Very interesting perspective. Although not the exciting story, it was still a very interesting quick read. Although Justin seemed a little stalkerish and sad. but still very interesting and way to stick to your chosen perspective.

Is that...it? Oh. Well, okay. Well, it wasn't a bad story, don't get me wrong. It was a good idea that really pulled me in. I think you maybe should have concentrated a lot more on Justin's life and especially whatever's wrong with Mel. I don't really think the illness was brought into the fic very well and it was kind of random.

There are open endings. There are cliffies. There are strange, rising action endings. You didn't reach a climax yet and the story isn't really over yet. It just kind of started. If that's what you wanted then I'm sorry, I don't really like thist fic. If it's not then maybe you should re-read and add on some more because I'd like to see what happens next. Anyways, best wishes to you.

I liked it, but I think the story could have benefitted from a little more detail...there were multiple mentions of a "Clare," but no explanation, and there wasn't anything substantial about Otto.

I think that if you had delved into the various topics you discuss, the story could have been fuller and not so rushed-seeming, but I still liked it. The impartial (well, sort of) role Justin played in the relationship between James and Lily was cool and different from the usual story.

informatory? I think that you mean infirmery or something like that. Just to let you know

The months do go by really fast, don't they, I wonder why?

What happened to the letter Melanie must have sent to Justin?

Woooooohooooooooo!!!!!!!!!
great story, im gonna read ur other ones, i mighta read them all ready tho, coz iv read all the Lily/James completed fics on this site. I thought that was great, but is Mel gonna die, oh no!!!! Love it, thought it was gr8, keep up da good work!! I liked the idea of doing it from an outsider's point of view, Im inspired!!!!

re load the damn chapter please i need to know what happens next

Eeks! What's wrong with Mel? I've become atatched heh.

Love the style, very different, keep writing.

heeee. you can't stop right there.
cliffhangers. hmph ya have 2 hate them

Short. I didn't really like it. Hopefully the next one will be longer

mh
it was pretty short.
hope the next one is a bit longer.
now. update.

uhmmm... this is a little odd. i don't get it yet.... hmmm.,

Yesterday they started dancing around in the middle of the hallway. ---> oooww, that's so sweet!

are you gonna stop at the end of the year?

mmh yeah. i like this letter
*hurries up to read the next one*