J.K.MUnsigned | Chapter : 8 | Date : 13/02/08
That has to be the hardest to follow tale I ever read, it was poorly constructed there being no real structure to it at all, and that after you said you had improved it, the content may have been ok but then I'm not sure that ninty per cent of it was really needed. I think this is the first time that my resolve to finish what I start nearly gave out on me. Overall I would have to say that this was a very dismal failure, you should go back to school to learn how to construct a story before you inflict this type of thing on anyone else. |
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LOL okay i seem to have mixed up the settings a bit!, thought he was with Ginny and i was actually wondering how Ron could do that to her unless it really WAS a round of Ginny bashing.
So imagine my confusion when i started reading the story and came upon the Ginny reference...what the furrrHECK??!. 
After reading this chapter i can easily understand how Ron could give Harry the letter and add his little note in the end....unless i'm also wrong with that one and if so i am quitting this fanfiction at once!!. |
Author Feedback: oh, um, hope you didn't quit it though.
No, I don't very much like the Ginny bashing so I make it a point to not have it in anything I write.
Thanks you for your thoughts. I was pleasantly surprised to find a bunch of reviews in my inbox and most of them are from you so thanks a lot, man. |
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Wouv....that was some letter, but quite Hermione like i think (and long!). Sounds like a really good start and wonder if there is going to be any Ginny bashing about?....oh well
Reading on!. |
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Amazing way to end this fic, it was really sweet and it's good to see gwen was not mad either of course she found someone else  the only question that remains on my mind is ron adn luna, were they a couple? i sincerely hope so for they are a great couple (almost perfect if it wasn't because i'm a huge neville/luna shipper)  |
Author Feedback: wow, it's been a while since anyone has reviewed this story so thanks and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I didn't really think much on Ron and Luna being a couple, though I do like the idea so I just added some hints and shadows here and there. So thanks again for your thoughts and stuff, man. I haven't written anything in a while so randomly finding a bunch of these reviews today has made me want to take up the pen once more. |
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Nice! We all knew how this would end and you just wrote almost exactly what i thought would happen in this chapter. I absolutelly love it. By the way you made a great decision by picking that song, i love coldplay and of course that song is magical |
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I0m a bit confused right now, was gwen's dreaming the first part? i guess it so, anyway if that's it, even gwen can realize who harry truly loves although he is really dumb. Hope they get together soon. |
Author Feedback: hey, actually it was Harry who was dreaming the first bit because gwen wasn't there at the time of Hermione's breakup with the mystery man. I guess this is long before Harry had met Gwen, or when their relationship wasn't all that serious. I guess it's a mistake on my part for not clearing that up or going into details. |
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Jikes! so it really was ron who wrote the letter, i knew it! so this gwen is harry's girlfriend (well, not for so long), nice to see you incorporated other canon, better than having cho |
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Yeah i'm questioning myself for this "gwen". Oh i just noticed at the top the lyrics of come what may from moulin rouge. Love that movie! nice to see you like it too |
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So i guess ron's the one who sent the letter. Great chapter i'll read the other ones and see what comes of this |
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MuseUnsigned | Chapter : 8 | Date : 16/03/07
Great ending! Thank you for this wonderful story! I love that you provided complete closure for everyone, including Gwen! Now that is a rarity also. Usually the other character just sort of exits, stage left, as it were. I like that you did the same with Ron, too. |
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MuseUnsigned | Chapter : 8 | Date : 16/03/07
Great ending! Thank you for this wonderful story! I love that you provided complete closure for everyone, including Gwen! Now that is a rarity also. Usually the other character just sort of exits, stage left, as it were. I like that you did the same with Ron, too. |
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MuseUnsigned | Chapter : 7 | Date : 16/03/07
Now see. If you can take a triangle and sort it out without making any of the participants monsters, and actually make us readers understand what each of the three are going through, then I don't see how hard it is for JKR to do the same. You did a beautiful job. This is probably the first time, if not a rare time, that I've come across a fanfic where the "other woman" is not evil, which would have made it blatantly obvious that H/Hr was going to happen in the end. I like that they do of course, but I appreciate that you respect each of the characters in the triangle. Thanks for that. It makes the relationships much more realistic and true. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 8 | Date : 12/03/07
i love the way you write. Absolutely wonderful. at the same time, the story leaves much to be desired.
Harry is a bit of an ass in this story and really does seem to love Gwen.
I have a feeling that in no time, this Harry would be cheating on hermione with Gwen.
Your Harry loves Gwen too much to ever be happy with hermione. |
Author Feedback: I thank you for the complement and I hope that I can continue to entertain, and now for your comment at the end. How so? And that's pretty weird because it was exactly what I was going for. |
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What a great story! I liked all of the little flashbacks and hopping back and forth between the days. Very nice.
I also liked Gwen. I think it was great how you didn't villify Harry's fiance and instead made her likable. Her side story was quite cute as well.
Anyway, once again, great story. |
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This was fantastically written. I utterly loved and adored. One of the best stories I've read. |
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