damn, that was dark.
















that said, this actually looks like a good start to on of those dark hhr stories that there are too few of...moonlit nights being one of the best ones.

Now this made me shudder.
It is so ... human. Heroes are still people, and normal people are where heroes come from.
Very drastic, this story, tearing away all pleasantries and calling the monster by its name: WAR

BTW, this story reminded me a bit of "Buckbeak's Flight" by Paracelsus, profile 8272 at Portkey. You might like it.

Wow, very graphic but very well written. You caught the emotions beautifully. Very well done

wow. powerful stuff. very nicely written. so dark though. still, an interesting read. =)

Your story, wow. A sequel? so good. I get angry sometimes when people don't relize that they are children being shapped by war. you show that. You are a good writer.

oh my god... for lack of better words: that was f**king awesome!!! I love the description in this, it's so rich. This ones definately a winner!!!
Congratulations

~JL

oh my god... for lack of better words: that was f**king awesome!!! I love the description in this, it's so rich. This ones definately a winner!!!
Congratulations

~JL

Wow. I haven't read a story that starts out this dark from the very beginning in quite a while. What's more, is that it isn't one of those unfortunately proliferate attempts at it, this is the real thing. Well written, where the words lure the reader into having that feeling of baited breath, that emotion that most authours cannot bring out. I definitely look forward to more of this.

Wow. This is a really harsh story, but absolutly terrific! It's powerfully written with no errors, and I love the differnt Boy Who Blahs at the end. Very nice job.

I'd love to be able to say that's an ugly story. Love to say that it's reprehensible behaviour. Love to, but can't.

Nope, can't. Been there, had that. Both sides, though without the reasoning. Needed that anger to drive, the hatred and raw, thoughtless, overpowering emotion to pull, tug, push, force. And the release it brings is fantastic. It seems like you've been there... >

You put it masterfully to words.

This is AMAZING. So real, so intense, so original. Not hella cookie cutter sugar coated. its hella fierce and ruff!! I loved it and I commend you for writing such an awesome fanfic

Wow! That was a potent statement. I found it to be repellant and tantalizing. Your introduction set the stage and you proceded to live up to it.
Mostly I didn't like it but I couldn't stop reading it.
You done good. Thanks...
Old Chuck

Wow, that was really good and very moving. You made it angry and violent, but kept it sad and heart-wrenching. Nice job. Now I must go back to reading Vox Corporis...

wow as you may have saw i just started your other storie but this reminds me of like poems and things of war and sufering but then it asloreminds me of life anyone who can put that much emotion in writing is great
your reader,
thedude24135

damn that was hard core! i love your writting style. i cant wait to finish vox so cheers!