Well, this story is... interesting, for lack of a better word!^^ Anyways, not quite something that one reads everyday and therefor I like it... kind of... *drop* Dunno... hope to see more chapters so that I can formulate a more accurate opinion! *g* Keep on writing!

EWWWWWWWWWWWWW! Thats soo fucking fucked up on sooo very meny levels. Your so queer for righting this fic. Oh no wait i cant say queer now can i the proper word is homosexual, queer suggest somthing abnormal and what could be more normal than a cock up a blocks ass.

“NO MORE FLAMES, YOU'VE BEEN WARNED FAIRLY. ANY DEROGATORY COMMENTS WILL BE REPORTED.”
- I’ll take that to mean that you on continuing this story, great, it’s loads fun.

Loved the first chapter, very Sin City. Chapter two had my head in a whirl. At first I thought it was a stake out with the auror guy observing who ever either from outside or from actually inside the restaurant. When the girl was murdered and no did anything I couldn’t help wonder at exactly how dark this world you created must be. When it turned out to be a play, I laughed at myself for being so silly.
I was planning to go to bed when I finished chapter three but nooo, you had to add a cliffy. That lead to four with to me was the bed so far. ATM I don’t see how or why you would need to bring Hermione back into the story, we’re doing just fine without her. Speaking of which, isn’t an officer doing drugs an oxymoron? I mean, drugs should erode your senses, I don’t see how Harry/Ron will be able to continue much longer if they're that heavily addicted.

(I really don’t want to comment on the sex but since everyone seems to have done so I am honour bound to follow suit…)

The male bonding didn’t make sense to me. On the one hand you explained the lack of a girlfriend for fear oh… blah, blah… yet they need a release. So why wouldn’t masturbation be an option? To me this says that regardless of how rough Harry was in chapter four, that’s not the norm. *cough* tender moments *cough* the real question now then is whether he can actually stay straight while ‘making love’ to his best friend. I know you want to say yes but after watching ‘Vanilla Sky’ (Cameron really freaked me out in this movie) I don’t think you can, unless it’s a female thing… mmm, if only I could run some tests… wait, no, then I’d have to sleep with my make friends too *sign* this is why I didn’t want to comment.

In closing; great work, nice words (it’s almost poetry) very use of language and… oh yea, a few of the phrases lost me. I haven’t had the need to reread sentences since high school… was that random? It sounded random…

Haven eaten and art full… anyway, like I was saying, great story. Love the fresh perspective and direction. Great writing though I have to admit that some of the phrases went over my head abit in chapter three. Four was great and five was funny. The only problem I have is some of the reviews ive read.

At the beginning of the chapter you cleary state what should be expected and the nesasary actions to take and yet still I see people complaining about slash/drug abuse and what not. Personally I can see Harry abusing drugs. Honestly, I’d expect some kind of substance abuse from canon Harry if he ever were to feel tempted to go ‘dark’. Another thing that bothers me is the amount of ‘big words’ that you use. I mean its obvious to me that you have quite the vocabulary so do some reviewers feel the need to remind you that this is a H/Hr ect. site? I mean, come on, give the author SOME credit.

As for the ‘drug abuse’ and ‘blasmepy’… refreshing, (was raised Christian btw) I was long over due for a ‘Dark! Harry’… actually, this isn’t dark. Its more midlife crisis. Im gonna stop here, I had this whoel rant in my head but this isn’t a forum.
Loved the story, (love chapter one and two the most I think) very well written and imo original. Three was was… well the phrases lost me abit but that probably had more to do with my smaller vocabulary. I was thinking to that you might want to change the speech style for each character, their too much alike at the moment. First I was reading Harry then it switch to Ron and honestly I thought Harry was referring to himself there for a sec… just a though.

ps. If Ron if off and on with Luna why is he turning to Harry? If you had left her out it would have made sence but now its abit contradictory. As I understand it they turn to each other so that any potentian love interest don’t fall pray to ‘scarecrows’, so why is/was/will he (be) dating Luna? Ill wait for you to explain their relationship (R/LL) later on in the story. If you plan to continue and you eventually reintroduce Hermione and Harry has this break down where eh confeses to his sins and utter shame of what he has become… I will definetly stop reading. I HATE THAT!! Lol

’Harry hangs his head in shame and says he’s sorry for getting angry, being human and for once in his life being just abit selfish.
Remus: “It’s ok Harry, your dead mommy and daddy are now happy with you.”
Hermione: “Yes harry, you’ve made progress. Keep it up and we might let you out of St. Mungus for a five minute walk.”’

Bloody love this story, seriously, all the 'light' fics are killing me. I really needed some Dark Harry today. I'll post a proper review when I get back, have a headache and havent even in more than 24h. Meh, what can I say, me and food have issues to work out... lol

Really, despite the negative reviews you are getting I truly do feel that this is going in a beautiful direction. It's different from the light-hearted "fluffy" fics they have on this site, it's nice...it's original and it's fun!

Thank you for the dark and detailed chapters, thank you for giving some insight as to why the characters are the way they are, and thank you for including some hard and heavy metal. I don't think music can drive me to sex, but then again...I haven't been influenced by it the way Harry and Ron are...

I actually like to read some slash and no one was so bad written like it.

Not to mention here is Portkey.

Give everybody a favor and delet it!

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You're weird. And I will remind you that this is an H/HR site not slash hun.

Boooooooo!

there's no way they could do five lines like that; they'd overdose. this story is really really weird. i really don't like the fact what you're saying about Jesus. that's just wrong.

Let me first begin by saying I think that you are a very good writer. It can be extremely difficult to write in the first and second persons, and I think you're doing a good job. I did get slightly confused for a few moments when you switched first person perspectives, but it was easy enough to figure out who it was a few sentences in.

I cannot deny that I find the content of this fic somewhat disturbing. Dark. But that is fine with me as long as the characters maintain the same identity as they do in the books. However, I'm not sure if yours do. I think in these reviews you say that it is only four chapters into the story, so I will wait it out and hopefully see some change. I just really cannot picture Harry as that sort of person. That is really my main hesitation with this fic.

The slash I could do without. I just cannot imagine Harry and Ron having sex, no matter how strung out on coke they are. But then again, I am a measly 18 years old and do not know the extreme effects of drug use. I have many friends who do drugs, so I know a limited amount of the effects. For that reason, I am accepting the slash.

I also think that those reviewers who have flamed and employed poor word choice need to grow up. Let us act like the adults that we are and accept others' viewpoints. I do not agree with everything in this fic, but I can appreciate it for its literary merit. You are a good writer and do not let anyone tell you otherwise.

I would like to see this fic continued to completion. I am curious to see how you will bring the book characters of Harry and Ron to light.

Good luck.

I really like the begining of this chapter it was integuing.

After reading the reviews for this story I just had to read it. The first chapter is very well written but I'm a little confused. Is Harry a Vampire? But all in all it was good.

hey,

wow...I love your way of writing Point of views, its great and i hope to see more of it.Anyways,I can't utterly believe that people have been hating som much to the story that they start to flame you!? AND TO ANYONE OUT THERE WE ARE H/HR SHIPPERS!WE ARE ALL CARING PEOPLE WHO KNOW HOW HARD LIFE IS! NOT ONLY THAT BUT WE SHOULD ALL HAVE OPEN MINDS!DON'T YOU ALL SEE IS THAT OPEN MINDNESS IS WHAT KEEPS OUR SHIP ALIVE?!?!

I love where this is going and i just want you to know that if you still get flames that bring you down, just remember that ill be here, reading and waiting for you to update...this isnt trash..it has some good potential..

not only that but u have got to have a lot of guts to put this in your story! I admire your confidence and i really hope to see more....and btw i luv ur other stories too!

That was the sickest chapter i've ever read on portkey. Why would you make them have sex there dudes. That is sooo gross, it was kinda cool that they were on coke but having sex with each other eww, wtf. Why, thats all I have to say just why. Why would you do that, its so sick and twisted. Was your gay your gay for life you dont go back. And even if harry was thinking of Hermione when he fucked ron it dosent matter he still fucked a man.

I hope you haven't gotten too many hateful letters yet. I like the story so far. I don't think that many people will read beyond this point and you must have a serious muse to continue writing it. But as long as you keep going I'll keep reading.