written far worse and abandoned far more often.) |
Author Feedback: Yeah, sorry about the petering out. Kind of lost vision there, and I have never been good at follow through and completion. I get bored/frustrated and just plain sick.
Thanks for reading, and thanks for the words of encouragement. |
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EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!
Millions of little Potter babies!! Did I call it or WHAT?! YEAH! *cough* Anyway...!! Ohmygod, that was ah-mazing!
I thought that leaving Ava with her "parents" was actualy quite reasonable, and realistic. I know I'd probably do the same thing, though I'd cry like hell and even reconsider millions and trillions of times, but in the end, I bet someone else would probably do the same. After all, at least they've stayed close to them. :-)
Eeeee!!! Millions of Potter babies!! EEEE!!! (Yeah, I know, I already said that.  )
But wow, amazing! I loved it. 
Thank you, once again!!
Swishy |
Author Feedback: LOL...
After I read your first review, I was a little concerned about backlash about leaving Ava with her muggle parents, but it just felt right. Harry and Hermione did struggle with the decision (thousands of tears, etc), but it just felt soooo right!
I am so happy that you liked the epilogue, and I am glad that all and all, it worked out in the end, and I like that all of the families are sooo close! (I wonder if anyone accidentally takes home the wrong children since there are so many of them??). I thought it was great when Ava's brothers all end up getting letters... brings it full circle. |
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