that was amazing. i have to day thought hary/luna was better set in this story.

i also like how luna tells him to remeber her, and come back psooibly, did he make the wrong choice?

GREAT story. I felt a little lost at the VERY end, but I'm the type that wants to see what happens after the ending. JKR should have used some of your material

Again, great story, and many thanks for the entertainment.

Harry handed her the Brenda’s Everlasting Non-Misplacing Hair Tie that had suddenly appeared on her lap.

Man I'd love to get me one o' them hair ties.

Professor Butterworth for muggle studies. I can just see her teaching her students about the fine art of syrup pouring. *snigger*

wow this was an awesome story. please let there be a sequel or a new story.

I loved the first 40 chapters of this story. It was very well written with enough H/Hr to keep anyone satisfy. What happen in the end was that the story got really distracted and caused the ending not to be what it should have been. I loved the ending. It was very unique and well written but wasn\'t well played out. dont let other people scare you with their rudeness.

I thought that your original thought-experiment/plot set-up was pretty fantastic. For the first say, 15 chapters, I really enjoyed how you used the characters of Daniel and Harry to explore several interesting themes. For example, the way that you recreated Harry's Dursley experience within a surviving genetic family was fascinating. Throughout the canon, it is generally assumed that Harry would have lead a completely normal and (therefore) idyllic life if his parents had lived. I really liked how your story engaged that assumption.

Another theme that interested me was in how you used Harry (again, especially at the beginning) as a metaphorical stand-in for all of the unacknowledged help that the canon Harry (Daniel in your story) receives. Usually, this help takes the form of Hermione, which I thought you cleverly alluded to by making Harry a Ravenclaw ace student. Your exploration of Harry and Daniel's ties to Voldemort (ie, how Daniel was mistaken for the Boy Who Lived) also tied Harry to another unacknowledged, sometimes by Rowling, helper in Neville.

Unfortunately, the extremely promising set-up you give us in the first few chapters winds up a bit lost in the wind as your story progresses. My main gripe with your story was characterization. I understand the need for much of the wizarding populace to be extremely antagonistic toward Harry. I especially liked the negative correlation you draw between James-Sirius and Daniel-Ron. But why the unerringly negative portrayal of Dumbledore? In canon, Dumbledore is shown several times as willing to admit to past mistakes. And I felt that Harry should have been a little more forgiving of people after his explosion at the Potter house. After all, wasn't the point to let loose all of the pent-up aggravation he had experienced for 17 years?

Another, smaller, problem was simple storytelling. I was massively confused about how Hermione went from missing the train to lying in Daniel's lap. Similarly, how did Harry not die in the duel with Voldemort? Was he simply faking? And what were those Hermione-Dumbledore meetings actually about? In the end, Daniel says that he was told he would end up with Hermione. Why would he be promised to a muggle-born of no astonishing beauty and whom he hardly knew, and whom his parents did not know at all?

This brings me to my final, and greatest, disappointment with your story which is how you handled the romantic aspects at the end. In canon, the reason I ship H/Hr is because of the deep and meaningful friendship that they share, the powerful shared experiences, the ease they have in each other's presence, the slight whispers in Books 3&4, more overt and tantalizing hints coming forth in Book 5. In your story, however, this girl for Harry is Luna. Hermione from the outset is characterized as a girl Harry notices for the first time as strikingly pretty, and then he goes out with her. They never develop any kind of friendship upon which to build a more serious relationship. Hell, their conversation almost never ventures from stock couples-talk. Kind of like Ginny in Book 6. Which brings me to Luna. I thought that your Luna was a shining beacon at the end of the story. Simply put, you wrote one of the best Lunas I have ever read. The scene in the final chapter where she tells Harry of her love---heart wrenching. I was tempted to stop reading there.

Despite the negatives, I really did find this story enjoyable. In addition to a brilliant starting point, you wrote exciting action scenes that really carried me through to the end of the story. I also liked what you did with Harry's animagus, and how parseltongue became a focus of the story instead of simply a cool little footnote like it is in canon.

Simply ironic that Harry couldn't be killed by Voldemort or touched by Dumbledore but was killed by the incompetent Daniel. Megan, I hope you continue to write stories because you are a great writer. Should you choose not to post your stories at Portkey anymore please let me know where you will be posting your future stories.I'm simply disappointed with some of the reviewers' responses. Some are simply too rude. Critiquing is one thing, calling names is another.

I love your story and even the ending. To be honest, I actually was shipping toward a Harry and Luna for a bit because Luna was so well written. Don't get me wrong I ship H/Hr but I thought how you wrote about the relationship between H/L was good also.

I actually thought you left an open ending that way if you have some plot bunnies jumping in your head again, you will write a sequel. I sincerely wish you the best of luck and please ignore those rude people.

Great story. The end was unusual but that's good. It's refreshing to see something different. It implies a sequel but since I'm not into fourth year fics this story doesn't have to have one.

One thing confuses me though. Did Harry choose correctly. Is this the option that would give him all the happiness he wanted or would it leave him mildly content.

A brilliant start. The ending was total crap--unworthy of such a story.

oh jesus christ wow, what an ending to one of the best stories on portkey, when is part 2 coming because this is amazing, please bring it soon, ive been following this story since one of the first chapters and loved it all teh way, i hope you jkeep ur style the same for the next story

from chapters 45 to 47 i think it was your writing seemed slightly different and not as good as before, were you trying something new?
keep up the good work
-Guyro

I really liked the story. Yes I was a little disappointed by the end by I'm also very glad that he got another chance to save everyone and had a second chance of life more or less. Ignore everyone that said it was bad. It was actually very well written and i rarely ever say that about peoples writings on here. You're a very good writer though and don't just because of rude people.

I actually thought this was a H/Hr fic for a while...
Then you start talking about how Harry's greatest desire is to be a snake when Luna rubs the snake.
This is a piece of H/L rubbish

wow, you copped out worse than J.K. Rowling with her OBHWF ending...poor wittle author cracked under all the pressure. Pat yourself on the back, at least you didn't actually publish this B/S like J.K. Rowling did with HBP and DH. this BS is just anonymous internet work, you wont have to tie your real self to such utter crap in the last parts of this story.

That was a great story. Too bad it had to eventually end though. However I wonder how the future will turn out for young Harry now? Will he manage to save Serion, Oorjit, even Hermione? Or will one of them still have to be a casualty of war? Even better will he still end up with Hermione or will he be with Luna? The possibilities boggle the mind. The end of the story is oddly enough the biggest cliffhanger. So what are you planning on writing next?