What you wrote isn't really harry/hermione. Not once does it point to it. Also nothing NC17.

Once again, this was a brilliant story! I actually wanted to read this version, but I was too lazy to think of clicking the "next" button...
but as I've said in my review to the other version, this was a fantastic story and very realistic.
I think that the separated chapters added to the feeling behind the story - kind of melancholic, I think.
I'd really love if you wrote more, regardless of what it was - I just want to see what will happen next.
I'd like to see Harry prove Hermione wrong - but if that wasn't what you were planning, I'd really like to see what it was that you WERE planning.
Please consider it - I'd love to read it.
I love the originality of this story, by the way. I think some people just weren't expecting to see a story like this, but I like it very much.
I'd love a sequel *begs*
-Michelle

plz plz plz plz write more. you have to prove hermione wrong, that harry isnt as shallow as to not love her anymore because of a scar. he has plently of them. Most of them EMOTIONAL...
plz plz plz write more.
I BEG OF YOU (he he)

Harry and Hermione forever and ever and ever and ever and ever and ever and ever ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !! ! ! ! ! ! !
!! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

Interesting story. The short chapters were different but not a problem - they were dealing with different phases of Hermione's emotions and wouldn't have read well if they were one paragraph right after another - no impact.

That being said, I think you should continue to the point of Harry's acceptance. We ALL know it wouldn't matter what her physical condition was, he'd love her anyway - she just has to accept herself. That will be hard for a perfectionist like Hermione............

Oh comme on you just can not leave us like that ! Keep writing! Im hook just make the chapters longer

If you want convincing, I'll give you convincing ... don't bother !!!

Nothing more annoying than an author who finish a 200 words so called chapter begging for acclamations and pleas for more. That's pathetic. So I repeat ... don't bother and I'll go read the new story by fieryfalcon ... that's worth reading.

First things first, I believe that you should continue this.
I would like to read how Hermione learns to accept herself and how Harry learns about her scarring and reacts to it. The books never show any real reaction on Harry's part to what happened to Hermione after the DoM scene itself. But happened to Hermione could easily have caused her behavior in HBP. I could easily imagine how the scar detrimentally impacts Hermione's self-esteem, never too high to begin with, and this could possibly be a reason for her 'settling' for Ron in HBP, perhaps since she no longer views herself as worthy of Harry or perhaps since Harry never showed any interest in what happened to her. Additionally, the brush with death is bound to have an impact on her and consequently on her relationship with Harry, since ultimately it was because of him that she was hurt. Therefore, there is room for such a story, in whatever way you might like to write it.
One thing - I found the very short chapters of only a few lines to be very disconcerting. The same effect -- shattered thoughts -- can be achieved by technical means within a longer framework.
Again, all in all, a very good job so far.

Holy crap. You cannot just leave me hanging. I am hoooked. I love it now. I am so excited to read the next chapter. I don't care how short the other chapters are. You must continue it and do soemthing. I mean, I have to know if they get together or anything or anything. I was wondering why this was rated NC17, but now I see. Lovely job. Please keep writing...

Well, that sucks for them. I wouldn't be able to do anything about it, as in dealing with the whole ordeal....

You are following the book very well though...

Wow...that was a total of three sentences. Wow...wait...four or so. Well, I am going to finish this story out, because now I'm hooked. lol. And it's short, so yea.

I take it this is how the whole story is going to be. Well, I'll get use to it, but...I don't know if I like it that well. Interesting job though.

Ok, well, again with the short chapter....

Going to keep reading. I hope they're a bit longer as it gets more in the end.

Very interesting in keeping the chapter short. I wish it was a lot longer than that becuase the last one was so short. WEll, it keeps the reader on their toes. Thanksfully I dont' have to wait for anything.

Hm...ok...well. I do wish this chapter was longer, Going to keep up with this because I'm still interested. I hope they're longer.

Very interesitng way of keeping it so short though.

Well, I wonder when we'll see some H/Hr. Obviously in teh beginning when she kept talking to him and stuff. Welll, still, I can't wait to read more. I like the differences in teh lenghtes of the chapters, though I'd like them to be longer...lol