Quite quick... wasn't it, the love scene? The didn't even kiss properly and then... where making love. I love the scene where they played eith each other.

OK, even for an NC17 fic (which I try to read a very minimal amount of it), this was done very tastfully and I liked that (actually, compared to some, with the lack of specific details, you could've easily put this as "R"). However, the final line saying that they had just ended their friendship to start something more wonderful... I got the feeling from this fic they had already been dating... If they just jumped into the sack of leaves, so to speak, that's almost ridiculous. I think you ought to at least alter the ending so it's not so much of a contrast to the rest of the story.

that was really good...so romantic...
i am going to check out you other stories

see ya

I thought this was a very good, and well-placed story. The way that it turned into conversation, tickling, and then that, made the story have a plot, but at the same time not. It just, sort of, keeps the reader intrigued, and only a very well writin' story can accomplish that. I think you did a very well job. I'll give this an eight. Good job!

Oh, I absolutely loved that! Beautiful!

One thing that I found a bit amusing is the way that you used some of the same phrases in this story and in 'Stolen Moment' hehe, but it all fit perfectly both ways, and this is brilliant for having been written at 5:30 in the morning!
You're a wonderful writer!
I can't wait to read more of your stories!
-Michelle

It is a really good one shot, and really well written.

That was really sweet. I loved the title. It was very fitting for the fic. It was a very great place for the setting and such a nice and calm fic. Very awesome job.

I liked it. So romantic and peacful. How a story should be. I recommend it

wow... that was really... random? I don't know it was still amazing though.
you're still a wonderful author
keep it up
-megz-

It was very nicely written and your details were wonderful ... though I have to say that the idea of Harry and Hermione going from friendly companionship to having sex in the span of less than 10 minutes seems very OOC to me. Maybe next time draw it out into a multi-chaptered fic, so you have time to develop the relationship.

if only JKR would come to her senses and put those two together! Anywho--pretty good 4 a drapple as you say.

this is really good. i luv this story!this story so rocks

that was good i loved how they said they loved each other before they went trough with it i loved it

Oh that was lovely, you did it all with a wonderfully light touch, if you understand what I mean! It wasn't over the top, such a sweet & lovely first time. I'm assuming they are still at Hogwarts?

aww that's cute! i liked his story! but you think becuase the sun was still out someone might of saw? ha ha but anyways very cute little one-shot. itt was very good.