A very cute little story. I actually thought that it was adorable because it just felt so sincere.  |
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That was so sweet! I love how Harry say the song to her! BTW It is called "You are So Beautiful" and it's by Joe Cocker. Anyway, very well done. HAHA I can't believe he actually read her diary! I would have smacked him! And yea I don't think Harry knows that confidental means 'Not for Harry's eyes'. LoL Well done  |
Author Feedback: thanks for the song info. i just found it on the net but i didn't know who had written/sung it or anything. but now thinking back on it i should have just googled it, right?
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ReboundSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/03/06
It got wayyyyyy too mushy at the end. But Im biased, I hate any love songs being sung  . Nice idea but, I liked the diary. Neways, keep writing H/Hr! |
Author Feedback: what can i say? i was in a mushy mood. like the day i wrote that i had mushy mashed potato and a piece of mushy pumpkin as well! 
thank you for the compliment though. |
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Pretty good story. A bit short, but enjoyable for a first fic . Keep it up!  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/03/06
Not bad for a first fic! Short and Sweet! The idea was great, but I have to say you could've put a tiny bit more story in it. But that's my opinion. Great job! |
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Your first time post was a whole hell of a lot better than mine! *shudders and is glad it's been deleted* But seriously, it is a good fic. I honestly didn't see anything wrong but hey, that's me. Again, good song fic. |
Author Feedback: thank you!
this fic has actually gone through about 4 major changes - you do not want to see what it was like at first. so glad i didn't post it in it's original form.
anyways i think i am going to see if i can extend it, a few people have noted that it's too rushed. |
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To be honest, I'm not a big fan of songfics, but this one was sweet; Hermione is still insecure about her looks, and Harry tries to reassure her the best way he can. I can envision Harry, who has never been very good at expressing his feelings, falling back on a song's lyrics to say what's in his heart. I can because I suffer from the same problem, and have done the same thing (although in my case I used recordings, since my singing would frighten a cave troll). Nicely done. |
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I loved it,it was really sweet and the way that he made her feel with those words where just amazing
I think that you did a great job for your first ffc and i think that you should keep writing,i really think that you are a very good writer
I would love to read more stories from you so keep the good work and write more even if they are just one shot but if they are so sweet like this one i'm sure that is going to be great |
Author Feedback: you'd like to read some more of my fics? well i'm working on a few more. lets hope they'll be up sometime soon!
and thanks for putting me as a favourite fic!!! |
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ChinaDollUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/03/06
Great job! I'm glad that you finally posted!
I must say I agree with Hotaru in saying that it should be a one-shot rather than a songfic.
Keep going!
ChinaDoll
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Author Feedback: thank you ChinaDoll
*looks suspiciously at username*
is that you Jess?
if it isn't well i am very sorry for probably freaking you out and if it is... what are you doing lurking around here seeing if i have posted yet?
i will see you tomorrow. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/03/06
SWEET!
I want a Harry too! LOL XD
Thanks for sharing it! Great job! |
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BiggyMUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/03/06
Portkey points eh? Riiight. Well I didnt think it was half bad at all. I dont really have anything to comment on, well written, has a plot, gave me something to do for a few mintues... All in all it was okay. |
Author Feedback: yes, portkey points.
if you are a user its what you get when you review. i am not crazy enough to think of such a thing myself. |
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HotaruSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/03/06
You wanted "constructive" criticism, so here it is... This is *not* a flame.
Great idea for a story, well told with only a few grammatical errors, but truthfully, it would have been much better as a simple 'one shot' rather than a songfic. The thought of Harry singing to Hermione, especially that song, brings to mind enough corn to supply tortillas to every Taco Bell in the free world for a year.
Oh, and the plot for this was good enough that it could stand to be a bit longer, in my opinion.
All in all, well done!
~Greetings from Ogi, Japan~
Hotaru |
Author Feedback: thank you!
i told you i loved constructive critiscm.
i agree with everything you have just said and i am about to go and edit it as soon as i finish here.but like i said it's only my first fic so i hope it goes better as i write more.
thanks!
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