very nice =]]] ive never used drugs like that before either so i wouldnt know if it wasnt believable or now though. great job =]

Slightly confused about one thing...if i saw someone passed out/overdosed with a weak pulse on the floor I wouldn't start attacking someone or just leave him on the bed. I would have thought they'd take him to whoever the school nurse was. Otherwise

lol i liked it and i hope ur day brightens lol i like all ur stories

You handle emotions beautifully and the character personalities very delicately. Good Job. My only criticism is that if you don't know certain material, it's better to stay away. I know you tried to explore relationships and feelings ("whos fault it was") but James on a drug OD was a bit too much.
Even if it wasn't believable and he was trying to commit suicide, you can't leave a person on a bed like that. And when James woke up, that wouldn't have been his reaction.

Well, oh well. It was pretty and flowed nicely. Write more.

I think that it was pretty good. To make the drug part more believing, you would probably need to make it have a little more detail and make it a little longer, but it was a one-shot so they are usually not that long. I liked it overall.

if someone gets an over dose, you dont just place them in a bed cos then they'll die. and well, it was a good plot, but it was unrealistically written

Well... I could've liked it more if the drug stuff was written better. I mean... The story itself is good, original, but still... If someone has an overdose, you can't just place that person in bed waiting for them to wake up. They die.

At least, they should have taken James to the hospital wing or something.

I liked how you handled Lily and all the rest of the marauders, but they should've been more affected with the fact that James had had an overdose... but besides that, it's not a bad story.

Didn't like it and don't like the F word.

To be fair, I'm not a fan of J & L stories, just read it for the title.