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._. Oh no. What's gonna happen?
Suspense is so mean.
But I love it.
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Oh this is very good stuff,(thanks for liking my name by the way, have you read the play?) I was awed by the dragon scenes, and Ron making a war strategy? Very nice touch, I love the fact you put in so many otehr characters from the start.
Okay now I have question for you, I am also new to this fanfic world and I was wondering if you might read a little tale I wrote? If you do that's awesome, but if you don't want to that's fine too. If you do can you leave a review, I also live for the comments of the public!
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really? i thought portkey was editable??
ooh, that'll definitly be a change in perspective. i've seen rastaban portrayed a number of different ways, generically just as a run-of-the-mill bloody thirsty death eater, but you've also had one of the best battle scenes I've read, and a very different style of writing so i'm looking forward to something different.
i should mention that one very good rastaban features in Vanity by wartcap. its a great overall story, with really exceptional portrayals of various death eaters, which are made especially interesting by the fact that the portrayals are from hermione's point of view
chapters 1 and 2?
well, i think i mentioned earlier that they would work better switched. although I was kinda unsure, and still am, what your plotline is and how it plays with the whole elemantal warfair thing
off the top of my head i don't have anything brilliant, but give me a day or two and i'll think.
are you posting the story elsewhere?
also, i think i talked with you before about betaing, and the offers still open if you're interested
any news on hooligan?
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Thanks for the great review reply.
oh no, I liked that, I think I wasn't clear on what I was saying
I said:
I meant that this chapter was named elemntal warfare: air, and I didn't understand why. I certainly saw what I thought to be large portions of elemental magic, but I didn't see "air" figure into the chapter. the chapter was mainly battle scenes, small portions of the battle, hand to hand combat--I thought the previous chapters title: "scenes from a battle" would have fit better, because that was what this chapter was, and it was done so well. it was snapshots, zooming out on the whole battle, zooming out on the war, and zooming in on a particlar blow in a fight between two on the field
whereas the last chapter I didn't think was "scenes from a battle"
it was one cohesive flowing scene. it didn't give a sense of what was going on anywhere but that one place. and, while the presence of elemntal magic wasn't as strong, the presence of air, was. it was all about the dragons and flying. it was a birds eye view, the entire chapter was about the air and the battle that was taking place there.
i just thought that the tenors of the two chapters were insanely different. one had all the concerns of an air battle, and one had all the grit and the feel of an in the dirt battle. and, one had this flowing one scene, one shot feel where you felt like you were with them. it didn't have the same, in your face pulling you in feel that the second chapter did, but because you had no sense of what was going on anywhere else, you really felt in the scene.
the second chapter you got the in the dirt, grity battle feel, but you got the greater sense of what was going on everywhere even if you didn't spell it out.
by showing a few scenes, and having her think of others, "the line will hold aunt amelia" "weasley was a strategist" the scene felt broader
thats why i was confused by the titles. they just seemed like they didnt fit the chapters...
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Author Feedback: You know what??
You are so right!
My chapter titles DO NOT work!
My very good friend - who was able to upload them for me because, for some reason, my computer would not format the text properly - applied the titles I assigned the chapters in my Word file rather than a more polished, 'publishable'. title...
Unfortunately, there is no way I can change the chapter title names without taking the whole story down...
You are so fabulous and so generous with your thoughts! THANK YOU SO MUCH!
The next chapter is going to have a different tone to it as well. It will still be sharp and linear - but it will be seen through Rastaban LeStrage's eyes...
Question for you: Do you have any ideas for these two chapter titles??
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I really like this. You have to update soon. It's usually a challenge to find stories that hold my attention and leave me breathless for more. |
Author Feedback: DeathPhoenix!
WHAT A COMPLIMENT!!!
THANK YOU!!
THis story is so different for me, I gotta tell ya! But, it is so exhilerating to have a story come together that the characters are creating rather than me crafting a narrative: maybe that is the difference - no? Why it is so exciting - they already know what is going to happen!
I cannot wait to read what you think of the next chapter - I should have it up soon!
THANK YOU!
Island Girl! |
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The story is good. I like how show more characters in this chapter. I hope you update soon. |
Author Feedback: Hello Michelle!
THank you SO MUCH!! You not only read - but you offered your thoughts!!
WHOOOHOO!!
I am currently working on it and should have it up soon!
I cannot wait to read what you think!
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 24/06/06
Having read--and thoroughly enjoyed--your other stories, I was most pleased to receive a notice bringing my attention to this piece. I can\'t wait to see where it will go from here; if anything, I hope it will contain the same vibrancy found in your other works. Looking forward to future chapters. ~Treyson |
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Ok, here's the rest of the chapter I remember!
hang on, *checks email again*
nope, no chapter descrption for this one either.
now why is this chapter air, and the last one scenes from a battle, when this one is battle scenes, and there's elemental stuff, yes, but not air stuff and last chapter there was definitely air stuff with the dragon and the flying even if it wasn't really as elemental
also, anapneo? breathe?
also, this one really fit the last chapters title because it went from person to person following different little fights, and last chapter it was just the dragons, which was really cohesive it seemed
and if im supposed to be patient and wait just tell me.
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Author Feedback: Hello Lovewithnoface!
Yes - I had some sort of problem uploading the story initially - and then I had to pull it down... I e-mailed a friend of mine who was able to upload the story from her computer... That is why there is a lack of chapter titles...
THis story really came to me so vividly that it seemed that all I had to do was write down what the characters were doing rather than write a story about what I wanted the characterst to do...
I know I started the story in the last 'quarter' of a battle - but there is a reason for this... I did not think that a huge build up to a battle would be necessary for what I was seeing in my head and since the characters already told me why the battle was taking place to begin with, the initial confrontations would be words that would bog the story down...
I know anapneo seems like an odd choice to choose - but since Slughorn used it to keep a student from choking. I thought it was reasonable to extrapolate it in this sense: the swirling dust was clogging the lungs of the DA - Susan thought of a way that would pull the bits of debris from their bodies as well as using the same spell to push the air at the DE's as an impromptu weapon.
I have to tell you I love reading your thoughts and I cannot WAIT to see what you think of the next chapter!!!
YOU ROCK!!
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Ah! You reloaded and fixed!
Is that the only way to do it or can it be edited???
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*vaguely remembers the chapter being totally different*
wasn't it way longer and involving all these other people and slytherins and all this other stuff and daphne?
I coulda sworn...
and something about a line? the line will hold, the line will hold
hang on, I just checked my email, and of course the other story doesnt exist anymore, but i thought it might have been named differently, but what was weird, was last time, you didnt give the first chapter any name, but you gave it the following description: "Forces light and dark are drawing on the primary elements to wage battle."
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That was great.Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.
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Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.
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Author Feedback: Hello Destroyerdrt!
You are always so wonderful about reading all my stories...
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!
YOU ROCK!!
I did have a lot of fun writing this and the next chapter should prove to be MOST interesting!
I am looking forward to reading what you think!
Island Girl! |
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RittanicusUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 23/06/06
I don't know how these ideas just pop in your head, but it works; and quite well too. You show great detail in your description of the battle scene from, what I think, many various characters throughtout the books who may or may not have had a big role. I love it! |
Author Feedback: Hello Rittanicus!
I gotta tell ya - this story came to me more vivdly than some of my others. It was really almost odd: all of the sudden (as I was sitting on my couch looking out the window) I SAW dragons swooping down, with riders on their backs, incinerating everything until they were pull back and up .... The same thing with the second chapter: I SAW NEville use wandless magic on Susan to push her out of the way as the DE from the first chapter fell from the sky and would have hit her if it hadn't been for Neville and his quick thinking...
The next chapter should be up soon- I really cannot wait to read what you think of it!
THANK YOU!
Island Girl |
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MikeSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 23/06/06
Wow! What a start! I was absolutely breathless by the time I got to the end of chapter two. Great Job! |
Author Feedback: Hello Mike!
THANK YOU SO MUCH not only for reading but offering your thoughts...
I know! The second chapter came out really well... I wish that there was enough room inthe space where the chapter titles go to put this line there:
'Who says Hufflepuffs have to play nice?'...
But, alas, there is not - so I thought I would share it with you!
I am working on the next chapter and it should be up soon!
Please - let me know what you think!!
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Okay first I have to say that I am so happy your back. And second I just can't wait for the next chapter to Hooligan.
But now to the point...
Very cool  . You're one of my favorite authers for a very good reason, you paint a scene so beautifully. When I read your syories I have no problem imagining myself as an invisible spector just watching the events unfold  .
Though at the moment I am confused, not because of your writting but because we've enterd a scene in the middle of WWIII... or quite possible the apacolypse(sp?)!!!
I await anciously for the next chapter, gotta learn the who, what, where, when, why...
Wonderful to see that your back.
-Kellie
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Axelia Rose
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aurora07140293 - gotta figure out how to change this name ... all those useless numbers  |
Author Feedback: Aurora --
GIRLFRIEND!!! THank you SO SO MUCH!
I wish I had the words to share with you just how much it means to me that you enjoy these sentances that I cobble together.
This story really came to me from a) out of nowhere and b) extremely vividly.
I have read stories where there is a huge build up to a battle scene and other stories where the narrative picks up just after a battle ends - but there are few stories that take place while a battle is going on... That is the premise of this story: the battle is the background as well as an actual character. The persons who fight in the battle are reactionary as well as 'under orders'... I do have a fabulous twist planned as well as a POV from Rastaban LeStrange!!
I cannot wait to read what you think of this story when the next chapter comes out!
THANK YOU GIRLFRIEND!!!   |
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Author Feedback: YOU SO ROCK!!!
DO you have any idea what kind of a HUGE smile spread across my face when I read what you wrote??
THANK YOU SO SO SO SO MUCH!!!  !
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