H/Hr LoveSigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 10/07/06
Hey, this story is pretty good. Some of the chapters are very short, however. Hope all of your chapters from now on will be as long as this one.
Just a thought, isn't it a little rushed for James to already be fancing girls at age 11? Most guys aren't interested in girls that early. Just a thought. But still, great story.
If you have time, can you please read and review my story? I'm new to portkey and would love some feedback. Thanks. |
Author Feedback: Thanks, and sure I'll check out your story! I've paused this story as I'm not really in the mood to write it as of late. However I'm working on another L/J story, but I'm not going to post it until it's all typed up, so that I can post it in a timely fashion 
And James is James...he a playboy  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 29/03/06
Keep writig this is an awsome story so far but make Lily and James get together in fourth year at dance or somthing cause I think it's realy cool when somthing like that happens thank you and good night  |
Author Feedback: hehe I'm not sure when I'm going to have Lily and James get together, but I like to stick to the books, so it will be sometime in their Seventh Year |
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OH GOD!!!! I am SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SORRY!!!! Take as LONG as you need! That must be really really hard on you!!! I wouldn't know, since I've only lost pets, but I can understand that. I really love where this story is going. It's really funny, and very cute, so take as much time as you need. Write an angst, or something. Just don't stay away forever, okay??? Becuase I would miss you terribly. |
Author Feedback: awww...thanks I'm so sorry that I'm taking so long! Ahhh!! I'm swamped with homework as well, and my mom's friend (who I knew rather well) husband just died 
I'll update as soon as school gets out, I promise!!!! |
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This is getting good. I mean what happen at Lily's house. Are going to explain in detail in the next chapter. I like how u started the fighting and showing that James does really like Lily.  Keep Updating. |
Author Feedback: thanks you'll see what happens to Petunia soon, maybe the next chapter, ormaybe not I think that the was my best chapter (and longest) because I stopped trying to plan what would happen, and the wrote. I let my characters do what they wanted with me hehe, and I guess it worked  |
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hmm, I'm interested in the prank next chapter...I do love your writing style and the storyline so far, but I think it's a bit far fetched that James would facy Lily from their first encounter, Just because she's pretty. I see their relationship as a progressing one, and eleven year olds aren't usually that forward... but anyway, enough of my rambling. You are doing a good job with this story, and I'm liking it thus far! Keep up your good work! |
Author Feedback: Thanks James is a playboy, what do you expect? hehe. James hasn't exactly discussed that part with me yet. He could be putting on an act to confuse us all  |
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In my opinion, its too short. I mean i guess the other chapter will come earlier hopefully. But whatever your the writer. Good chapter. Keep Updating
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Author Feedback: chapter 5 is A LOT longer. This was just kind of a filler chapter. I'll be posting chapter 5 in a few minutes YAY!!!!! |
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lilyfan16Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 25/02/06
wow that was way short.. yet i still liked it/ please update soon if the chapters are going to be this short!
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Kaci |
Author Feedback: I'm glad that you liked it, but I can only update when I have my internet, which is not often |
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MexiChickSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 25/02/06
Truthfully it;s a little odd... I never saw James liking Lily at first sight, and I still dont, but it works well in your story. It's good so far. keep it up |
Author Feedback: *grins evily* it will all work out in the end. My characters can be annoying sometimes. James still hasn't told me if he actually liked Lily then, or if the playboy side of him was just showing through. |
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Nice start. I love the way the mother interfere in the conservation. It's looks like it's going to a great story |
Author Feedback: Thanks! I'm glad you like it so far I'll be posting chapter 4 soon enough, and that chapter is pretty funny |
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Author Feedback: Wow...it's like, 2am, and I'm online. That's because my mom is aslleep, and I'm doing "homework." The funny thing is, I am actually doing homework. It's just being interspersed with visits to Portkey, , but you already knew that, since you are totally not stalking me  Anyways, to all you crazy people who are reading this, if you don't have an account, go make one, and then review my story, and then you'll get Portkey Points!!!!!!!! w00t~~~!!!!!!
I know I'm wierd, and I'm proud of it All of us 'artists and writers' are a bit off in the head |
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I hope they have a nice encounter. please update soon! I love these James and lily stories. |
Author Feedback: You'll see. I think that James will like their encounter more than Lily will Anyways, I just updates, so check out chapter three! Enjoy! |
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lilyfan16Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 03/02/06
Ha ha ha... well that was very good. i love your idea of having a muggle-born witch/wizard have a pure-blood witch/wizard show them around Diagon Ally. That is a very good idea. I liked the story. so Please post more soon!
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KACi |
Author Feedback: Thanks! I hope you enjoy chapter three, I just posted it today! |
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lilyfan16Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 03/02/06
hmm.. well that is very very very very short.. so personaly i don't know how many people would read on after thaat chapter .. i am. but thats just cuz i wanna know what happens in cap 2. but really.. rather short!
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KaCi |
Author Feedback: Yea, I know it's short, but it's a prologue. The chapters are going to get longer as time goes on, because then there will be more of a plot to dive into and write about |
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Awesome, you're going back to the beginning of the relationship. I love that concept. Great way of dividing the two parts of the story, both in Lily and James Eyes. Hope you update soon.
Jessica Perez
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Author Feedback: Yea, I thought it would be fun to have them meet before they started at Hogwarts. The story is going kind of slow right now, because I don't want to rush it, but once they get into the routine of Hogwarts, it will start to go a little bit faster |
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AznLoverSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 02/02/06
I like this story all ready, it looks like this could have good potental... |
Author Feedback: Thanks, I'm really glad that you like it. If, at any time, you don't like where the story is going, just tell me why, and/or how you would change it. Constructive criticism is good |
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