Old ChuckUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 22/05/06
Not really; you told the translator to give you "Of COARSE," not "Of COURSE." This made you describe the encounter as leading to disgust rather than pleasure. The problem is with your spelling, not the translator.
Your story is pretty good but you need to use great care in your technical preparation when you go for such a reach in the action. I liked the French but many in your audience are likely to be put off by it.
Keep writing. It's mistakes that bring us along and we grow by making mistakes.
Old Chuck |
Author Feedback: Yes I realize I made a few mistakes. But the translator doesn't translate properly. I have used that translators on other occasions with people who speak the language fluently and they laughed because it's not very good. I wondered if people would be turned off by it or not, and I found that most of them did like it. I will be revising this chapter before I post the next one. Thanks for the review  |
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Mani12191Signed | Chapter : 5 | Date : 22/05/06
Well I can't wait til you get the next chapter out whenever it may be (: Good luck with everything that's going on! |
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i like the way the story is going so far, kinda dramatic, so what happens next? does harry move to france or what? lookin forward to an update. |
Author Feedback: You'll have to wait for an update to get those answers  . Thanks |
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Is fine, don' worry 'bout it, it's well understood here. I hope everything works out for you, and I'll be patient, no complaining from me. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for understanding |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/05/06
did u take the line
"by the time i was twenty i was married to your father, and pregant with you" from
Dan Brown's "Deception Point" b/c he has a line exactly like that in the beginning of that book. |
Author Feedback: Nope, I've never even heard of that book. But I love Dan Brown's other work |
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It's understandable. some things are inevitable. I wish you the best of luck with everything and I hope all the bad things clear themselves up
keep it up
-megz- |
Author Feedback: Thanks |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/05/06
ooooooooooo i liked that. really embrising having the fight. but i liked this chapter.  |
Author Feedback: Thanks |
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ReboundSigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 21/05/06
Hey. Gd luck with whatevers goin on and movin. I look forward when you do get a chance to update! Cya! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 21/05/06
I know exactly how Hermione feels. The field me and my friends used to play in every day is now a giant movie theatre, several fast food resturaunts and a giant parking structure... |
Author Feedback: Aww that sucks. I know the feeling too. Thanks |
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another great chapter, im glad they finally got back together worked things out
so how many more chapters? when they gonna get married? when is hermione going to shove her new job and harry in her mum's face?
Cant wait update asap!
Luke |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you enjoyed the third chapter . I think I am going to rewrite it because I rsuhed through it. But I think there may be five chapters out of this story. |
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ooo! i love this story! the plot is really good. as are the characters! please update soon, because im excited to find out whats gonna happen next, hahaha. great story! |
Author Feedback: I will. Thanks!! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 28/03/06
Everything happened a little too fast. The use of "Mione" was a little over used. You write well, but a little bias. |
Author Feedback: I agree it went too fast. I'm thinking of rewriting it. I was just in a rush when I wrote it. |
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This was great! I love your work and i love hermione and harry stories! |
Author Feedback: Thanks! |
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just finished reading your fanfic.
i loved your story...
by the way, is this story finish? |
Author Feedback: Thanks |
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just finished reading your fanfic.
i loved your story...
by the way, is this story finish? |
Author Feedback: Nope not done |
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