Cas121689Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 07/01/06
it says "epilogue," but i'm hoping thats not the end  i really can't wait for more |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 06/01/06
I LOVED IT.
loved it. I almost cried when Ginny hugged them both and told them to come back safe. She really grew up in that moment.
5 stars |
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wow. that ended fast. maybe a continuation of this story would be great!! It was good, but just so sudden to end
Keep it up
Splash |
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RazzcalUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 06/01/06
I've always liked your stories. This one is lovely; you really get the "friendship" relationship amongst the trio. Your love angle with H/HR is gentle and has just the right feel to it. (I only wish JKR had the same feelings you do about H/HR. Who knows? Maybe with #7, she'll surprise us. I hope so.) Back to your story. Your progression is excellent. You come across with a maturity not all the Portkey writers have. You don't waste time with unnecessary rubish. My only criticism is your grammar. It's a bit of a problem and sometimes distracting. The sentence should be, "Harry and I will go sit down." Not, "Harry and me..." You can always know whether to use "I" or "me" by subracting the other name. In other words, in the sentence, "Harry and I will go sit down." Take out the name "Harry" and the sentence is, "I will go sit down." You wouldn't say, "Me will go sit down." If you were to say, "Do you want Harry and me to come with you?", the proper way to say it would be, "Do you want me to come with you?" Other than a couple of those grammar mistakes, I loved your story. Please write more. You have a real tallent for story telling. |
Author Feedback: Ah yes, a very common grammar mistake that countless others are guilty of. Thanks for pointing that out to me. I *did* debate with myself regarding that, actually... I chose to not be gramatically correct and use the "Harry and me" in order to capture the way regular people *speak*. Er. I'm not sure. I know that if I were writing things in the first person, using the pronoun "I", I probably would have incorporated the the "Harry and I" instead... but seeing as they were speaking these things, I tried to instill the imperfections of human speech. Heh. (That's my story and I'm sticking to it!  |
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h/hr4everSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 06/01/06
good one. i liked this alot, hope you'll write more of this. keep it up!!! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 06/01/06
Very good!!  Not too rushed, but not sparse either - excellent short story! Keep 'em coming! (Bugger HPB!!! ) 
JanieB
(I just realised I'm not logged on - I'm away from home - but that's me, JanieB!  ) |
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Anne USigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 05/01/06
Short and sweet. I like how Harry finally figured out why he let Ron and Hermione come with him, but not Ginny. His realization at the end was well done. Good work  |
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oh wow. i love this very very much. your harry is great and i was afraid for a moment that ginny was going to go along with |
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HdawneSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 02/01/06
that was a wonderful chapter! Just wonderful. I just pray that JK could have the forsight to write something in this manner that you and other writers here are PK are.
There's just so much tenderness between them ...its shame to waste. Thank God for HHr shippers and fanfics.
YOu're doing great. Can't wait for the next chapter. |
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HeraUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 02/01/06
love ur story i think its awesome!! plz update soon!
Hera |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 02/01/06
I should Harry shouldn't be telling everyone about it. Well.. maybe Lupin and Tonks and McGonagoll.. but telling all Weasleys isn't a good thing in my opinion..
But I like the kissing part though! Haha! |
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KaiaSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 02/01/06
The first chapter left me worried about H/Hr, but the second chapter made everything clear. When Harry told Hermione he needed her, "awe and wonder in his voice," I was just melting. Wonderful story. |
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o0o0o00o I loved it. At first I was like er.. where are the Harry/Hermione parts! But here they are! I love it! It was awsome!
Sad that only one part is left. :/ |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 01/01/06
Lovin the story,it's awesome please update as soon as you can |
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Zephyr892Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 01/01/06
Nice last 6 words.... Honestly... Good job :-) excellent story so far... so ill tune in next week... and see how it goes |
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