Fire_Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 08/03/08
Awww! That broke my heart but that sensationally beautiful ending mended it together with some lovely Harmony. That was so sad  yet done fantastically! I love this story because it shows the flaws of them and I love that and you captured it brilliantly what I call the essence of Harmony and you did it perfect justice what so many people don't get, we love them not only for the good but also for the bad because they try! It made me feel all happy! thank you for wrinting this absolutely wonderful story!
xoxo
Hana |
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papermaskSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 24/12/07
for a while there i thought they wouldn't get back to gether, but i'm so glad they did! |
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awww! tão triste! eu não sei o que acontece...a gente sempre fica triste qd lê algo assim mas é viciante hehehe
muito boa! adoro esses flashbacks rapidos. Deixam a fic com uma dinamica super legal.  |
Author Feedback: Valeu! Brigado mesmo por ter gostado. Principalmente dos flashbacks- eu não queria que eles fossem longos mas apenas explicassem o por quê das coisas- Harry lembrando.
Thanks again!  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/01/07
I'm honestly confused.
I'm a critic, I swear. Anyways, the story has a bit of a confusing format. It would be better if it was just a teeny bit longer, and in order of time. Like, 1999, 2000, 2001...get it? |
Author Feedback: Sorry, but I *didn’t* get.
About the length, well...this is a One-shot, and I (as a reader) don’t like very long chapters. But this is just a matter of opinion.
I put the date/time in each memory/flashback, but if I put the facts in a time-line I think the story would lose its propose.
The story is under Harry POV and it’s about things that are happening in the present that makes him remind occurrences in the past.
The important isn’t the DATE but the FACT, the memory.
If I put in order of time, it would transform *this* story in a totally different one.
But thanks anyway for your comment.
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/01/07
"so,this means that only the pretties and athletics girls deserve the Hero ?"-you
"so,this means that the Hero always has to date his female best friend ?"-my sister.
You both have different opinions. You beleive that H/G isn't good because Ginny is pretty and popular, and the main character always dates someone pretty and populer. My sister doens't like H/Hr because she doesn't agree with the main character ALWAYS getting the female best friend.
Well, usually the female best friend is pretty and popular, so H/Hr and H/G are both okay. |
Author Feedback: ???????????
I am really sorry but I can’t see your point here. This story isn’t about Harry/Hermione/Ginny, so...
and I don’t like Ginny ONLY because she is *pretty* but MAINLY because I think she is a bad character, and there wasn’t no background in the first 5 books that could explain Harry/Ginny, but that’s MY opinion.. I am a HHr shipper but if Harry ends with Luna I would think it’s fine.
And you know this is Portkey, right?
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lauhallSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/11/06
I LOVE IT.
It's so sweet and cute, and OMG I just loved it. You did an excelent job |
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The odd thing is, I can easily see Harry and Hermione having just such a problem. Harry had no role model for what a proper father should be when he was growing up, and while I don't believe he would ever slip into the pattern of abusiveness, it would be all too easy to retreat into work and become oblivious to problems at home. Hermione will have to recognize this and work to avoid just this sort of problem from developing. Nice work. |
Author Feedback: Thank very much for your words. I'm glad you liked it. And I agree with what you said about Harry. |
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usha88Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 15/10/06
That was a great story. I am so glad that she took him back. It didn't even seem rushed or anything. I thought it was wonderful. I loved the flashbacks. NIce job. |
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oh I absolutly looved it!
The best part was they way in which it was written. Where you would do little chunks of time kind of showing the back ground than you would flip back to the present. It was an amazing story!
good job. |
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awww that's so cute,
very nice story. i love one-shots and you did a truely great job on this one! it was very cute. amybe there can be a sequel stating how they are doing that harry has changed his job stlye?? well maybe, kkays once again, great sotry |
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That would be cool, I found that I really am taken with your other stories as well, I hope you update them both soon!! :-D |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 06/10/06
girl got it going on! when are you going to publish a book girl you could make some money!  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 06/10/06
girl you are an amazing writer.if i could wright some of my short stories like that id be rocking. |
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jchaserSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 06/10/06
Wonderfully written...loved the way you wove the past situations to explain the present. Very sweet and loving story...and the ending was just perfect. Thanks for such a enjoyable one shot! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 06/10/06
this story was so sweet and a little sad. but i loved it any way |
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