Great first try considering your friend didn't know what fanfiction was!

Really cute!

^^

It was lovely XD

hehehe..

I'm going to be waiting for the next one..

is in progress right?

NV!

It's a nice story but don't you think that Jillian is a girls name?

Good story - but where did the name Jillian come from? Gillian (pronounced Jillian) is a female name and, at least in the UK, it would be like naming him Sue! Julian would work, but sounds rather too upper-class.

isn't Gillian a girls name? it was really good thought,i loved the flashbacks

good story for somebody's first time, but Jillian sounds like a girl name you shouldve named the baby jake or something, but anyway looking forward to read the other chapters.

JILLION!!!!! wtf!!!!!! no offence maybe it's just me but JILLION!!! JELLY JILLION!!!!!!

Cute. Absolutely adorable story. I love these type of stories. I'm writing one myself...I just need to update again...

Anyway, tell your friend, Eric, that he did a phenonomal job!

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Caity

Wow,that was a great start,very sweet and so perfect,it was amazing and very cute the whole chapter

You did a great job,i really hope that you post more soon and i hope that we are going to have more chapters

Your friend is really good and i really think that he is a very good writer,for his first ffc he did an amazing job

Just a teeny, tiny bit corny, but fun and enjoyable none the less.

I can't believe that I wrote this. It's cool to just sit and write and have fun though! Yay me!

Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.