“Oh Well! As long as it means you'll draw little hearts around my name in your planner,”

Just too cute. This is perfect - just the right amount of fluff, humour and romance.
Loved it

Hi Anita!

This is JanieB - you reviewed my story, "Reunion" the other week - I hope you remember me!

Firstly, that was NOT crap! Secondly, I have to say I was amazed that you could write something like this at the age of 16! If you love writing (you obviously love reading - Byron?? Very impressive and that was a perfect choice for this little piece!) I'd say keep doing it! The more you do it, the more you'll improve. (I'm certain I have since I wrote my first story!) I was "engaged" the whole time I was reading this and from the sounds of your reviews, so were they - so you're doing something right!

So keep writing, okay?

Cheers!
JanieB

Awwwww! It's not complete and utter crap! It's cute and sweet and I love it! Don't be so hard on yourself!

Pretty good, although there was one line that made absolutely no sense to me:

“I will have you told Potter: That was the only romantic advance I have had in a century. And I am your fiancée."

It sounds like Hermione's saying she's over a hundred years old, but other comments make it clear they're no more than their late 20s.

Hmmm, suggestions for improvement? How about, instead of being engaged, they are boyfriend/girlfriend at this point, and when Hermione chides him for not being sufficiently romantic, he leads her out on the balcony and does the same sort of scene that Gene Kelly did with Debbie Reynolds in 'Singing in the Rain', except for using magic instead of kleig lights to create the mood, and then he proposes. How's that sound?

WHAT DO YOU MEAN IT'S ABSOLUTE CRAP!?
Are you trying to offend my taste? It's one of my favourite stories, you know..
Therefore... IT IS NOT CRAP!

Not bad at all. A little short though. I know it's a one shot but i'd like some more!

I have no clue why you hate this story so much.
I actually quite liked it, it was sweet and simple. At time's it was a bit vague but other than that i really enjoyed it. I would keep it the same or if you want maybe add a few more useless details I mean you always need those right?

I didn't think that it was absolute crap. It was better than anything I could write. It might've been a little fast paced. I don't know...it went from Hermione to being sad that Harry didn't say anything..to just Harry being romantic. But I think that was how the story was suppose to go.

I can't really explain what I think. I'm just trying to fish for some constuctive cristcism seeing as you didn't like it. I think maybe more could've gone in the middle I guess? Whatever.

It was great anyways. Very cute.

Usha88

its not crap at all i thought it was cute and funny tht lockhart tried to kiss her hehe.

It's cute, not crap. I like the part where Harry talks about mentions the little hearts around his name at the end.

this was really sweet...just need some correcting....I have read stories where it did not flow at all and this story is not in that category....you need to keep writing

Nice idea. But I go a bit confused when he spoke to the Minister. I thought the minister was Ron from the italics. Oh well. Maybe you could play it out a little longer. Maybe talk about Lockhart's several attempts to woo Hermione. He could be an enfatuiated (Sorry about the spelling) patient. I like the poem though. Maybe Hermione could tell Harry that at the rate he is going, Lockhart is serious competiton! LOL

Oh I love your description of Harry!

i think that u did a great job on this one. but if u thinking about writting another one simmilar to this, i think it should be some sane wizard and harry could curse him into obliviant.

so cute!!! I really liked it. A nice little one shot to end my day. I do love my fluff!! great job

Michelle

*smirks* I like it. Its sort of the story I was looking for. To have a meaning but one that didn't feel serious. It ain't crap. It would've been crap if a Heron attempted to write it.

SilverRose