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Interesting first chapter! I like the way you had Harry go back for a second kiss - and kiss her back. Very brave of him and very Gryffindor! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 26/01/07
 i like your style of writing. this chapter is good but I hope that next chapters will be better . i think that you discreibed hary's feels and emontions good. I've always imagened first love like something pure, something special,something incredible, when you're maybe confused in what you feel but when you see this special person you just know, that you care for her or him... but somtimes it took long time to realise that you have feeling to another person or that you actualu fall in love in her or him. Sometimes is very hard to admit to yorself tahat you love and you care. but building relationship don't include only pleasent times, when you are holding hands and looking into eyes... sometimes there are obstacles. and you have to fly above them or go thru them. I prefer the first way. Loving another human beeing is also resposibility. you are responisble for this person. ana
ps. sory for my babling but i'm after of 4 hours maths and i apologse for my language but englisch is not my first language
like i have said huges and i wisch you inspiration bye |
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FUZZYGUnsigned | Chapter : 9 | Date : 19/12/06
WOW THAT WAS PROBABLY THE MOST EMOTIONAL CHAPTER YET.PLEASE HURRY WITH THE NEXT ASAP!!! |
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Nice. I really like this story. Is there going to be more? You haven't updated in a little while and it would be great to see more.
~JL |
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Oghhh poor ron still crying on his dreams thats is so hard but hey loved leaved through thats was well fav. i really really loved that  i cant wait to see the little thing to come if the do if these is the en well it was ok |
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Ohhh how cute  love the hole so will change our names to rome and juliet ythat was so cute and them runing away WOW that so bloddy romantic and love the fact that tehy send the night under the stars and jey the were able no talk out ther feelings that is a truly harry and hermioen relashionship i loved it and the hole cho helping them out WOWthat was so out od the blue i love it i cant wait tor ead more and know what will hapen and everything  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 9 | Date : 01/12/06
Um, so you really can't stand a little of criticism? Like I said I like this story but I was really disappointed with this chapter.
But I can see that you don't want a true opinion.
Oh well, you just lost a reader.
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Author Feedback: I'm sorry for deleting your original review. However, I believe that anonymous reviews of a negative nature are unworthy of leaving in my review list. I accepted what you said about the conversations being a little juvenile and am revising the chapter. In the future, if you wish to be taken seriously and your reviews retained on the list kindly use a name that associates you with previous reviews and future ones. I don't care if it's real or not, but if I address a reply or desire to learn more from you then I know to whom I'm talking. I have seen unkind reviews from people who don't have the decency to put their names on them before. You are not the first or last whom I will not allow to leave reviews that blindly sweep at an entire chapter without giving example of what to do better. Even critics in the press tell the author what was wrong and where. Please read my bio. You will understand my stance on unkind people. Negative reviews are part of writing and growing. Part of the process is to have people who offer them both because they disagree and because they want things to get better. Simply disliking the chapter or being disappointed didn't get it removed. The comment that I must be ten years old did. That was meant to be offensive not critical. If that wasn't you then you see why anonymous reviews are not easy to deal with. I may be thinking you're the wrong person. In which case, I apologize. Please read on if you like. I am not afraid to hear the truth. Truth is easier to hear from someone you know or at least let's you know a name (pen name, fake, or real) than someone who doesn't reveal anything about themselves except that they don't like something. Thanks for the review and your time. |
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Cute chapter! I think it's so sweet that Sirius went to the Weasley's to defend Harry. Kudos to Ron for putting aside his pride and accepting his friends new found relationship. I can't wait to read the next chapter. |
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It's funny, but I never pictured Hermione as the type to go in for all of that "make each other crazy to find out who's the right one" kind of logic. I guess, we wouldn't really know, right? I mean, Harry is the books sole narrator. Great chapter! I can't believe Ron would be so petty to his friends! I hope he and Cho start dating and he grows up a bit. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for your thoughtful review.
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Remember what Dumbledore and the trio said to Hagrid after the Yule Ball in GOF. Rita's story of him being a half giant came out and he received all kinds of criticism going so far as to tell him he should kill himself.
As long as you're happy with the way your story is progressing the rest of us can be washed off like water off a duck's back.
Have fun with your story - I want to see more soon. |
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Thank Merlin you found those last 2 scrolls of chapter 8. That finished 8 off nicely ... now where's the real chapter 9?
Just kidding ... you're doin' a great job, keep it comin'
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Author Feedback: Thanks for reviewing as always. I wish I could accurately describe the feeling of reading reviews from people like yourself when you are disappointed. Maybe I went to an extreme here to maintain the PG vs. R or M rating. I love this story as I do all of them. I will go back to my lost scrolls  and try to salvage chapter 9. I wish more people would express their disappointment like you have without reverting to comments about the age of the writer or simply being rude because they couldn't express themselves.
Thank you...your disappointment is noted and, believe it or not, appreciated for it's candor. |
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micaelaUnsigned | Chapter : 9 | Date : 28/11/06
You know, this chapter kinda disapointed me. I had really enjoyed chapter 08 and was hoping that this chapter would continued from there- they *on the road*, maybe visiting her parents...but then chapter 09 came and...  "the problems were solved". You missed a great opportunit there, not to mention that it looked a little too rushed- like a attempted to get the things clear very fast. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reviewing as always. I wish I could accurately describe the feeling of reading reviews from people like yourself when you are disappointed. Maybe I went to an extreme here to maintain the PG vs. R or M rating. I love this story as I do all of them. I will go back to my lost scrolls and try to salvage chapter 9. I wish more people would express their disappointment like you have without reverting to comments about the age of the writer or simply being rude because they couldn't express themselves.
Thank you...your disappointment is noted and, believe it or not, appreciated for it's candor. |
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Great chapter, but I think you missed posting the last 2 scrolls of parchment that would have finished the chapter off nicely. Why don't you send them off to meet Hermione's family? Probably the second place they would look for them, too easy I suppose.
Post more soon please. |
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pstibbonsSigned | Chapter : 8 | Date : 28/11/06
Ouch. Surely they can explain things to Arthur?
Too much female psychology for me to grok in the H-H talk... and I'm completely confused about how H&H are plotting with Cho. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for the review. Hang in there. grok? Not plotting with cho. Hermione talked to her girl to girl and told her that he's special and needs a friend to get over this hurt. Cho agrees. thinks he nice and cute. tired of false friends...no plot...she'll just be his friend. somehow talking...Ron plucked up the courage to make a friend out of a girl and arrange to see her. We don't know what will happen...iaw the rules here no explicit scenes...references...no relationship..friendship for two people who are nice to each other. Hermione hopign that Ron will gain confidence and feel good enough not to hate them (H-H) Hasn't seemed to work...we'll see next chapter I should think.
Could have posted this review to summarize plot but chose to do it the other way. |
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Hmm.... Interesting.... I can't wait to see the outcome of the next chapter you have coming up. This story is pretty good.
*%* Susanna *%* |
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