Oooooh! Continued pith - I am glad
Again, a line I would have writen differently is "Come and fight your fate!" It's awkward.
The best I can come up with is "Come and meet your fate!" or some other equally clichéed line, but I'm sure given some thought it could be better.

I'm going to go on reading now.
Thank you for sharing with us, and keep up the good work!

thanks for a great beginning - would love to read more, hopefully soon

please please please write the next chapter i really love your story so far and i've been desperate for a good final battle story for a long long time!

Yip,
thats summat like how i think itll end as well......
itll definately have somethin to do with that scene in PS.....im sure of it!!

HARMONY WILL SAIL!!

Pretty good little one shot. I love the dialouge between them. Keep up the good work.

Good scene! I love how you mirrored the scene in PS/SS, good job. I love one-shots and this was a nice one. Love to read some more of your fics!

aaawwwww..... i like the fiction..it's so cool and a little sad but i liked the way you're thinking about how harry and hermione will face the final battle....

I support the Good Ship!!!
I support h / hr!!!
Go Harmony!!!

That was a good fic for your fist one. Great job on that. I thought it was sweet. Nicej ob. I liked how you put in the fact that Hermione didn't add "love" in that little spiel that she made in first year.

Good job. Keep on writing. It was really good. I am sorry that I don't have any constructive critism, I'm not that great of a writer..well...not one really at all...I just read the fics.