One of the best stories I read and I read a lot of them! Not long but great! I loved the slight angst in it and short scenes!! Great work.

I really liked this fic. Something in the tone conveyed the total depth of the emotion in the story. I also enjoyed the imperfection of their relationship. Very well done!!

that was so fucking great. i really liked it. especially when she just said i love you after he asked her how her day was. awesomeness. lovely. great.

The premise for this piece was great. And you did a good job. I would suggest making the "passage of time" more obvious. As I read this story, I got lost on how much time had passed from the first instance to the last. Also making it more clear as to who is the "voice" would be nice. There aren't a lot of "feelings" in this story.

Thanks for the read.

i like one-shots that build up powerful scenes like your ending.

the beginning was pretty hazy to me - although the cigarette smoke described might be a good camouflage for that...good symbolism. (though I wish they didn't smoke. )

But as I said, your ending has more impact that way. Suddenly everything was clear, and there was not a mention of the cigarettes in this bout their shared in bed. Just great!

I don't know if you intended it that way, but that worked for me. as well as the conversation after Hermione saw her old flame.

this is a good one. Looking forward to your other stories.

Like wow! Talk about spooky! It's something that hits a little too close to home.

Interesting. It was a bit angsty, more of an undertone since the ending turned out happy in the end. Nice one-shot though.

Its a good fic but i think they are out of character don't u think?...cause i don't think hemrione would smoke...she is too senseible to smoke..but over-all it was a good story

The writing is good, but these characters don't sound like Harry and Hermione. And the only thing that makes this remotely acceptable for Portkey is that they end up together at the end, after years of behaving nothing like the canon characters.

Very sweet and telling of the H/Hr relationship. Always there for each other, and supportive when they try other relationships. Loved the ending of course! The smoking bits bothered me a little. Mostly for personal taste, but also because it just seems like something Hermione would never do. She's too smart for that. Still, I recognize that it doesn't bother other people like it does me. Great little ficlet.

I don't know if I would call that angsty, really. It felt completely angst-free to me. That's a good thing, though, IMNSHO.

There were a few minor typos, but nothing that took away from the experience at all - and I can be pretty picky about that sort of thing.

I am pretty sure that Hermione Granger, daughter of two dentists, and a very cerebral character, wouldn't be the 'smoke after sex' type. At the same time, though, I really enjoyed the imagery, and there's nothing wrong with going a step or two ooc.

ANYWAY, I loved it. Thank you for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work!

I thought that it was pretty good. I got a little bit confused during a couple of parts but after I re-read I understood.

Sorry to say so, but this is one of the worst stories here on portkey and I've read almost all of them. What a waste of space ... piece of shit. You get it.

It just sounds like a random piece of writing in which you labelled the characters with Harry and Hermione. They are completely unrecognisable. It is almost impossible to make them even more OOC.

Your other story is much better.

Awesome ....
This is really good stuff.
I liked 'A Long Way from Home' very much ... and this has further increased my liking for you.

Keep Writing

phew....for a minute there I thought this might end nastily. But I'm glad they ended up together. Those are the best endings in my opionion! haha