AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 31/10/06
really good chapter! I loved it!
Oh, just one thing: Ginny's middle name is Molly...
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Author Feedback: Thanks  Couldn't quite remember so I nerfed it  |
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grookillSigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 28/10/06
Awwww, schweeet!
Now that's out of my system...
I think the scene w/ Ginny, Hermione, and the Unspeakables was cut short. Not that there was much more to say, but I think you should have gone a little into the Amortensus charm, if for no other reason to read the expressions of everyone, and especially Dumbledore's.
The scene with Ron was short and I can't really think of a way to make it longer. Given that, I think you did a good job there.
A good chapter. Looking for more! |
Author Feedback: Fair to say. However, I really didn't want to go too heavily into curse theory again in this chapter, and as it stood, the word count was already edging 10,000, so I cut the scene with the Amortensus. It's actually written out, I just thought I should exclude it and come back to it later. Heh, then again, the story's actually double in length on my original word file. I'm a bit severe in my editing, but Heather's graciously volunteered to beta for me from now on, so hopefully it'll avoid mistakes like that
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Hey, I just want to say that I'm loving this fic. I think your doing very well with this plot.
Well done!
And update soon!
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Author Feedback: Thanks!
I'll try my best to get an update out over the weekend...my life's going to be absorbed by NaNoWriMo soon, so I have to get one out pronto :/ Glad you're enjoying it, and thanks for your kind words. Cheers for reviewing |
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hahaha "...Wendelina the Wise requests a transfer."
best line of the whole fic |
Author Feedback: And, to think it was in an A/N 
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that was an amazing post, I feel sorry for Ron though, he had to see that and I don't fully understand why Ron was so angry, was it because of the fact that Hermione blew Harry off or... I don't know.. can you please clarify that... I know I'm slow... but I can still enjoy the story.
can't wait for more
keep it up
-megz |
Author Feedback: I tend to look at it from this angle. My best friend slept with my other best friend last night. They've been dancing around each other for years, and not only is it sickening, it's bloody annoying. However, far from being the cataclysmic union it was supposed to be she skipped out on him this morning, thus leaving my best friend upset and self-deprecating, and to round it all off she's been totally absent all day. She hasn't even spoken to him and he's been getting steadily more and more unhappy. Since I don't like seeing my best mate unhappy, and since it's looking more and more like my other best friend's going to break his heart, I'm not best pleased with her.
Hope that summarised things for you. Glad you like it, thanks for all your reviews.
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wow... I mean... wow... that was amazing and I have a question... if Ginny and Hermione are both experiencing the same things would that mean that when they both orgasm that it'd hit them two-fold? if so... maybe there was an upside to the curse
ha ha
keep it up
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Author Feedback: Heh, you know, I didn't think too far into that. I guess an orgasm is a physical reaction rather than an emotion, so I'm not sure. It'd probably leave the other extremely light headed though
Thanks for your reviews so far, megz. Glad you're enjoying it. |
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ha ha YAY for girl talk, but BOO for the spell, I love the story, I can't wait for more
keep it up
-megz- |
Author Feedback: Thanks Cheers for reviewing again |
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that's a neat intro and plot you have going, it's really interesting, I love it
keep it up
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Author Feedback: Thanks! Glad you liked it, cheers for reviewing. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 25/10/06
Update soon! I'm thorougly addicted.
I particularly love the dialouge you use, including Ron's outburst "YOU TOOL."
And this snippet:
“You’ll tell me about it on the way, right?”
“No.”
“Are you lying?”
“…Yes.”
Overall I find the story incredibly entertaining.
And if I fail my essay it's because I set out to take a SHORT break from writing it, stumbled across this story, and have been reading it since. THANKS. 
...I'm sure my professor will understand.
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Author Feedback: LOL! I'm sure he will. If he fails you...well...he's obviously one of those Heron types *narrows eyes*. Glad you liked it so far, thanks for reviewing, and sacrificing your academic career |
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I just read your story ... I've read some of the reviews you received after I decided to write this. Ron's 'emotional range of a teaspoon' as well as Ginny's 'Harry is mine - mine - mine' attitudes are not there. Who am I to complain, it works for the story and I prefer H/Hr anyway (anyway I can get it). Love is aparently going to get them past the curse faster. It shouldn't take rocket science for Snape to suspect Pansy is behind this after the Potions incident. Along with many others ... I await more glorious words from you. |
Author Feedback: I honestly don't see Ron as having the emotional range of a teaspoon, maybe it's just me. he just doesn't think. As for Ginny...there's so little to be seen of her character that it's hard to write for her, I find anyway.
And to be honest, Snape turned such a blind eye for many years to stuff that happened to Potter, that I don't think it's that obvious. Yeah, he should suspect though. We'll find out soon.
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I've just read the whole story today and love it! Interesting concept and it's great the way you've told it. A mature Ginny and Ron is also good to see. Great work and I look forward to seeing how it all progresses. |
Author Feedback: Thanks, man I'm glad you're enjoying it, cheers for reviewing! |
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Tank03Signed | Chapter : 4 | Date : 23/10/06
I really liked the way you handled this chapter. Confronting the "morning after" can sometimes be mishandled by authors who don't appreciate the gravity of what transpired. You seem to have done it justice. I'll admit that I thought Harry would be the one brooding and snappish (we men sometimes reduce ourselves to cavemen when forced to confront feelings), and Hermione the voice of reason. The fact that you wrote just the opposite was a pleasant surprise and just goes to show why your the author and I'm the reader.
I was happy to see Ron step up to the plate* and be the understanding best mate while Harry talks of his "encounter" with Hermione. I've always believed that Ron was a truly loyal friend.
Your last line of this chapter, "... she thought everything might just work out." seems to forebode more unpleasantness before things actually do work out. At least Harry and Hermione have seemed to find some understanding between them. I'm quite interested to see how the story unfolds now.
Thanks for sharing; the story continues to be captivating and engaging.
P.S. * "step up to the plate" it's an American expression (derived from baseball). Is it understood in the UK?
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Author Feedback: Cheers, I did worry if it was a little brief, but I'm glad you think otherwise As for Harry...he has this odd knoack, I feel, of surprising you when you least expect it. This is one of those moments, and also, he's been waiting for years for this to happen. I wouldn't allow it to be thrown away because of the other party's slight neurosis
And yes, Hermione and Harry have reached...a plateau, for the moment. I wouldn't say a resoution as such, but it's on the way.
Yeah, I use "step up to the plate" a lot. Odd really, considering I've never even see a baseball game But I know what it means
Thanks for your reviews, and I'm really pleased you're continuing to enjoy the story! Next part should be out this weekend. |
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Well that explains everything, thanks for an entertaining read so far. I found the end of the chapter emotionally touching and very well written. I am looking forward to the next chapter of your story. Please update soon. |
Author Feedback: Thanks, I'll try not to keep you waiting Cheers for reviewing! |
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Another nice chapter. We must not have read the same HP series, since when did Ron get so deep and understanding? If you keep writing him like that you will give readers the impression that you like the character. (wouldn't want you to ruin your reputation around here. Do I understand Pansy's intention here? I gather she was trying to get back at Hermione by using the link between her victims and then using the spell to make Ginny and Draco have sex. I also have a question left over from chapter two. What is it about telling their romantic partners about the curse that will make it unbreakable? Please pardon my denseness. |
Author Feedback: And here I was thinking that my reputation as a Ron advocate went unnoticed I personally think he is a deep character from the books, and anyway, it doesn't take a genius to give your mate relationship advice I should know, I have to do it all the time.
Pansy's intentions are explained somewhat in chapter five, which will be out shortly, and the curse is explained much more thoroughly in 'Lines in the Sand'
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Really fantastic update! I have to tell you how very impressed I am with your story so far. You are entertaining and believable, and the great detail you go into when talking about the curse is amazing! I was a little miffed with Hermione in this chapter. She was being randomcrazy!Hermione today. But I love her to bits, so that's okay. Very sweet H/Hr action going on near the end. Disappointed that we didn't get any Pansy, but I'm sure you'll put her in sooner or later, yes? Update again soon!
~ Vi Ke |
Author Feedback: Hey Vi Ke,
Yeah, the next chapter is rather Pansy-centric. It's called 'Sundowning', which may or may not give you a hint as to its content. As for Hermione...the poor girl's been through a lot, she deserves her crazy time She's just lucky to have someone like Harry to ground her. Be prepared for a lot more fluff/angst juxtaposition next time round.
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