I liked how you had snippets and shots and scenes and yet they still make this picture--albeit impressionist rather than still-life... it's muted tones and half-finished ideas that really make this a nice piece. I'm quite impressed!

Good work!

Stephanie

I liked it. It was nice to read something new from you; I hope your muse comes to it's senses and grants you (and us) with some new H/Hr stuff in the future.

Thanks for sharing!

I liked it, especially the end. there was nothing odd about that indeed.

i don't know where you got the words to the poem for...but they are incorrect. It actually goes:
Out of the night that covers me
Black as the Pit from pole to pole
I thank whatever gods maybe
For my unconquerable soul.
In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody but unbowed.

Beyond this place of wrath and tears
Looms but the horror of the shade
And yet the menace of the years
Finds and shall find me unafraid.

It matters not how strait the gate
How charged with punishment the scroll
I am the Master of my fate
I am the Captain of my soul.

Well, it's a wonderful work, my dear writer. I think Ron that ron noticing 'something' the other two don't know... and how they understand each other... Good interaction, it shows how much their friendship matters, and how they have grown to be inseparable, that they are going to face whatever comes in their way to live.
Congratulations, and until next time,
Sakura_txell

Whee. A new story from you. Perfect end to my day

I liked this a lot! The scenes and clippets from their lives are great and written so flawlessly and smoothly. I really like the excerpts you chose to be put in italics between each scene. Great stuff! Is there going to be more to this story? I think the status said "In Progress". It could still end here, too, though.

I thought that was amazingly good. I really hope that you continue to work on this story. Well done.