Very well done! Nicely presented without the annoying spelling/grammar errors.

My only con on this story is that if I were in Hermione's shoes, (or Harry's, for that matter,) I would have given a lot more 'payback' than what you presented. If my spouse was treated like they were, I certainly would have given out more in the line of humiliation. I'm not quite sure if it would be allowed on this site, but the perfect payback would be to force the 'evil ones' to perform on each other somehow (polyjuice, Imperious, etc...) Now THAT would be humiliating!

All in all, well done!

this is very very very good
I hopr you update soon
Moo

Great story, I'm not usually a fan of fics that are THIS dark but you put the revenge and satisfaction element into it so well that I like it anyway. Good job.

This story was really intense and dark. I bet that was a hard story to write. Anyway, you did a good job. I am just glad that Ron got over his jealousy in fourth year so that that will never happen. This a dark, but really good story.

dang gummit! wouldn't you know it I didn't notice the complete word in the summary of this one when I found it! must say that for a dark!fic - I really really liked it! you have a wonderful imagination and I hope that it keeps getting worked out as you continue to write!
dilligas

ooooh a new story - awesome! gotta keep up with it for general purpose cause you are such a good author! great job!
dilligas

You're right, it was dark. Somehow though, I don't really think this is in character, for Ron and Ginny to become Death Eaters. I mean, if Harry and Hermione do get together, they might get really pissed off, but not to the extent of betraying everybody and killing them. But nevertheless, an intriguing one-shot.

A very well-done fic. I wasn't surprised that you would be able to do dark so darkly, and you do. The sexual language you use is particularly ghastly (in a good way!) The violence is simultaneously graphic and presented in an eloquent way that makes it inherently more readable and poetic. To just be graphic and gory for the sake of graphic goriness would've not made the fic as accessible, and its a great testimony to your abilities as a writer. I hope that a little bit of the spirit of this kind of fic will come into "Circle." It would add another dimension to that already rich story. The only thing I thought might have added to the quality of the fic is an actual sexual encounter-- maybe Hermione just is more detailed when she taunts Ron and Ginnyabout her and Harry having sex. I've read lots of great dark fics that deal with sex that have some kind of personification or element of sex in a more loving, "light" way that serve as a wonderful contrast-- to show us a glance of light so the dark is all the more . . . well, dark. It doesn't necessarily have to be a sexual act-- just some kind of contrast.

Oh wow.....now that was *really* dark! Remind me never to piss off your Harry & Hermione! *G*

Lisa

holy crap that was depressing lol Harry and Hermione seemed to be in their 'Circle's End' characters...I liked that. I love how powerful they are in that fic. Great job on this one. I actually read your 'Vacation' one-shot before this one so I ruined it for myself haha now im stuck being depressed Anyway, can't wait for more from you

How sad! Since I don't like Ginny one way or the other, I don't care what you do with her, but I have to say--I like your Ron in Circle's End much better. I love Bad Ass!Harry and Hermione. Great work as usual.

Well...I hate the rape and all the torture...but...vengeance is fair enough.....really apreciated this dark little piece. And I do love your other fics, specially Circle's End. Quite a gifted author you are. See ya soon.

PS- Im just read 'A Summer Vacation' as well...sometimes Im really sorry that the rules of the site dont let Harry get in bed with more than our beloved Hermione...I cannot take the image of that outstanding foursome happening out of my mind...heheheh It would be really fun for Harry....anyways...H&Hr 4ever!

loved the story. it showed how ron come go to the dark side, if he let his jealousy of harry get the better of him. was never a fan of harry and ginny anyway. harry and hermione make so much more sense.
loved it.

loved the story. it showed how ron come go to the dark side, if he let his jealousy of harry get the better of him. was never a fan of harry and ginny anyway. harry and hermione make so much more sense.
loved it.

Damn that was cool! a bit dark and.. graphic but cool nonetheless. God Im screwed up in the head to have sorta enjoyed that, but nothing like you my friend. You seem to.. not like Ginny much, from what Ive seen of the 20 odd chapters I read of Cirle. The whole evil Ron point was new though. Nice touch. I shall be awaiting your finish of Circle and Shadows.. I dont really like reading a story thats only In progress, I usually forget whats going on.