WOW!

I loved this chapter. I can't wait for the next one!

i love the way this story is flowing. I feel terrible for andie and hermiones mother, but i love the way your developing harry & hermiones new relationship! cheers!

WHAT!why would she do that?what the hell just happened?that was so weired really was, what role does hermione really play?update soon like really soon please

she removed his memory why? is she being controlled I'm so confused can't wait until the next chapter

I don't have much to say other than I just stumbled upon this story yesterday and I'm absolutely loving it. I love the interaction between the characters, and the descriptions of their actions and surroundings make them so much more well rounded, I can't help but feel their emotions. While I think I understand why Hermione had to obliviate everyone, I hope it doesn't turn her into a headcase. I do hope you update soon, I can't wait to see what happens next but I'm hoping there are some happy moments (H/Hr haven't had any fluffy moments since, what, chapter 5?) in it after these intense few chapters.

Keep up the good work.

that was a great chapter. i can't wait for the next one.

l

Hmm.. who exactly did she obliviate, herself I'm guessing.. Nice chapter, keep it up!

Very exciting chapter! Great job writing action. You left us a cliffy though. I'm so glad you are going to finish this story. Looking forward to the final chapters.

Holy Cow Man!

Could you pack anything else possibly into this chapter, or for that matter the last chapter also? I feel bad for not getting to read the last chapter earlier, let alone getting to review it.

I've loved this story from the first chapter and I think I have mentioned that fact in previous chapter reviews, and you kept up the standard of which you set in this chapter.

I love how Harry was willing to bargin himself off to save Hermione..oh and the others, but in the end Hermione was the one who actually had the bargining chip, and she was willing to do whatever to see Harry, oh and once again the others, safe.

Only one thing I didn't like about this chapter; Ron. His whole presense in this and the previous chapter just narked me. Don't know what exactly it was but yeah.

Kudos and thanks for the outstanding updates.

-J

This isn't a completely positive review and it will focus on the aspects of this story I didn't really enjoy or think could have handled better.

To soften the review, I'll start with my appreciation for the first nine chapters. Characterizations; how the trio handled the pressure; the slow return to normalcy: great stuff. And Hermione's theories and their impact on society, the romance and tension and hurt, the secondary characters like Hermione's mother, and the insurgence of the terrorists and all it entailed... All very good and well done!

Chapters 10 and 11 were a little less than stellar, I thought it was the utterly obnoxious vampiric element, and the contrived way in which both the Order and the readers were led by the nose, but it was something else as well: the appearance of information and abilities that Hermione had from the beginning, but the reader only found out about after she used her secret skills or thought about having them. That seems to me a weak way of writing a mystery - retrofitting the protagonist with new stuff as the need arises - and I caught a definite hint of super!Hermione that didn't mix too well with the Hermione in the first part of the story.

This leads me to chapter 12: an unmitigated disaster. Problems I had with this chapter:

1) two points of view that didn't explain anything: Hermione simply described what she experienced, no commentary, even if she apparently understood it all. Ron didn't get what was happening and simply improvised, again, no help to the reader. The trio communicated wordlessly, so even what they managed to convey to each other was lost.

2) a commentary was in order because the chapter was *all* psychedelic with pyrotechnics and weird spells and dialogue that didn't make immediate sense. The seeping black light and the trembling white light going back and forth and all those "you were wrong" "no" "yes" "no" "you didn't" "I did" and discussions and reasonings that again, weren't fully explained but only hinted at. I was lost so many times it wasn't funny and it's not because I'm dense (though I probably am). The scene was too long and abstract and complex! It seems to me you'll need the next chapter or two just for the explanations and I'm sure there was a way to handle that better. Like, explaining things as they happened.

3) I did get the impression that the bad guys' plan boiled down ultimately to asking Hermione to let them win, pretty please, with sugar on top. I can't think of a way it could have worked. It also seems that Harry's kidnapping was largely unnecessary: the bad guys already had hostages. They wanted the Order to find their hiding place and they had the Order outnumbered at all times. Why not just send an invite?

4) the whole Hermione floating into the pillar of light thingy. Yes, there were hints the trio had had secret training. But that looked like a brand new ghostbusters movie climax, coming out of the blue. This reader would have appreciated recounts from the Voldemort days, or some other way to mention that such magical manifestations existed in the first place, and what they could or could not do. There seem to be metaphysics at work here, that I wasn't equipped with just by reading the Harry Potter books.

5) no comment about Hermione's obliviate at the end, because it's a cliffhanger and we still have no idea what is being obliviated, and from whose mind, and why. I'll just say that since it's being done aggressively - no previous discussion about the necessity of it, no permission asked or granted - it has the potential to stink to high heaven, being morally reprehensible and all.

I'm sorry to say this turning point really let me down and I find it much worse than the rest of the story. Of course I'm going to stick around for the explanations to come and the finale, as well as devouring anything else you're going to write in the future. I really like the overall story and characters and your writing style. But this was very disappointing and at times had me wanting to bash my head against a wall...

Thanks!

Sorry, you lost me with this chapter. Plot occurrences apparently influenced by the smoking of illegal substances, followed by Hermione obliviating her best friends. This story has wandered off the rails...

Interesting chapter. I have to say I am a little confused as to what is happening and what all that business with Hermione was and stuff. But, I have to say that I hate hate that she obliviated Harry. Why did she do that? So, is everyone going to remember what happened besides him. Shouldn't he have a choice instead of Hermione making that decision for him. I don't like that she did that at all I have to say. What doesn't she want him to remember? So, is he ever going to find out that he was obliviated? Will someone ever tell him or will Hermione keep this secret from him. Isn't this just as bad or worse than Harry keeping her in the castle for her own protection. Didn't she accuse him of making decisions for her and not trusting her, etc. and didn't she just do something even worse to him. She's being a bit hypocritical in my opinion.

AHHH! Please tell me that Hermione isn't evil! I don't think I'd like that very much...
I'm going to go ahead and guess that she's trying to hide something about herself, not something about her research.
I'm really enjoying this story, hope you're able to update soon.

~JL

I can't wait for the next update to see what will happen next.

oh dear, wellll update soon. i kinda forgot this story its been so long. but update soon and i wont anymore! ahha. nice job.