I only got about a quater way through this shit before I gave up. What kind of fan would make Hermione into a whore that flits from one bed to another. There has to be a problem with your head.
Cretinus writers should not be allowed to post crap.

I'll admit that I never read the original but I think people were nuts for complaining, that was a fabulous story. It made me cry, I was listening to Avril Lavigne's "When You're Gone" so that probably helped the tears along, but it was still a fab story. I definitely liked to original ending better than the alternate, it works better with the tone of the story. Keep writing, you're great!

hauhauhauahua, I think I prefer the second... less drama, more laught... real life is hard enought... ahuahauhau
But the fic was very dramatic itself, you know, how can someone be in such trouble?
"I got trouble, trouble, trouble, always knocking on my door!!!"

That was really really great. I have to say, as sad as it sounds, reading the first ending, is a lot better then the second one. The first one just seems more realisitic, of course, it's quite depressing, and the way the whole beginning of the story and the middle, it just goes right if she killed herself. Very very awesome. I really liked it. The second ending was happy though. I liked that too, but...the first ending was a lot better. Lovely job. So depressing.

I liked it, I liked both endings and I love seeing kind of the difference... it's neat. It was a beautiful story.
I love it
keeo it u

the story's much better than your last update... i like this one better... good thing you changed the actual ending.. good job!!!

I support h/hr!!!
Proud to be a Harmonian!!!

The problem with the original didn't lay with the fact that Hermione kills herself at the end. Albeit ending that way was HIGHLY cliche and blown out of proportion, the real problem lay with the fact that Hermione had essentially "played" both Harry and Ron while she tried to figure out her feelings. Being stuck between two guys is one thing, but sleeping with Harry and then going back and sleeping with Ron (several times I might add) is just wrong. Hermione wasn't in a very pressured position (she wasn't ever really good friends with Ginny nor does she have a such a close knit life with the Weasleys that their bad opinion of her would kill her) so it just seems so immoral how she can sit there weighing the options of Harry or Ron despite the fact that she claims to love Harry.

The alternate ending seemed like only half the effort was put into it and it still did nothing to excuse Hermione's actions nor did it give any revelation as to why Harry would forgive her for using him.

this story...while i did not like hermione killing herself, was different and beautiful and i very much enjoyed it. i really do not like the alternate ending. it just seems too easy. like all hermione went through, it was just summed up in three sentences. you should never give in to your readers if your original post was the way you wanted it to be. it just seemed like you gave in and made a beautiful piece into a cheesy happy ending story.

Well. I read the original story and now I read this, and I'm glad to see that you put some effort into changing the ending...

For obvious shipping reasons I liked this ending much better, but I believe that you should never feel obligated to change your stories. The original story is not welcomed here because of Portkey rules; but maybe it would be greatly accepted in FF.net, for example. If you liked the original piece better than this one, which is altered, then go ahead and publish it! Don't give up on it.

First, I appreciate the effort you invested in attempting to make this a more 'Harry and Hermione' story. I saw in a few places, especially towards the end, the changes in the text that reflect that she no longer has feelings for Ron, although she remains torn apart by the guilt. Thus, the story is much better now in terms of the 'ship': in the end it is clear she loves Harry, not Ron. (However, I still am not certain that even the altered story complies with all the Portkey rules.)

Second, it is good that you placed the warning for character death in the beginning. I think in future stories you should mention that this is a self-inflicted death. In many fics, characters are killed off but suicide generally warrants a specific warning.

Third, for obvious reasons, I preferred the alternate ending. However, it is your story and you should write it as you envision it. You should never feel obligated to change a story as a result of reviews.

Please continue writing and posting your stories. My reviews were not intended to discourage you. I know it takes a lot of courage to post a story. There are many different sites for stories. You just have to decide where your story best fits.

This is fenriswolf; following your email I re-read your story, or tried to at least.

This story is still not compliant. You STILL have a graphic description of Hermione having sex with Ron, which is expressly forbidden by portkey rules. As for their relationships, Hermione's continuing relationship with Ron leading to her suicide is also non-compliant.

As for your 'alternate ending', I found it rather insulting to be frank. It was so completely out of left field it didn't fit the rest of the story. Rather it came across as something you just threw together to keep the mods from yanking the story.

I don't know if the mods have contacted you on this story or not. If they have, and this is your response, well, you're lucky I'm not a mod. I'd suspend your posting priveleges.

While this may be a nicely written story, it should not have been posted here at Portkey. I read stories here because I want to read stories where Hermione loves Harry. That is what Portkey is about. In stories on Portkey, Hermione may have had a relationship with Ron in the past, but she loves Harry in the present. Thus, this story, where Hermione loves both Harry and Ron, has sex with both of them, and is torn between them, does not belong here. There are plenty of other sites for stories like this.
In addition, I generally do not like suicide related stories. Most authors generally post a warning when the topic material of their stories deals with such controversial issues. You should have as well.

Well, besides the obvious errors I can find in this story, like the lack of character suicide warnings or the lack of an appropriate rating this story makes very little sense to me.

I can understand that the nature of the story required the characters, namely Hermione, to be at least a bit ooc to further the story but to do it so... negatively and in such an overdramatized manner just makes Hermione seem completely inhuman or just really mentally unstable.

"Oh, they caught on that I was going back and forth between them... Oh well, better kill myself then."

Another thing that bothered me was the romantic nature of the story. This IS a Harry/Hermione shipping site and it almost seems as if you took a Ron/Hermione fic (A very twisted one) and attatched that little bit about her loving Harry at the end for kicks.

Hokay...
I loved this story, I needed something tragic and depressing to make me feel better about my life. So score one for authur!! Though I do agree with some of the other reviewers about breaking the few Portkey rules, I'm not going to report you and all that jazz. And though I believe Hermione would never do that, I don't see why people are getting so worked up about it. It's fanfiction. It's nearly IMPOSSIBLE to get ANYONE into character!! Trust me I have a really hard time! Now if you put 'characters might be ooc' in the summary, they might not be as angry. I'm not, so don't worry. And I saw many reviews on the way they talked at the end. I understood, it was a type of poetry, am I right? Good job on this, and don't let the haters flame you!!

Kelsey

This is pretty good...and depressing. I like Rage and Mystificaiton though...when are you gonna update?