Kitnina5Signed | Chapter : 21 | Date : 09/02/07
Very interesting. That was a definite surprise. Hmmm this story is going really well. I can't wait until the next chapter! |
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Kitnina5Signed | Chapter : 20 | Date : 09/02/07
I love the subtle humor within the story it helps from keeping the story too dark. Love it. Can't wait until the next chapter! |
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Kitnina5Signed | Chapter : 19 | Date : 09/02/07
I just want to let you know I love your story, perhaps it's from all of the games my brother use to play and I got addicted watching, but I truly think it's interesting. This chapter definitely is good, but I have to say in my own imagination I feel like Harry is rigid and almost cold. But I guess he has to be. Can't wait until the next chapter. |
Author Feedback: Perfect, was going for that sort of feel because he really does need to be cold and brutal, that and well, you'll see in time to come. |
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Ok that was odd.Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can. |
Author Feedback: Next chapter will explain it don't worry, just google the word genestealer and when you do remeber that 'only idea/basis not direct copy' |
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That was great.Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can. |
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Hey I've really enjoyed this story. Your comments at the top were right and I really like how this story is very different. I can't wait to see what Exodus finds out about this new planet. Keep the chapters coming |
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JeanasUnsigned | Chapter : 19 | Date : 03/02/07
Dont worry Dragonis,
Your story is refreshing for me like a long due rain. I really like the way you mixed the fantasical elements with pure science-fiction space opera.I do like to read space opera a lot, a beloved series for me is the the Honor Harrington series by David Weber. I like the way you try to expend the tiny HP universe to a bigger one. So dont really worry if others are not happy write exactely as you want and how you want. It´s not really easy to write a story with a mix of sciende fiction and fantistical elements blending to make a whole its quite a difficult job and you are doing it greatly.
Waiting for the next chapter. |
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That was great.Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can. |
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Kitnina5Signed | Chapter : 18 | Date : 30/01/07
Very interesting chapter. I really enjoyed it. It's a good setup at the end to lead into the next chapter. Can't wait to read the next chapter. |
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davekSigned | Chapter : 18 | Date : 28/01/07
Nice chapter. There is much background to remeber and yet more to come I am afraid. Well update fast otherwise I will have to read the whole stor agian if I want to make sense of a new chapter |
Author Feedback: Actually I'll be cutting back a lot of background, although I do have it all planned out on a separate piece of paper most of it you won't actually see. A few reasons for this
A) It gets confusing for you guys.
B) Makes it harder to change things on the fly if there is a lot of set background I must work in.
C) It makes more sense not to put it in 
Thanks for the review bro. |
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Passer ByUnsigned | Chapter : 18 | Date : 27/01/07
It was interesting to begin with but the lack of H/Hr is annoying.
Hermione is annoying because she's boring. She does nothing to add to the plot. She's a teacher big whoop. Why not make her an Auror and a leader?
With how the story is heading, and how super Harry and Exodus are, Hermione should be stuck in the kitchen and be the little women.
And why can't the trio be the trio again?
It all seems rushed and it would have been nice to read how Hermione has coped over the last 8 years, especially with Voldermort wanting her son. Also, it would have been nice if Hermione was more wary and stand offish with Harry. It can't be too rosey.
Hello, the bar scene with 'Sarge' flirting with that woman. 8 years with amnesia, surely he's dated and more.
Hermione is weak. Ron is looking stupid to make Harry's new commrades look good.
But I'll click on the new chapters to see if Hermione and Ron improves. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for bringing this up and I hope that a lot of people do read this, as what you've outlined here is more or less a big intention of the story.
The major thing that I had in mind before starting was to make a really unique HP story that combines concepts and ideas from a variety of other genres and universes, to be honest I didn't think it was going to be possible in the first place but went for it anyway, and so far it looks to be going pretty well.
After reading a lot of the HP fiction I found that a lot of it was very cookie cutter, the trio goes out on an adventure, one of them (a lot of times Harry) find some power and from then on in fight some obstacles or what not all the while H/Hr get closer and all that. This was the last thing I wanted to have, none of the fiction I've read really break out of this mold, and if they do they don't it well and focus is lost. Thats why Exodus is introduced, its all about them and being thrown into a giant mess that they have to sort out, its a very different type of situation from what the HP universe is used to, its squad based action with the sort of bond that military groups feel out in combat. That is why there is going to be no trio in this story, sorry to break it to you guys.
To bo frank with everyone reading this, if you're looking for the whole sappy, feely, touchy, cookie cutter fiction then stop reading right now as you're probably not going to enjoy this fic. Otherwise read on, there are going to be some interesting turn of events to come. |
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