Er, Harry and Voldemort pure bloods?! And the *only* ones?! And what are the Weasleys? Longbottons, Bones, Malfoys, Blacks...

look i like this story one of the most but the time tine takes to wait for the story to get a new chapter. ( I AM NOT MONING ) lol
your story is the BEST plz write i bit faster
good luk
Andy

I just love this story keep it up okay. Its just a little confusing because sometimes you dont no which person is talking but i figured it out so a tip when someone else talks make a new paragraph and tell who is talking like blah blah Harry said so its less confusing. I hope you will take me advise and use it to help out your writhin abilities.

your story sounds intriging

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did you take some of this from the matrix because you did it veary well

Hermione was going to fly in the sixth book, yes..but not as keeper. As chaser. And Colin Creevey as a death eater? Unsuspecting yes, but that is just wrong.
By the way, I'm back in the annoyed mood today.

Fifteen points for almost being late? Yep, sounds like something Snape would do. Consider that a compliment.
The reason why i'm in a good mood is 'cause I'm listening to Blink 182's "First Date".Good song.
Have you heard it?

Every Potter fan's talking about Harry/Hermione. Guess I can't contradict you this time. Consider that a compliment.

Torture scene gruesome, very gruesome. But good for plot.Consider that a very good compliment, since I'm a very critical critic. Weird saying.
What's with Voldemort drinking?It's almost laughable...I get this picture of Him and a few death eaters, giggling drunkenly, clinking glasses at a bar with loads of dead people, strewn out along the floor. Makes me smile.

Fifteen death eaters? Are you kidding me? D'you really think the Dark Lord will have enough supporters by now to be able to expend fifteen without regret?

This is a single third-person view story, therefore, you can't have what Hermione's feelings are.
And H/Hr smut? Are they paying you for Erotica stories? I mean COME ON, COME TO YOUR SENSES! THIS IS HARRY POTTER. INTENDED FOR KIDS AND ADULTS. If the author wanted smut, SHE WOULD'VE WROTE BEFORE NOW! Weirdo.
-NO SLANG.

Your memory is obviously poor. Remember in book 5, Ch."The Lost Prophecy", Dumbledore tells Harry:"He did not choose the pure-blood, but you, the half-blood, like himself."
Don't make things up.

-NO SLANG.

Good with the Zen Garden and the trainer.
D'you know, I haven't seen one chapter in which Harry DOESN'T cry. So please, improve the mood.

Sirius is supposed to be dead. DEAD. IRRETRIEVABLE! What makes you think you can bring him back to life?