What a nice surprise!!!

I mean, I was just looking for good ficts and I found one that I really love! Guess what! Was yours!!!! But I must really say that I prefer this fic much more in spanish... maybe because I speak spanish and not english hahaha talking about that: sorry for my lack of spelling and grammar!!
Well, I still think that it's much warmer in spanish ('Vaya Cliché' jajaja ), and I also missed Harry calling Hermione 'cariño' instead of 'sweets' ...
Well I should stop destroying english! I'm waiting for a new fic of yours!

Kisses!
Carla

Cliche'd perhaps, but still nice written and realized. It does build nicely to the end and wraps cleanly.

Hey,
That was a really interesting and cute fic. Nicej ob. I really liked it. It was pretty cliche..Nicej ob! lol.

Apesadumbrado, intentaré hablar en inglés.

No like Harry saying "Sweets" Hermione. No mean "Sweats". Sorry bad English.
Mucho amor, yo

¡Apesadumbrado! ¡Signifiqué decir los dulces, no sudo! ¡No tuve gusto de Harry que llamaba Hermione “dulces” no “sudo”!
Mucho amor, yo

Era todo el muy bueno, yo apenas no estaba muy contento con “suda” la parte, él no cupo con el carácter de Harry. ¡Apesadumbrado, ésa es mi solamente queja sin embargo!
Gracias, mucho amor, yo.

I thought it was a very sweet little piece. The only thing that confused me was the use of Headquarters until I realized you meant the rooms for the HeadBoy & HeadGirl.

Lisa

It's me again
Just since I have them still in mind and you'd have to search, here are the two mistakes I found:

"She couldn’t help the hot rush of disappointment that ran through her body: HER Harry, even after so many years of fighting for his life, couldn’t have a complete existence."

"Hermione couldn’t really recall the precise moment she fell in love with HER best friend, who happened to be the Boy-Who-Saved, the Boy-Who-Vanquished, the Boy-Who-Triumphed, the Boy-Who-... and so many more silly nicknames that Hermione couldn’t remember all of them. But she knew something. And that was that, for her, he was ‘just Harry’."

I hope I'm helpfull and not annoying


Lie

That's really a sweet little fic In the end it got a bit too... how did you call it... cliché but I can't say you didn't warn me... Anyways an enjoyable story, i hope you will write many more like that...
only one little thing: two times you wrote "his" instead of "her", that got me out of the flow a bit, so if you ever have the time to search for the two little mistakes and fix them...
thanks for writing and sharing,
Lie

Very cute little one shot. Really meaningful. Keep up the good work.

Not bad. Watch your pronouns, and do a little more proofreading and you'll be just fine.

hey! that wz a nice li'l 1-shot, though i personally m not in much favour of "sweets" 4 Hermione. Harry cud simply call her " 'mione" 's he had 1ce. afterall Hermione is not a girlish-girl. but the story wz still nice neway, who doesn't like happy n contenting endings, with no major character death? also, i m glad that they both simply blurted out their feelings in 1 go, rather then wrestling with their own selfs. y waste time? gud story.

You can never get tired of reading about the coming together of this wonderful pair. Too bad JK won't let it happen. Nice story.

Very good, and I thought it was actually very in character. I mean, it would totally seem typical to me, as cliche as it now seems in fandom, that Harry would hide his feelings for his best friend and Hermione would do likewise, eventually spilling it out in a shouting-match/tearful, dramatic way (and although that sort of sarcastic, it's not intended to be).

As far as critiquing, the "sweets" thing got on my nerves honestly. Although, I reread your "Inside A Cupboard" and noticed the fact you said you translated it from Spanish, so I wondered if it was the same for this in some instances. That would answer the "Sweets" questions since I don't know that I've generally heard that as a term of endearment, so when I was like 1/3 story away from finishing, I actually copy/pasted it into a word processor and replaced all the "sweets" with "love," which for me personally was the only term of endearment I could handle from a guy.

Additionally, there were a few instances where you said "his best friend" when I think you meant "her best friend" since you were talking about Hermione in relation to Harry; it was meant to be a feminine possessor "her" instead of his. These are just basic beta-things to catch, but I'd thought I'd share in case you'd want to change them.

I really loved your story though, especially how Hermione would notice his loss of "a twinkling in his green eyes"!!!!

H&H4EVA
Hermione Rae